A Moment Changes All Things

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Commercial Fiction  |  House: Booksie Classic

Every decision we made forces our life in a new direction which changes who and what we become. This is the story of one David with two lives, based on only one decision he had to make.

Submitted: October 03, 2017

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Submitted: October 03, 2017



A Moment Changes All Things

David hopped with excitement as his father entered the house.

"Happy birthday David!"

"Wha’d ya get me?!" David said as he eyed the present just out of reach.

"You'll have to wait until after dinner."

“Dinner’s still in the oven,” David’s mother said coming in the room. “He can open it now.”

David tore the package open to find a large pink piggy bank inside.

“A piggy bank?”

“Yes,” his father responded. “Now that you’re eight, you’re old enough for an allowance.”


His father took out his wallet and handed him a crisp five dollar bill. "Here you go, five dollars a week.”

David’s eyes gleamed as if he had just won the lottery.

“Well, aren’t you going to put it in your new bank?” his mother said

David looked up. “But what if I want to spend it?”

"You have a big decision to make now David” His father said. “Are you going to spend it or save it?”

+ + +

David pulled into the parking lot promptly at 4:45. As he got out of his Honda, he eyed the car next to him - a red Mustang convertible. How cool it would be to own a car like that! He certainly could afford it and maybe then he’d get noticed by the girls at school. But, no. A car like that wasn’t practical. Sure his Civic was bland, but it was cheap and dependable and that’s all that mattered. And as far as girls? Plenty of time for that later in life.

David straightened his name tag as he walked towards the door. He wondered if anyone at work would remember today was his eighteenth birthday. Probably not. He never really got along with anyone here. David was focused and driven which others took as arrogance. Whatever. Working at a retail store was just a high school job. And with his scholarship, he didn’t even need have to work anymore. But he stayed on anyway because, well, what else was there to do this summer, go on dates?  

Dates, yeah right. Now more than ever he had to focus on his plan. All these years being called a loser for studying hard was finally paying off. In four years he’ll graduate with zero debt earning big bucks in finance management while everyone else will still be working here wondering what to do with their lives. Did it matter that he hated finance? Nope. He did the research; finance careers earned the highest salaries. And with all the extra work he put in, he had gotten good at it. So ha! Who was the loser now? 

As David walked into the break room, the only other person there was Janelle - beautiful, amazing Janelle. She was leafing through a magazine waiting for her shift to start at 5. She looked up at him. David glanced away and quickly walked over to the time-clock to punch in ten minutes early.

“Happy Birthday,” Janelle said.

David turned and looked at her. She was smiling.

“Uh, Thanks,” was all he said as he walked out.


David pulled into the parking lot at 5:25. Late again. Jackie had told him he’d be fired this time but she didn’t really mean it. Besides, David had bigger problems, like how the heck to pay for prom. He was already maxed out on his credit cards and a month behind on his car payment. Even though he loved his car, buying the mustang convertible had been a bad idea.

As David jogged across the parking lot trying unsuccessfully to tuck in his shirt, he thought about turning 18 today. He should be excited. After all, he was about to graduate high school and had his whole life ahead of him. But instead he was scared. Other people had scholarships and great college adventures planned, but he had nothing. He assumed at some point it would figure itself out but now high school was almost over and he hadn’t even started looking at colleges yet. And even if he did, how would he pay for it?

All he wanted was to do something he loved. Some people were good at sports or computers but David wasn’t good at anything. Okay, maybe he could handle numbers if he tried harder, but he didn’t want to force himself into some job just for the money. Jackie said he had potential to move into management at the store if he applied himself. Sure he loved the people here, but was this what he wanted?

As David walked in the front door, he wondered if it was time to start being responsible, save money and look into college. He should give up the car, the credit cards, and yes, maybe even prom. If she loved him, she would understand, right?

As he entered the break room, he was stunned when everyone yelled “Surprise!" The room was decorated with streamers, balloons, a large cake and jammed with the whole store team.

"Happy birthday!" Janelle said as she gave him a kiss.

"You did this for me?"

"Of course. We all did! Now make a wish and blow out the candles!" Janelle said.

David thought for a moment, closed his eyes and blew out the candles. Everyone cheered and Jackie started cutting the cake.

“What’d you wish for?" Janelle asked.

“Nothing,” David said. “Nothing at all.”

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