A Night to Remember

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Romance  |  House: Booksie Classic

Caden transfers to a new school. As hes walking to class, he sees a group of boys. He only noticed one, Caleb. They are more popular than him so they bully him for liking other guys.

Finally, after a long and boring school year summer has finally begun. Today is June 8, 2016. I am having the best day ever today. I got free ice cream from the ice cream shop and I found twenty dollars on the sidewalk. What could possibly go wrong this summer?

“Caden,” my mom said eagerly, “we are going to be late for breakfast with your uncle.”

“Mom I know, calm down,” I yelled back. I lie in bed for another twenty minutes when my mom finally comes up to my room.

“Caden Reed we need to go now!” she shouted as I slowly get out of bed.

“Why are we going out for breakfast anyway?” I asked.

“Because,” she said, “we just moved here and your uncle wants to do something nice, now get out of bed before I get your dad.”

“Ugh fine,” I groan as I walk out the door to the car. I hate driving places with my family. They always get to put whatever they want on the radio and I never get a turn.

“Dad can I listen to something?” I asked.

“In a little bit,” he replied, “I am listening to something right now.” What he means is that I cannot listen to the radio because he wants it to himself. He won’t even let my mom listen to something. After forty-five painful minutes we finally arrive at the restaurant.

“Hi Uncle George,” I said.

“Hey kiddo,” he replied, “you have grown since the last time I saw you.”

“Yes he has, hasn’t he,” my mom adds in.

“Let’s go eat,” said Uncle George. After an hour of sitting there eating, we finally left and went home.

“What are you doing today Caden?” my dad asks.

“I think I am going to go out for a bike ride to meet new people,” I reply.

“That sounds like a great idea,” he said. When we finally got home I grabbed a turkey sandwich and ran out the door. My first stop was at the park.

“Hello,” said a strange voice, “my name is Zoe.” She seemed very shy at first. She was short with long and green eyes. Her hair looked almost golden in the sunlight 

“Hello Zoe,” I replied, “my name is Caden and I just moved here from West Virginia.”

“What brought you guys here?” she asked.

I replied, “My dad got a new job here so we had to move.”

“Well I look forward to seeing you in school this year,” she said, “good bye,” and she walked away. I did not want to make any other friends yet because it was still too early. Time passed and we only had two months of summer left and I only had one friend.

That’s okay, I thought I’ll make new friends at school in two months.

A month and a half later:

School is starting in a few days and I’m actually very nervous. I usually never get nervous for things, especially school but this time is different. I moved to a completely different state and I have to re-make all of my friends. I’m surprised I actually had friends last year considering the fact that I am homosexual. Most people accept the fact that you like the same gender but others don’t. Last year I went to a performing arts school and most people there accepted me into their friend groups. This year I’m scared that’s not going to be the case.

“Mom,” I said softly, “do you think the people at my new school will hate me because I’m different?”

“No sweetie,” she said, “now go to bed you have a big day tomorrow.” And I went to bed. In the morning I woke up to the smell of bacon, toast, eggs, and potatoes cooking in the kitchen. The smell of the bacon grease filled my nose and made my stomach growl. The sound of the toaster popping with toast filled my ears. The sizzling of the potatoes in the pan was almost like an alarm clock because of how loud it was. I ran downstairs and grabbed a plate and started piling food onto it.

“Well I see you’re hungry today,” dad said. I didn’t say anything. I just sat at the table and shoveled food into my mouth.

“Sorry dad,” I said, “I really don’t want to be late for school.” And I ran out of the door to the bus stop. The bus finally came and when it did I got nervous. I stepped on the bus and when I got on I saw that there were many empty seats. I sat in the back of course because I’m in high school. We had about five or six stops and then we were at school. The school was huge. It had four different buildings. One for classes, the gym, the library, and the lunchroom. I couldn’t have imagined a bigger school in my life. When I got inside I went straight into the office.

“Hi I’m Caden Reed,” I said, “I’m new here.”

“Oh fantastic,” said the nice secretary, “right this way.” She led me to this enormous room filled with people.

“This is the auditorium,” she said as she led me to another room. We walked down the hallway to where the classes were and she showed me where I was going to have class.

“Since you are a junior, you will have class on the second floor,” she said calmly. We then walked outside to another building that again, was huge. This was the gym. There were four basketball hoops, two sets of bleachers, both with balconies, and an indoor pool. The bell rang and I went to class. As I was walking down the hallway towards the stairs, I saw a group of guys standing by the bathroom. They looked boor. They seemed opulent because they all had lacrosse hoodies on. But, I walked up to them and introduced myself anyway.

“Hi,” I said, “I’m Caden.”

“Go away,” said one of the guys, “we don’t want your kind here.” Oh my goodness they must not like homosexuals here. What am I going to do I thought.

“Can I at least know your name then?” I asked.

“Caleb Gray,” he said angrily. And then they walked away. I started walking to my class and I must have gotten lost because I didn’t recognize the hallway I was in. I saw a couple girls and asked them for help.

“Excuse me,” I said, “can you help me I think I’m lost.”

“Aren’t you that new gay guy?” she replied.

“Yes I am,” I said proudly.

“That’s nice,” she said, “what is your name?”

“My name is Caden Reed what’s yours?” I asked.

“I’m Kaelyn Cook,” she answered, “and here I’ll help you to class.” I started following her and we walked down another huge hallway. As I walked down towards my first period class I saw the same group of boys standing by another bathroom.

“Hey I told you we don’t want your kind here at this school,” Caleb yelled.

“What did I even do,” I yelled back, “I am just trying to get to class.” And I ran away. But I didn’t get very far. I ran towards my class but it was too late. They caught up to me and pushed me on the ground and started punching and kicking me. I tried to escape but I couldn’t. I fought so hard but they fought back harder. These guys were too dauntless. I yelled desperately for help but nobody came to my call. It all happened so fast. I couldn’t process what had just happened or why it even happened. I was so ashamed. Just then, teachers ran by to break up the fight. They had asked me what had happened but I didn’t know. I had multiple gashes in my head from the kicks and objects they hit me with. The teacher called the school nurse down but she said there was nothing she could do. The teachers called an ambulance and they rushed me to the emergency room where they stitched up my gashes. They also said I had a major concussion so they kept me there for four days.

“Where’s my mom?” I asked.

“She is right here Caden,” answered the nurse.

“Mom?” I said.

“I’m right here sweetie,” she answered, “I’m glad you’re okay.”

“Me too,” I said lazily.

“Mr. Reed,” the nurse interrupted, “you have a visitor.” She stepped out of the room and all of a sudden Caleb walked in. I was shocked. The guy that just beat me up for being gay is visiting me in the hospital.

“Look,” he started, “I’m sorry for what I did to you, I feel horrible.”

“It’s okay, I guess,” I said calmly, “maybe we should get to know each other more.”

“I think that would be great,” he said excitingly. He proceeded to tell me what he likes and what he likes to do for fun and I did the same. He didn’t lack candor. He told me everything and I told him everything. It turns out he was the antithesis of what I thought he was and we had lot in common. More than I ever expected. I told him about the guy I used to date and how he cheated on me and the chagrin I felt when it happened. I never expected he would know so much about relationships. He helped me so much through the months of me going to my new school. One day, he randomly showed up at my house and said:

“Hello Mrs. Reed,” he said, “is Caden home?”

“Yes he is hold on,” she answered. As soon as I heard my mom call me I jumped up from my bed and ran downstairs to see what she needed. When I got downstairs I saw Caleb standing in my doorway. I was shocked. I didn’t think that he would come to my house to talk to me after what happened at school.

“What do you need Caleb?” I asked.

“I wanted to see if you wanted to go out to the movies or something,” he said.

“Oh that would be great,” I replied, “when do you want to go?”

“How about now?” he asked. I stared at him for a minute and then stared at my mom. She glanced back at me and nodded her head and gave me twenty dollars.

“What movie do you want to see?” I asked.

“How about ‘A Night to Remember’?” Caleb answered.

“That sounds great,” I said. I told my dad where we were going and we left for the movies. Caleb insisted on driving because he wanted this to be ‘special’. I don’t understand why he wanted it to be special. We’re just going to the movies and getting dinner. That’s not really ‘special’. When we arrived at the movie theatre we bought our tickets and got popcorn and candy. It was dark when we got in the theatre. We sat down in the back row and that’s when it happened.

“Caden,” he started, “you are the most wonderful boy I’ve ever met.” “No, I’m not being obsequious… I actually really like you.” “I know this might not be a good time but… will you go out with me Caden Reed?”

“Oh my,” I said happily, “Since the first day of school I had a crush on you and I never thought you would want more than amity.” “But yes, yes I will go out with you Caleb.” Happily, we sat there and watched the movie. After the movie, we went out to a fancy restaurant and ate dinner.

One Year Later

It’s been exactly one year since Caleb asked me out. I’ve had the best time with him. I love him. He makes me happier than any guy I’ve been with. You could even say I am vehement about him. I still remember the day he asked me out. We were watching the movie ‘A Night to Remember’.

“Mom,” I said, “I have something to tell you.”

“What is it honey,” she said.

“Do you remember when Caleb and I went to the movies?” I asked.

She replied, “Yes honey.”

“Well…,” I said excitingly, “he asked me out that night and we’ve been dating for a year!”

“That’s so nice Caden I’m so proud of you!” she exclaimed. There was a knock on the door. I walk to the door and open it up.

“Hello?” I asked.

“It’s me, Caleb,” he said, “do you want to go out tonight?”

“Sounds good let me get my coat,” I said as I rushed upstairs. I ran so fast that when I was back downstairs, I was completely out of breath. It was ephemeral though. I had made plans for a time when we went on another date and he just so happened to want to go on one today. This time when we went out I drove and said it was ‘special’.

“Where are we going? he asked.

“You’ll see,” I said. I was so eager to get there. What I had planned was a picnic on the hillside with the sunset later on in the evening. This is going to be the perfect night. I finally stepped out of the car and set everything up. I took him out of the car and sat him down.

“Alright, take the blindfold off,” I said. I heard him gasp.

“This is beautiful,” he said, “just like you.” I served him dinner and then me.

“Caden,” he said, “I love you.” And then we kissed.

“Well,” I said, “this truly is ‘A Night to Remember’.”

Submitted: November 15, 2016

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Jonah Ryan

I think what you have here is a decent first draft but really needs to be looked over a few more times. And please, nothing I say is meant to offend or upset you as a writer, it is just my honest critique and only meant 100% to help, not be mean or snide or shitty or anything...

I think your story is interesting, but it is very rough... the biggest issue I had is that a lot of events just seem to happen for no reason and very abruptly as well... Caden getting beat up in the hallway, yes it can happen, but likely not on the first day of school... in fact going into his first day of school you made a point of saying how Zoe was the only person he had met and in their brief exchange he never once mentioned that he was gay... how would Caleb and his friends even know he was gay at the time? Did he move to a small town where a small town where rumors spread quickly, etc...? Basically, I'm curious how the information got out without him telling anyone... his parents seem really accepting, maybe they told people and it spread from there...?

I also find it highly unlikely that Caleb and his friends would beat down the new student on their first day of the new school year, especially since I am still confused how they would even know Caden is gay... he admitted to one girl in the hallway (don't remember her name) and did she suddenly go and tell everyone in the school instantly?

Furthermore, if he was attacked to the point of being sent to the emergency room it is impossible that Caleb would have just been able to stroll in a few hours or whatever later looking to talk and apologize. In all likely hood he and his friends would be detained by police, expelled from school, and have possible hate crime charges levied against them.. Caden seems naive enough to give someone like that a second chance, almost immediately, but I just don't see Caleb visiting him in the hospital as being very realistic...

it would make more sense, I feel, if Caleb was expelled from school or something for the semester and returns months later and the two are forced to be say lab partners or something and from there they can begin to mend their ruined relationship.... but instantly is too much... I don't know any parent that would allow their child to turn around and go out with the other kid that just sent him to the hospital.. y'know?

I think you have a decent story over all, but I think if you expand on it, play it out from the view points of different characters within the story, over an extended period of time it could be even more powerful... like maybe have a part where Caleb has to come to their house to work on a school project and have the entire chapter be about his mom standing silently in the kitchen drinking a glass of wine... unable to forgive the guy that sent her son to the hospital, but being forced to watch as they work closely and develop a bond together...

I don't know, those are just the types of things I think about when reading a story like this. I think yours has a clear direction on where you want it to go, I just think you need to rethink how you want your characters to get there is all...

Anyway, that's all... like I said, I don't mean for anything I said to offend or be offense, but critiques are part of writing... hope you're able to take even a little something away from what I've said today.

Have a good day.

Tue, November 15th, 2016 5:12pm

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