It is dawn though looks like dusk
Has filled the Jasmine with a musk
Come! Let us fuse into the serenity
Come and dance our ways to eternity!
Seems like dawn has dawned on the earth
Let's see how it celebrates its birth!
Did you notice the sky's necklace being taken off?
Or reckon there's no wink and no cough?
Come! Let us think the matter over
Come and search the culprit. Hover!
Listen to the victim patiently
For it has lost its pearls suddenly!
Here see the sun that unveiled the shawl of night
Is now filling its folds with diamond bright!
Come! Let us witness this mischievous game
Come and observe it's nothing the same!
Curtains at the top are drawn aside
Clouds are pale and pink as a blushing bride!
Stars have drowned in the flood of fiery beam
Moon has disappeared with a smiley gleam!
Come! Let us uncover the convered reality
Come and see that sun's sweet brutality!
No moon seems blinking no star throws a wink
No clamor no clatter not even a clink!
Dropping the droplets of the dew
Night angels depart with their crew!
Come! Let us bid farewell to the notion of dearth
Come and greet dawn with warmth and mirth!
Blades of leaves are bathed and wet
As the dew drops licked and left to get them set!
Dear! The dawn has appeared
Cup your hands; erase the thought of being impaired!
Get determined to vanquish at every step
Do not think of the consequence; nail the husk!
Because,
It is dawn though looks like dusk!
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This one is absolutely beautiful!
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Thank you so much. I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Well written with a good, but different sort of flow. You could have crafted two poems from this. Well done and thanks for a well crafted read.
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Oh thanks for an honest opinion ! I really appreciate the response! ^_^
The poem was PURE BEAUTY....
Small elements that make a big difference in making it touch.
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Thanks for reading ..I appreciate your comment :)
WOW! TR's, this is your best yet. The flow of your lines and the passion within each sentence, it's just so majestic, so subliminal. Your wording and your metaphors, they are captivating. I am definitely adding this to my shelf.
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Oh my God .. oh my God thank you Jaylisbeth ... your comment took my breath away! Seriously I'm so glad you enjoyed it ... thank you
I'm making my way through all the poems for the 'Bare Your Soul' contest for voting, and decided to of course, comment on them all as well, even though I'm not much of a poet, therefore, I can't really offer much of a thoughtful comment, but I thought people would appreciate it anyway, haha. This one is different from the usual poems I read, but I liked it more and more as I read. It's quite beautiful, the setting and way it's worded.
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Ah well I'm so glad you liked my poem ...Thank you ..hey it's alright your already set comment means a lot ^_^ Thanks ..I appreciated being so appreciated !
Excellent painting with word, Rehmat!
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Thank you Mike I'm glad you read it
Wow, I really love how unique the flow and structure of this is-- so richly described and detailed. Liked this a lot! :)
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Ohh thank you Trishala ..I so glad you liked it
A beautiful poem. You have great talent and expression, I'll look to the sky's this evening whilst reading it aloud. Also I'll look at other works you have done and review. -- Steve Rowell
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Thank you so much it really means a lot! Yes do that and tell me how did you feel! Well! I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Thanks, cheers!
a poem is more beautiful than you :)
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Lol Well Im glad you liked it!
Very nice. The poem flows nicely!
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Thank you so much for the read! I appreciate!
Great works of art. It really has enticed my emotions. Great use of figures of speech. i am really impressed by this poem.
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I'm glad. Thank you so much for taking time to read! Cheers!
A beautiful, lush poem that reads like an exhalted hymn reminding of religious songs of India as well as medieval Persian poetry. Power and energy are surging through this!
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Thank you so much for reading. It means a lot! I'm so glad you loved it! Cheers!
Wow! It's an amazing,wonderful,awesome,beautiful,and nice poem !!!!!!
I loved it too much !
Keep writing amazing poems TR's :-)
~ sW 12 ~
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Thank you so much SW ! I really appreciate your lovely comments and your time dear! Love!
First off I do apologise for being late getting to this poem. I'm so busy writing my own world that I am a slow reader :p
I love poetry, and the first thing I will say is that I love this poem. You give me the one thing I love in any form of writing, and that is imagery. I don't like description, so I am thankful I can fly to the moon on the beautiful flight of your imagery. I don't like the sun, hate it in fact, but I love the moon and stars, because of the solitary serenity they bring.
Your rhyming is exotic with beautiful placement, and each connects to finish off your sentences beautifully. I feel that when the moon appears tonight, I could read this poem again and be in perfect harmony. I love the interpretation that when the moon departs, it is because of the brutally from the sun, and it wakes us up from that solitary serenity by taking it away.
Your poetic metaphors of the moon are a journey, and you understand that about poetry. Each word and sentence has meaning, so each part of that journey you paint beautifully with meaning. You describe the moon as our friend, and that we can have our most beautiful moments together under her light, and when the sun comes out, she can't offer that.
Rehmat this deserves to win any poetry contest. So beautiful with its contrasting meaning of the moon and the sun. I absolutely love this, and you are quite special when it comes to poetry. Keep up the beautiful work :)
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I'm bound to say I didn't write that beautifully but the comments I've received are breathtaking. I really appreciate your appreciation AND that you have so beautifully described my poem. Thank you so much for such beautiful amazing comment and study of the poem. It really means a lot!!!!
This is just absolutely beautiful. I love the imagery here. It pulls my mind in and I can see all of this. I hit the like button. Very very well written. It gives the subject such poetic justice. Two thumbs way up. Bravo.
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Awww thank you so much for your kind apprecition
Beautifully expressed the nature very deliberately and hit the amazing ideas. Stunning job.
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Thank you so much !!
excellent writer,,,,,,, wonderful
may you live long life, be happy always...
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Aww thanks for the wishes and read as well :)
Mesmerising!
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Thank you so much!
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