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Submitted: March 10, 2017

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TITLE: MATCHLOCALE:

AUTHOR(s): BelberSETTING: Inwood, New York

PRODUCER: n/aPERIOD: Modern

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ELEMENTS ATTACHED: n/aBUDGET:

DRAFT DATE: 1/30/11COVERAGE DATE: 3/14/12

PREPARED BY: Kevin Lynch


 

GENRE     PRIMARY: Drama

     SECONDARY:

 

CHARACTER BREAKDOWNS:

 

Tobi Powell (M/60’s) Eccentric ex-dancer and choreographer.

 

Lisa Davis (F/30’s) Pretty woman attempting to deal with the strains of a marriage on the rocks.

 

Mike Davis (M/40’s) A man attempting to come to terms with his own identity.


 

LOGLINE:A husband and wife seek out a man who could be the husband’s father in an attempt to bring closure to lingering demons in both of their pasts.






 

TITLE: MATCHDRAFT DATE: 1/30/11

AUTHOR: BelberCOVERAGE DATE: 3/14/12



COMMENTS:

 

This script benefits from A wonderful writer utilizing exquisite dialogue to push the film. As a result it has an older feel to it, like that of Dial M for Murder, where the director wasn’t afraid to put a steady camera on his actors to allow the writing and their talent to carry the film. Unfortunately, the script gives us only three characters in one setting for 90 straight minutes. As a result it feels more like a play or a short-film and I don’t believe it could hold up on the big screen.

 

The opening gives a quick introduction to our three main characters without telling the audience much about who they are. However, once the characters come together the script does a wonderful job of slowly revealing exposition to give us a glimpse of how each of them came to find themselves here. The dialogue is unrelenting and never stagnant and keeps the audience engaged throughout. The characters are three-dimensional, well developed, and easily relatable; and by the end of the film I felt a genuine connection to all of them.

 

The first two acts are fantastically paced and have an underlying beauty which is undeniable. Unfortunately, the third act lacks the deep emotional undertones of its predecessors and instead adopts a prototypical “Hollywood” sentiment that the rest of the script did a masterful job of avoiding. In particular,  one of the final scenes where Mike breaks down to his knees and three characters share a moment where they all hold hands in silence; it’s simply sappy sentimental crap. The resolution lacks the emotional payoff that the first two acts did a lovely job of setting up. Where the first act belongs to Toni and the Second act to Lisa, the third act is supposed to be dedicated to Mike when we finally see him deal with his lifelong demons. But what is given to us is too cheap and leaves his character far more superficial in development than the other two.

 

The biggest problem unfortunately is the very nature of the script. While it does remind me of films such as Dial M for Murder with its captivating dialogue which continues for long periods of time on end, Hitchcock knew well enough to eventually change characters on screen or at least allow for a passage of time between scenes. With this script we get none of that; it is 90 straight minutes of continuous interaction between just three people. It is a glimpse into part of a day in three people’s lives. As a result it feels like a feature length short film. And while the dialogue truly is gripping and well paced, I’m afraid it is more successful on paper than it would be on screen. Perhaps one way to amend this monotony would be to show flashbacks of Toni’s life as he recounts the events. But it definitely needs a counter-story to keep it from feeling like a recording of a stage play.



 

TITLE: MATCHDRAFT DATE: 1/30/11

AUTHOR: BelberCOVERAGE DATE: 3/14/12

 

 

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SCRIPT: CONSIDER

WRITER: ROCCEMEND

 


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