Broken

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: True Confessions  |  House: Vintage Publishing

Cartas para el hombre que amo (Letters to the man I love)

With a heavy heart I sleep tonight,

the broken heart you left behind.

And while my tears keep running free,

I am being consumed so silently.

You said too much and you explained,

but it doesn't justify my pain.

The pain, the hurt that you ignored,

and everything else that I abhor.

And here I am with so much fright,

and there you are thinking you're right.

What am I supposed to do?

How am I supposed to bear?

How simple it seems for you,

as if you don't even care.

My heart was one I could not share,

you came along, and love is there.

And yet you left while I am still here,

picking up pieces and drying up tears.

So careless and so vain,

What of my pain you have to gain? 

 


Submitted: November 30, 2016

© Copyright 2021 jaylisbeth. All rights reserved.

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hullabaloo22

Smooth to read and very expressive. Good job.

Wed, November 30th, 2016 6:35pm

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Thank you very much

Wed, November 30th, 2016 10:42am

RONIT BANERJEE

Very good writing though you did not break them into verses it rhymes perfectly,fantastic keep going

Thu, December 1st, 2016 2:27am

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Thank you very much for the feedback.

Thu, December 1st, 2016 11:01am

iloveremedy

*finger snaps* i could picture whats going on...this part of life sucks

Fri, April 28th, 2017 2:53am

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Yes it does. Thank you so much for the comment. I really appreciate you taking the time to read my poem.

Fri, April 28th, 2017 7:30am

Rehmat Tanzila

Perfect!

Tue, May 2nd, 2017 10:01am

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Thank you. I appreciate it.

Fri, May 5th, 2017 5:58am

carmen2193

Wow...depicted the pain exactly... Very well done :-)

Thu, May 4th, 2017 8:08am

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Thank you very much.

Fri, May 5th, 2017 5:58am

Spyguy

I wish with all my tender heart... That this, your boyfriend, had some smart!
Why he left you, is unclear... Better quality, & devotion you need near!
If he don't care, or he don't share... He shouldn't see your underwear!
Find a body who can see... All you are, & lift you free!!
Make your life a Princess dream... Fill your heart with love & steam!
Take you to a better place... Put that lovely smile on face!!

Wed, May 17th, 2017 12:16am

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Awww, thank you so much for taking the time to write this to me. Words can't express how much I appreciate the gesture.

Wed, May 17th, 2017 7:22am

Tom Allen714

I enjoyed your poem,very nicely done...You are no stranger to heartbreak...Tom...

Wed, May 24th, 2017 10:41pm

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Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. And yes, you are right, no stranger to heartbreak.

Wed, May 24th, 2017 3:46pm

ShadaStorm120

I'm making my way through all the poems for the 'Bare Your Soul' contest for voting, and decided to of course, comment on them all as well, even though I'm not much of a poet, therefore, I can't really offer much of a thoughtful comment, but I thought people would appreciate it anyway, haha. But yeah, I liked this one quite a lot. It flowed well and the emotions within the piece is very well written :) great job

Thu, June 29th, 2017 11:36pm

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Wow I am honored. Thank you so much :)

Thu, June 29th, 2017 6:08pm

Sugar Shane

love it, sad many have experienced this but it is how we rise from the ashes that count once burned

Tue, July 25th, 2017 4:54pm

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Thank you very much for reading, and yes you are correct.

Tue, July 25th, 2017 9:56am

Small Writer 12

WOW, WOW!
I liked this poem too much and I liked the sentiments you portrayed here, I wish I could write a poem like this!
Well done :-)
~ sW 12 ~

Tue, July 25th, 2017 7:07pm

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I really appreciate you taking the time to read and comment, this one was very personal to me, words just came out naturally at the moment. Thank you, dear.

Tue, July 25th, 2017 12:09pm

Katilly

This is a beautiful poem with a great flow in the words you have chosen. It sounds as if it's coming straight from the broken heart of someone that has experienced this. This is an amazing job put into an amazing poem:)

Sat, August 5th, 2017 8:42am

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Thank you so much. I meant every word.

Sat, August 5th, 2017 5:13pm

Christian Taylor

I love this poem! Beautifully done, love the themes expressed, and very well written! Love it!

Sun, August 6th, 2017 4:56pm

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Thank you very much. This poem is quite personal

Sun, August 6th, 2017 5:55pm

genericman

A wonderful poem of relationships and love in motion.It is only when we meet our soulmate if we ever do that a warm and heartfelt relationship STAYS.

Thu, August 10th, 2017 3:02am

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I couldn't agree with you more. Thank you so much for taking the time :)

Thu, August 10th, 2017 5:13am

Alex S. Foley

I never truly understood how the women I love and leave felt until I read this. Next time I'm about to give that speech and walk out the door I'll pause for a second and remember your poem then break her heart.

Sat, August 12th, 2017 3:04am

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I appreciate you taking the time to read this special poem of mine. I wrote this during a very difficult time in my life.

Fri, August 11th, 2017 10:00pm

johngumbs

Your poems are very nice. you're a poetess.

Sat, August 12th, 2017 9:21am

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Thank you, they come from my heart.

Sat, August 12th, 2017 8:00am

johngumbs

A very nice poem. yo''re a poetess.

Sat, August 12th, 2017 9:24am

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Thank you very much

Sat, August 12th, 2017 8:00am

ChristopherErick

Excellent. I loved every line. It speaks truth. And I will have to say that these circumstances in life suck so badly.
Your rhyming was right on que as well.
Very flowing and catchy. Great writing here.

Thu, August 17th, 2017 11:15pm

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Thank you very much for the kind comment :)

Thu, August 17th, 2017 4:50pm

LeParadisNoirPoetique

He did not deserve your heart, I hope you found the one to make it start. The little time I have known you all I see is beautiful white strength. You are not a building to be damaged, you are a tree to breathe air. I'll stand by you when you need the building of friendship to support you. The only air your heart needs is the air that you breathe in the sunlight. You are the most beautiful girl that someone pure should fall in love with. It can't rain all the time, so dear Lisbeth your tears won't fall forever. I hate seeing you in pain my dear, I'll eradicate all your fears.

A little poem to make you feel better anytime you feel broken. This is so bittersweet, and hauntingly beautiful. In this piece your heart is writing the words, and it is yearning so much. It is speaking for your soul, like it is lost. You write some of the hardest hitting stuff, and I wish I could of been your friend alot longer than I have known you, so that I could support you during your darkest times. You write from the heart and soul, and the realism in your work is undying. I hope you feel like this no more, and that your heart is fully cured. This is a wonderful poem, powerfully beautiful, and a reminder why I don't want to see my friends hearts broken. I hope you are in a better place Lisbeth :)

Mon, November 13th, 2017 1:32am

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Thank you, Dexter, I am much better today. I have cut ties and I haven't looked back :)

Sun, November 12th, 2017 7:54pm

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