Chapter 26: SUSPICION

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Fantasy  |  House: All Star Story Writers

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Comments: 3

 

My breath caught, and with my hand covering my mouth, I raced over to help him. “Oh Hugh, let me help you out of there,” I offered, giggling uncontrollably at his dilemma. But it was obvious he hadn’t heard, as he continued to stare blankly into space, lost in thought.

“Penny for them,” I shouted, into his ear.

“Oh, I was miles away, just thinking what a wonderful day it’s been.”

“Yes it has, really wonderful.”

It's such a beautiful evening, why don't we go for stroll outside?” I suggested, grabbing his hands and hauling him out of the broken chair.

The night sky was clear, illuminated by dazzling stars, the evening tranquil and warm. Nothing stirred, even the tall trees stood like huge leafy statues.

We wandered hand in hand down the long winding driveway, with just the sound of chirping crickets invading the silence of the balmy summer night.

A sense of tranquillity washed over me as I breathed in the heady scent of sweet sunnyhockle, tangled in the hedgerows. “This is just magical, don't you think?”

When he didn’t respond, I realised he was still locked inside his own world, oblivious to everything around him.

I scanned his handsome face, but was shocked at what it revealed. Outlined in the shadowy moonlight his strong features were etched in hard, tense lines and a nerve in his tight jaw ticked rhythmically. But it was his dark, menacing eyes that really disturbed me and despite the warmth of the evening, an involuntary shiver surged through my body like ice cold water.

“What’s the matter Hugh? You seem so, oh I don’t know, just distracted, as if your mind is somewhere else. If there’s something bothering you, then please tell me, because we shouldn’t keep secrets from each other.”

“Oh I’m just a bit tired, it's been such a thrilling day, please don’t spoil it now,” he said, taking my hand and challenging me to a race back to the courtyard.

He sprinted up the driveway like an Olympic athlete, and stood waving at me from the archway, beaming broadly.

“What kept you? He asked, when I eventually caught up with him.

“I thought you said you were tired.”

“Oh I just needed a bit of a kick start, that’s what too much good food does for you.”

I tried to focus on the wonderful day we had spent together, and hoped that I would soon be able to put Scott out of my mind for good. But I could not dismiss the nagging doubt that he was hiding something from me.


Submitted: October 11, 2018

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Keke Serene

The beginning of the end, I hope for Hugh!

Mon, October 15th, 2018 7:58pm

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Downhill all the way!

Mon, October 15th, 2018 1:41pm

KathrynAcacia

Hugh just makes me sick, Eemay's so sweet and compassionate and he's such a monster!
You'd think he could come up with a better excuse for acting so weirdly, lol... "I'm just tired... let's race back to the courtyard!" No wonder Eemay thinks he's lying.
Hopefully Eemay listens to her instincts this time... and her dogs!

Tue, October 16th, 2018 8:06pm

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Its the author that is to blame. Can't believe how bad some of this is! Please dont feel obliged to read to the end. Am curled into a ball of shame here!

Tue, October 16th, 2018 1:20pm

KathrynAcacia

What??? No, don't be! I'm having so much fun reading this, it's an absolute blast! I love Eemay's voice, it's a really good mix of sarcastic but sweet, which makes her a really likeable character. She's naïve, but not to the point where I want to slap her silly and tell her to grow up, just enough that the dramatic irony makes me want to scream for her to RUN AND DITCH HUGH! I laugh out loud at her complaints about her hair, most stories with curly-haired protagonists just talk about their "luscious, flowing waves" and "beautiful ringlets" when in reality having curly hair is a lot more throwing it all up in a ponytail and praying you don't look like you have a bird's nest on your head lol (or maybe that's just me, I haven't quite figured out what to do with mine, but apparently neither has Eemay, which I appreciate XD). She thinks and talks like an 18-year-old girl (I'd know about that, ha!) and not like a mini grown-up. All the parts with the doggies make me grin like a fool and feel very happy inside, I haven't seen my dogs in over two months and I miss them, but reading about dogs makes me miss them less! I LOVE reading this, unless you want me to stop, I'll happily read on to the end.

Honestly, I didn't mean the part with Hugh was unrealistic, either, lol. He's so arrogant I'm sure he doesn't dream that anyone would DARE question that he's telling the truth.

I do get how awkward it is to have people read things you wrote a long time, though... Stars just read all of Indigo a few weeks ago and I almost DIED at some of the stuff I'd written... and that's a story that I edited with your critiques, so it was already a lot better than it was, lol. I really don't know how you got through it, I'm forever grateful to you! XD This book isn't like that at all, though, at least not from a reader's perspective, it's a really fun and enjoyable read. I do enough reading that I don't really want to do for school, I wouldn't read this if I wasn't really enjoying it.

Tue, October 16th, 2018 8:40pm

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Thank you so, so much for your encouragement, I'm actually amazed but thrilled that you're enjoying it so much!
Because both you and Stars began to read and comment, I decided to read a few chapters to refresh myself and that's when I began to panic. It just seems so immature and corny in places. Maybe I'll give it another edit at some point. Please carry on reading, I just didn"t want to think you felt obliged out of loyalty to me. As you have no doubt gathered, I am my own worst critic. Thankyou again, Kathryn, for for taking the time to reassure me. You have made my day!

Tue, October 16th, 2018 2:07pm

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