My Teacher, Death

TheRichAlder

I really like how you started the story, by mentioning that an incident happened it already gave something to wonder about.

It does seem promising, there was quite a lot of character introduction and development in this chapter, maybe a little too much, some appear to have been slightly ignored after their introduction though, but its really not the time to judget yet.

The teacher sounds ominous now that he can do... whatever he feels like, so I take this can be pretty entertaining to see. I do have kind of an ominous feeling from the teacher's interaction with them though hehe. Good writting :)

Oh, also, I don't wanna be negative but maybe you wanna make a standard for your dialogue lines, some you capitalize, some, not, it is a bit visually problematic to me, but maybe its just me.

Kathrina Csernis

Thought I'd come back and read these first chapters that i missed cx

The start is great, explaining the situation that happened made me wonder, really hooks the reader. Theres a lot of character development here and its good to start off with some. But kinda like how its been for my characters, after you introduce them, you seem to neglect them slightly, but thats a common issue with having quite a few main characters. It works, though!

I'm liking how you explained the teacher as well :)

Amazing start, from what I've already read, I'm really liking this story cx

Blankly-Dreaming

I really enjoyed this.

The characters are great and the story.The story kinda reminds me of one of my favorite animes (Im an anime fan, hehe). Although it has the same like, topic. This one has its own uniqueness.

I'm really interested on what will happen to their teacher since his the grim reaper. I also like that aspect of having death as the teacher, its sort of refreshing not seeing him as a dark and deathly fiend.

Question, will you put a tear jerking scene. I hope there is. I see possible events that can make me cry my eyes out. Even if there isn't I'm gonna keep reading since I'm already interested.

scatteredsquirrel

Great first chapter:) You did a nice job introducing the students and teacher.
One thing I would keep in mind though is your sentence variation- They felt a choppy to read. I recommend discovering new ways to begin your sentences and differing the lengths of each sentence. Keep up the good work!
Happy writing!!

SugaFire

so I came back, and I thought this was pretty alright, but considering I'm an action girl, I found it a little bit slow. But it's great for it's genre. However, it could use a little more comedy. I'll read the rest so I can get to know Erik's darker ( I mean deeper, haha) side a little better.

K.Essler

Man that is harsh. All the faculty has given up on this class and deemed everyone in the class hopeless lol. This is kind of interesting, I am wondering where you will be going with this.

So all the students just don't feel like learning because the stuff they are learning isn't interesting. I can believe that, alot of stuff in school is quite boring. So to get them more focused on the stuff they don't want to learn he is teaching them about the stuff they want to learn.

Also he is death as well. I never expected death to want to teach people. That's kind of interesting. I wonder if one of them is goi nnng to find out what he is.

れっくる

Reminds me of Classroom of the Elite with those bunch of people packed in a class. Thanks for the hard work!

Muneeb Sohail

i really like the starting of this student "Luke" he was not uninterested in learning things in school that he is like a guy that is bored of school, and i also i like Erick the teacher he is sweet and kind and really he good with his student, also i like Emerald he or she is really kind with his or her teacher, and i also i like Darry Fong he is friendly with Luke and he is cool, i don't who can be the reaper but don't spoil for me because i am having reading this story, keep up the good work, and also i know you have completed this story but make a part two of this story i will read that i will updated so when you make story's i will read them :)

S. Rasmussen

A little bit of verb trouble throughout the story. Please don't mix present and past tense in one paragraph. I would suggest you install Grammarly and fix it that way.

Else? Erick is an interesting character

Liked the chapter

J. R. Merrick

I like the start to this story. You had a lot of good character development and the premise itself is very interesting. I like how death is not portrayed as the stereotypical skeleton in a cloak. He actually seems to care about the students, unless he has ulterior motives. I can see this story going in many different directions. Good job!

AnikanDarkness

I have arrived... and now I shall read this book from beginning to end cuz like yay!

Okay so you introduced three characters so far... Luke Shadows (just hearing someone say Mr Shadows is just funny) Darryl Fong (For some reason I keep thinking of TWD Daryl) and this Emerald Winters person... (they seem cool)

Still so many characters... considering the fact that the grim reaper is on the cover i'm assuming someone is gunna die at some point so yay!

Okay so is Erick death? He had a scythe so is planning to kill the students are something? Omigod the slaughtering of an entire class would be fun!

So far this seems very interesting >~

MARIA KURENAI SHINOHARA

It's kinda rude that they put all the bad students in the same class. It's very injustice. And gave them only one teacher for all subjects.
I didn't understand that why did Luke thought that the teacher is a professional. Isn't every teacher a professional?
I liked Emerald as well. But cleaning the classroom is a duty of every student. Why did he need to treat her for that. But still she is weird to text her teacher late at night. Only to tell him that he would be a good teacher.

But I think that the teacher is the angel that takes our souls after we die. Or maybe a devil. But I think he really is a nice teacher.

ShadaStorm120

This is a very interesting concept. I just wonder, how do you plan on doing so many students. It's a whole classroom of people, people, we, as the reader, have to remember. Usually, I'd say it's not a good idea to have so much characters, because it's hard to juggle between them or make them all memorable in their own way. It will take me awhile to get familiar with all these characters, so I can't say how I feel about any of them yet. So far, the teacher stands out the most though, mostly because of his admirable goals on making these students better themselves, and the fact he took a soul right there. I admit, it was quite a straight forward way of showing he was the grim reaper, and I would have liked some mysterious things and slowly figure it out, because, now we know he's the reaper, but have to wait for the students to figure it out something we already know. I also feel parts of this story isn't really realistic, but I suppose, maybe your school works differently from mine. I always thought teachers weren't meant to get friendly with their students, like take them out someplace for their help, haha. That's just one of the things I noticed though. But anyway, so far, you've done a good job at introducing some of the important characters in this story, and I wonder how this story will progress :) great job so far.

dominiko

Good start. I liked that the teacher Erick actually decided to go a different route teaching students by basing it off of their likes. I also like that he was a reaper, but I actually didn't think that it would happen in the first chapter, you know. It would have been a cool concept to leave little hints and let the reader figure it out. Either way though, you left enough info to want me to keep reading and find out what happened. I find it hard to believe the reaper just wants to teach students and be friendly so I believe he has a more diabolical plan for the students later on. Nice job and nice chapter.

Moony

This seems promising and interesting. I see a couple issues but this is the first chapter so who cares. I think this has real potential. (That its probably already reached, I'm pretty late...) Anyways I wonder where this will go.

I wish I had a teacher like this. But I'm glad Erick is their teacher and can help them move past why they are in the "hopeless" class. A "hopeless" class that people gave up on is an interesting concept actually.