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Unbreakable Premonition

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Status: In Progress  |  Genre: Fantasy  |  House: Review Chain

A world where social class and the ability to use magic defines your future. A magical mishap bonds the two most unlikely people together. These two have to learn to deal with the contempt from
each other and their peers. As well as dealing with the emotional, mental, and social issues they both bring to this unfortunate relationship. Watch as this bond changes them both and the views of
others, forever changing the rules of society.

This is a story I wrote a while ago. My friends really liked it and said I should try posting it online to see what other people thought. I am going to post a few chapters at a time to see what
people think. If they would like to read more I will post the rest. It's a fantasy/romance with a bit of action in it. I would really appreciate it if people would tell me what they think.

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Submitted: May 24, 2017

The sun was piercing through the cracks of the blinds, creating bright streaks of light in the seemingly dark bedroom.  There I wa... Read Chapter

Unfortunate Event

Submitted: May 24, 2017

I usually arrive at the school about 8am to start cleaning the cafeteria after their breakfast.  When I am done there I like to mo... Read Chapter


Submitted: May 24, 2017

The next morning I wake up and all my senses are still heightened but seem to be more regulated.  I head out to do my usual exerci... Read Chapter

Truth Revealed

Submitted: May 24, 2017

That night I have a pretty crazy dream.  I dream that I am being forced down on the bed by a couple of shadowy figures and slowly ... Read Chapter

Weekend Training

Submitted: May 24, 2017

The night ends up being a lot of fun and I end up getting pretty drunk. I wake up the next morning with a horrible hangover.  Then... Read Chapter

Trust Forming

Submitted: September 18, 2017

Again the next morning I wake up with Ashley asleep in my bed.  This time she is wearing one of my t-shirts and underwear cuddled ... Read Chapter


Submitted: September 18, 2017

  So... We end up going down there and she is totally nervous the whole time.  They call her away and they allow her to k... Read Chapter

The Fated Return

Submitted: September 18, 2017

7 months have passed now and I just figure this is my new life. I am asleep in my apartment next to my girlfriend.  That night I h... Read Chapter

Dance of Fate

Submitted: September 18, 2017

The next couple of days just fly by and its the night of the dance.  I get dressed in the best clothes I can find and head to the ... Read Chapter

Tragedy Revealed

Submitted: September 18, 2017

That night I have a very passionate dream about Elizabeth.  We are lying in my bed with me over her as we are making out... Read Chapter


Submitted: September 18, 2017

 I get woken up sometime later by someone rubbing their fingers through my hair. As I open my eyes I see Ariya sitting on my bed loo... Read Chapter

Here We Go Again

Submitted: September 18, 2017

The next few days go by pretty uneventful. They even post guards outside my door making sure I get no visitors. I pretty much just keep... Read Chapter

The Cruise

Submitted: September 18, 2017

When we show up the ship is huge. It looks to have 7 or 8 decks to it. We get escorted on board and we are just looking around in awe. ... Read Chapter

Meet The Parents

Submitted: September 18, 2017

Sometime in the middle of the night the ships alarm starts going off as red blinking lights begin going off in our room. We both get st... Read Chapter

Truth Revealed

Submitted: September 18, 2017

 The vacation comes close to ending and we are sent back to the school. We register for her final year of her classes. I meet up w... Read Chapter

Passionate End

Submitted: September 18, 2017

Ariya has been trying everything she can to drive me crazy with this no touching bet. Melissa and Elizabeth also give her different ide... Read Chapter

Painful Restart

Submitted: September 18, 2017

School eventually starts back up and I get woke up by the intercom going off telling all students to head down to the auditorium for or... Read Chapter

The Hard Way

Submitted: September 18, 2017

The next morning I guess I wake up early and notice we both fell asleep with our cameras on. I smile seeing Ariya still asleep then hea... Read Chapter

Trouble In Paradise

Submitted: September 18, 2017

Sometime later I get woken up by an explosion shaking the whole place. Immediately I jump up running to my door opening it seeing dead ... Read Chapter

End of it All

Submitted: September 18, 2017

I just stand there watching her walk away also frustrated by this whole situation.  I look back at the class room seeing the peopl... Read Chapter

A Bad Dream Or?

Submitted: September 18, 2017

Suddenly I jump awake almost falling out of my chair. My heart is racing and I begin looking around unsure where I am. I hear chuckling... Read Chapter

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