Embrace the past

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Mystery and Crime  |  House: Review Chain

Table of Contents

prologue

ARIANA GRIFFIN : LEGENDS OF THE FLARIES BY ALEEHA ZAHID     ILLUSTRATED BY ALEEHA ZAHID  ... Read Chapter

An Unanticipated execution

              CHAPTER 1 : AN UNANTICIPATED EXECUTION: 24th JANUARY, 20... Read Chapter

A jaunt and inauguration of institute

            CHAPTER : 2 : A JAUNT AND INAUGURATION OF INSTITUTE: 26th JANUARY, ... Read Chapter

The lilliputian adolescent and intimidating episode

  CHAPTER : 3 : THE LILLIPUTIAN ADOLESCENT AND INTIMIDATING EPISODE: 28th JANUARY, 2017: It was Monday and recently... Read Chapter

Instructor eccentric allocution

CHAPTER : 4 : INSTRUCTOR ESSCENTRIC ALLOCUTION: 30th JANUARY, 2017: Wizards of evil : Ariana headed towards the bathroom... Read Chapter

Wizards

    CHAPTER : 5 :Wizards: 1st FEBRUARY,2017: A NEW PLACE: Ariana and Celeste both were really puzzled ... Read Chapter

Wandering in Calvin's high

CHAPTER : 6 : WANDERING IN CALVINS HIGH: 3rd FEBRUARY, 2017: "Ok..."Eibon sighed"Just relax Ariana becuase I think you are n... Read Chapter

The mysterious passage way

CHAPTER : 7 : THE MYSTERIOUS PASSAGE WAY: 5th FEBRUARY, 2017: Ariana and Eibon were trying really hard to find their friend ... Read Chapter

The shadow and the obscurity

    CHAPTER : 8 : THE SHADOW AND OBSCURITY: 7th FEBRUARY, 2017: Her blue shadow: The boss Wizard ... Read Chapter

Repeatedly in past

CHAPTER : 9 : REPEATEDLY IN PAST: 8th FEBRUARY, 2017: SIDE OF A WALL: She opened her eyes gradually.She found herself on the ... Read Chapter

All baffled up

  CHAPTER: 10: 9th FEBRUARY, 2017: "If you won't even give this to me, you don't know how to destroy it's power"Said the... Read Chapter

They can never be destroyed

CHAPTER : 11 : THEY CAN NEVER BE DESTROYED: THE SAME DAY BUT DIFFERENT ADVENTURES: "We should go now, I can't see it anymore"Aria... Read Chapter

Finding her truth

CHAPTER : 12 : Finding her truth : Less evil: "Oh look what we have here" Azazel said pointing towards Rubisia.He with the moveme... Read Chapter

Celeste

Chapter : 13 :celeste Ariana thought that too, she knew what Eibon was concluding.She looked at him with pain full eyes and said, "... Read Chapter

The meeting

Chapter : 14 : The meeting : "Those wizards, they are in some kind of meeting"Celeste said."What meeting"Eibon asked and Ariana loo... Read Chapter

Another escape

chapter : 15 :Another escape All the wizards were standing still and Ariana thought how much these wizards were scared of Azazel... Read Chapter

Rising spirits

Chapter : 16 :Rising spirits Ariana this time didn't heard any noise.It was so quiet that somewhere Ariana did knew that they reached... Read Chapter

The plan

Chapter : 17 :The plan: Ariana had to keep herself strong, now that she knew that there might be a chance that her mom could be ali... Read Chapter

The help

CHAPTER : 18 : THE HELP: "Oh no, what are we gonna do"Eibon said.Ariana became really upset, she was continuously remembering her m... Read Chapter

Rubisia

CHAPTER : 19 :Rubisia: "Ariana wake up"Eibon whispered.Ariana felt weeker but she managed to get up.They were in Calvin's high whic... Read Chapter

The end

CHAPTER : 20 :The end: In front of her wizards were holding Eibon, Rubisia and her dad.When Ariana looked at her dad she felt even wo... Read Chapter

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scatteredsquirrel

Your writing has progressed so much since your first book! I enjoyed this chapter a lot. You did a nice job introducing the characters without giving to much away. This chapter had a nice mix of suspense to make the reader want to continue... Overall, good job Aleeha!

Mon, October 16th, 2017 9:47pm

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thank you....can I ask you something?
do you really think what you wrote in the comment above???:).If yes than this made my day.:}

Tue, October 17th, 2017 7:43am

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Wyn

do some more proofreading. There are quite a few obvious ones in there.The writing feels pretty stiff as well, conversation unnatural. nothing else positive or negative to point out

Thu, October 19th, 2017 1:10pm

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Melody1

Nice start, your way of describing really took me jn the story. I imagined every second in tge story as if it was real. I only recommend that if you start a new line when a character talks. But everything else is just great
Melody1

Fri, October 20th, 2017 8:15am

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Thank you a lot and I will for sure keep in mind to start a new line when character talks.:)

Sat, October 21st, 2017 7:55am

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rickybelmont

The first chapter and already something sad happens. You did a great intro, Aleeha. Although it has been pointed out by someone, you're grammar is like mine haha. I make mistakes too don’t worry. What I mean is there are some missing articles and contractions. But other than that it was Awesome! Good job Aleeha :)

Fri, October 20th, 2017 2:03pm

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Thank you for your response and if you talk about grammar it will improve when we both will move further in writing. :)

Sat, October 21st, 2017 7:58am

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Buffershaker

Great start,interesting characters and expansive script points to an absorbing story.

Mon, October 23rd, 2017 6:45pm

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thankyou eileen :)

Tue, October 24th, 2017 6:36am

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creeperarmy100

Should be a space after ALL periods.

Tue, October 24th, 2017 1:29am

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ok.Thanks anyway :)

Tue, October 24th, 2017 6:37am

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creeperarmy100

Will continue commenting at some point.

Tue, October 24th, 2017 2:18am

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yeah right.Thankyou for giving time :)

Tue, October 24th, 2017 6:37am

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creeperarmy100

Finished commenting on chapter 1. look in the chapter for blue highlighted words.

Fri, October 27th, 2017 12:05am

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ok thankyou

Fri, October 27th, 2017 2:28am

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lanas

i like yourwriting but look at the the font, they change continuesly.

Tue, January 23rd, 2018 2:48pm

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i will but thanks

Fri, January 26th, 2018 2:08am

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Charlotte Braun

I like your ideas. Some help needed though.

I've put your first paragraph here, as you originally wrote it, and then below it I've placed some grammatical corrections and suggestions for alternate wording to make your sentences more clear. There were were NO spelling errors, which is wonderful given that English is not your primary language. I hope that what I've written helps.

Original:
IT was in the middle of beautiful evening and a girl was sitting in her garden enjoying the fresh air and the refreshing fragrant of fascinating flowers which more felt like the most amazingly delicate scent in the whole world. Her dark brown hair were flying enormously and it was feeling like they were playing tag with the wind. Her deary beautiful blue as sea eyes were lost enjoying the magic of nature. Everything about that girl was unique and beautiful. Her name was Ariana Griffin. A few minutes later when Ariana realized it's almost dinner time, she got up from her chair and went down in her magnificent house.

Below is the paragraph with cleaned grammar and with suggested changes in ( ). I've tried to keep what seemed to be your original meaning in each sentence.

IT was the middle of (a) beautiful evening(,) and a girl was sitting in her garden enjoying the fresh air. The refreshing (fragrance) of (the) fascinating flowers (seemed) like the most amazingly delicate scent in the whole world. Her dark brown hair (was whipped around her by the breeze,) and it (felt) like (it was) playing tag with the wind. Her beautiful blue as (the) sea eyes were (unfocused as she) lost (herself in) the magic of nature. Everything about (her) was unique and beautiful. Her name was Ariana Griffin. A few minutes later when Ariana realized (it was) almost dinner time, she got up from her chair and went down (to) her magnificent house.


Your English vocabulary is very good. If you could practice with someone fluent in English, I'm sure that your grammar would improve a lot.

Please keep writing. Your ideas are very interesting.

Sat, April 14th, 2018 8:49pm

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thankyou so much.I will sure change it:)

Sat, April 14th, 2018 10:42pm

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T.K.F

You do have some nice ideas. Keep it up :)

Mon, August 6th, 2018 1:43pm

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thankyou.....Continue reading and don't forget to give a feedback:)

Wed, August 8th, 2018 2:29pm

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