Naked heart

Aww so emotional and sad my dear! Loved the title of the poem and of course till the end it punches one's heart! So amazing in itself!

I liked this sonnet a lot. Well done.

I love how you've used the word "naked" to portray vulnerability. Such a simple piece, that flows so well. Well written and well done Lisbeth!

- Sohail

A naked heart that is now in pain
The mind will console it as crying is all in vain
Though You leave me vulnerable and alone
My lips won't complain my heart won't moan!

I wish that I were just like you
To make you realize how much it hurts 'not to be true!'
Because you leave me feeling frail
I wonder how your heart can get so pale!

Your words I know will kill me soon
Our love's perhaps not a boon
I feel defenseless to your wrath
It makes me shudder; leave your path!

How would I console?
My naked heart, my naked soul!

Once again, you show us the power of real honesty and vulnerability. My favorite line is "I'm just a victim in your path".

You feel like the speaker knows what's about to happen and can't get out the way in time. There's a sense of dread for the future of it and the pain of having been hurt already.

Amazing poem, Lisbeth!

Painful and relateable, jaylisbeth. It's hard when one person has more invested in a relationship, let's themselves become vulnerable when the other stays cold and cruel. An excellent, emotional poem.

Beautiful work! Simple but elegant

A wonderful description of love-gone-away, J.B!

You can't change anyone...You can love yourself enough to say I do not deserve to feel this way no matter what transpired...and maybe the heart of stone will open...Hard-hitting writing...

An Excellent poem...Just like your picture on the cover of this, I feel like you unzipped your heart and just pulled this poem out...Tom...

Great poem and a powerful message behind it. I like the way you structured the lines, it's like reading a story and the rhyming is superb. Good work! :)

Another home run hit with style, out of the Park a quarter mile...
Every time you come to bat... You pull a rabbit from your hat!
Impressive stats I have to say, the power that your words display!
Lizbeth you are going far; Your reputation... Like a STAR!

A very fine poem! It reminds me of the following;

You think that I can’t live
Without your love. You’ll see.
You think I can’t go on another day.

You think I have nothing
Without you by my side.
You’ll see, somehow, someway.

You think that I can’t
Ever laugh again. You’ll see.
You think that you’ve
Destroyed my faith in love.

You think after all you’ve done,
I’ll never find my way back home.
You’ll see, somehow, someday.

All by myself.
I don’t need anyone at all.
I know I’ll survive.
I know I’ll stay alive.

All on my own.
I don’t need anyone this time.
It will be mine.
No one can take it from me.
You’ll see.

You think that you are strong,
But you are weak. You’ll see.
It takes more strength to cry
And admit defeat.

I have truth on my side.
You only have deceit.
You’ll see, somehow, someday.

All by myself.
I don’t need anyone at all.
I know I’ll survive.
I know I’ll stay alive.

I’ll stand on my own.
I won’t need anyone this time.
It will be mine.
No one can take it from me.
You’ll see!

By Madonna

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With love - Aquarius

What a brilliant and emotional poem, it definitely made me reminisce about a past experience.

The heart is a fragile thing the emotions of love fractures it through like the effects of an earth quake on the landscape. Some use the heart to inflict pain like no other exploiting love to its most painful of ends. But no matter what may come the world can see you are strong so hold your head up and continue to write so strong.

I am transfixed by this. It is truly amazing

This poem hurts, and that's the reason that I love it. It takes me and I imagine so many other readers to a place of raw emotional pain that is searing but overall must be confronted.

Powerful words to describe your heart. It's sounds like you're so powerful. Care to read and comment on my writing as well?

A great poem of love and pain. Great piece.

Very good. More please if the heart has recovered.