The Colorful Butterfly

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: House of Ghosts

There are people who hide a lot inside them, even though people envy them :(

 

 

The sadness started spreading in the valleys

And the butterfly started dancing gracefully to forget the sorrows

 

 

All of the people asked about the secret of her dancing

In the midst of those sad endowments

 

Some said she dances because of her happiness

Others said she dances to forget her sadness

 

And in one of those sad days

The butterfly began to dance her strange dance

 

 

And suddenly she started falling down due to the weakness of her wings

And her colorful colors began to disappear and fly with the wind blowing as tears

 

The butterfly began to crumble into soil

And the crumbs flew with the winds of the sad valley

Oh, poor butterfly

People envied you even though you were crushed from inside

 

 

 

 

 


Submitted: July 21, 2017

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MissMattie

I know the tears... Beautiful way of writtening.

Fri, July 21st, 2017 4:21pm

MissMattie

I know the tears... Beautiful way of writtening.

Fri, July 21st, 2017 4:21pm

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Thanks a lot for reading the poem and for commenting too! :-) I'm glad you liked it
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Fri, July 21st, 2017 9:45am

hullabaloo22

This struck me as so sad, but good job with it. All those little butterflies made for an excellent look for the poem too!

Fri, July 21st, 2017 7:42pm

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Thanks so much!! ^_^
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Fri, July 21st, 2017 12:53pm

Cupcakesky12

Its very nice poem
its really fantastic how u describe it
well done sweetie :3

Fri, July 21st, 2017 8:45pm

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Thanks a lot Cloe! glad you liked it :-)
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Sat, July 22nd, 2017 12:31am

Aira crimson

It was touching and had a deep meaning to it nice work.

Sun, July 23rd, 2017 11:39am

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Thanks a lot for reading and for commenting too! glad you liked it :-)
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Sun, July 23rd, 2017 4:50am

jaylisbeth

Such a heartfelt piece. I like your structure very much, especially how you separated your stanzas with butterflies. Very unique :)

Tue, July 25th, 2017 7:11pm

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Reading this comment made me smile :-) I'm really glad you liked it and thanks a lot for reading and commenting too, I really appreciate it ^_^
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Tue, July 25th, 2017 12:18pm

Criss Sole

I loved it. The butterfly attempted to be optimistic but inside it was crushed and dying. Very touching and I loved the pics of a butterfly. Good read.

Sat, July 29th, 2017 5:58am

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Thanks a lot for reading my poem and for commenting too, i'm glad you liked it :-)
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Sat, July 29th, 2017 1:37am

RomanBoukreev

I have read. You have been creative with illustrations and design of text. What about poem, one friend also tells me: "to be that person, and try to seems like you are that person(sad or optimistic)--there are two big differences."

Mon, July 31st, 2017 3:20am

ShadaStorm120

This was beautifully sad. The pretty butterflies between the words was lovely, and the message sent across was very sad indeed, but written in such a way where it was beautiful at the same time. This was wonderfully written, great job :)

Fri, August 11th, 2017 11:39pm

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Thanks so much for your feedback Shada it's appreciated :-)
I'm glad you liked the poem !
~ sW 12 ~

Fri, August 11th, 2017 6:44pm

Amy Furzane

I personally like the line 'some said she dances because of her happiness. Other said she dances to forget her sadness'. Inner feelings can't be visibly seen if you don't show it. It's like you are hurt to the bone in the inside, yet you cover it with a smile and try to make everything seems normal. Just like a butterfly, it is colourful and flying free, a reflective of happiness and freedom; but reality wise no one knows what's going on in the inside. I simply liked the idea of you using a colourful butterfly to symbolize these emotions and inner feelings. Wonderfully written, I like! :)

Sat, August 12th, 2017 2:40am

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Thanks for reading and for commenting too, i'm glad you enjoyed it ^^
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Sat, August 12th, 2017 1:41am

Damiyn

The poem was beautiful, I loved it =3

Sun, August 13th, 2017 3:14am

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Thanks, i'm glad you liked it too far :-)
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Sat, August 12th, 2017 10:16pm

C A Sechler

Beautiful writing! Butterflies are quite beautiful, to see them fade is sad indeed.

Sun, August 13th, 2017 2:11pm

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Thank you , i'm glad you liked it too far :D
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Sun, August 13th, 2017 8:21am

areej tariq

Good job
Very nice poem .you are heading to a great direction

Sun, August 13th, 2017 2:54pm

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Thanks, i'm glad you liked it :-)
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Sun, August 13th, 2017 8:20am

areej tariq

Very nice poem i loved it

Sun, August 13th, 2017 2:55pm

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Thank you so much Areej !
~ sW 12 ~

Sun, August 13th, 2017 8:19am

Amy R. Beckett

Some nice imagery - good job!

Mon, August 14th, 2017 7:36am

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Thank you !
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Mon, August 14th, 2017 1:09am

areej tariq

Wow very nice poem . keep writing wish you best of luck for the future

Mon, August 14th, 2017 10:07am

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Thanks a lot Areej :-)
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Mon, August 14th, 2017 9:30am

Cathryn Rayne

I liked this poem and how you used butterflies to represent emotions (or at least that's what I think. I could easily be wrong). What I found interesting was that the butterfly was saddened yet nobody realized until she faded. Beautiful poem - keep up the excellent work!

Mon, August 14th, 2017 3:14pm

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Thanks a lot , i'm glad you enjoyed it too far :-)
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Mon, August 14th, 2017 10:15pm

Rehmat Tanzila

AWWW SO Beautiful lovely butterfly !!!!

Wed, August 16th, 2017 12:56pm

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Thank you so much for reading TR's , it's appreciated :-)
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Wed, August 16th, 2017 12:15pm

Rehmat Tanzila

And these little butterflies look so amazing how did u put them in text?

Wed, August 16th, 2017 12:57pm

Corine Pelletier

Things are never as they seem. A lot of people see the grass as greener on the other side but that is rarely the case. I love you use of butterflies since most only live a few hours/days, their dance is the expression of their short lives. Wonderful, keep up the good job!

Wed, August 16th, 2017 4:02pm

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Thanks a lot , i'm glad you enjoyed it :-)
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Wed, August 16th, 2017 12:14pm

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