Life Is A Story

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Status: In Progress  |  Genre: Romance  |  House: Booksie Classic


Story of friends growing together and facing the trials in their life. (Just your everyday romance/drama) just like an anime! Hahaha



This is my first attempt in writing. Please tell me what is wrong with it and any other suggestions. I'll do my best to correct them and do better. (Also if there's atleast something good, praise
me...I need it for my ego) :)

Table of Contents

Just Another Story


A diary entry from a high school girl. Showing her past and will to rewrite her life
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The New Chapter


This is where the story begins. Three friends enrolled together in Einset High. There they will meet new people and reunite with old friends. Where would fate take their friendship and live?


Okay... So I think I made this chapter to long. I don't know. Sorry. Anyways criticize it all you want and if you can leave a review/comment please do. It really helps, both for improvement (and my
ego). Thanks!!!
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The Affection: A Rival


As the class choose class representatives. The elected ones are having a hard time getting along the other from some "past issues". As one of his friend found out more about her, what will it make
him feel?


Okay so..I honestly have no idea what to say. Gist leave a review, I guess:).
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Lost


A new club, a new friend and a new hope. This chapter will show the relationship between two of the characters even strengthen. (Its a bit cheesy tho, I think?)


Anyways please leave a like, shelf for more chapters and leave a comment telling me what you think. (Yay! Booknerd YouTuber) hahaha. Thanks for reading!
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Under The Willow Tree


Two childhood friends talk about the other's other childhood friend....Hahaha...


I don't know, I hope it's good. Please leave a response of what you think hahahah.
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I'm Here, Under The Willow Tree


A girl joined the two under the tree. A pact and a secret reveled...


That sounds intense but it's not. Hahah tell me what you think in the comments, really helps..
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The Tower That Lights The Sea


The lighthouse where two kid's memories were created.


This chapter has been pretty long, sorry. I also think it's a bit dull and lacks flavor but, well tell me what you think so I can improve it hahaha.


Ps. I know I've been focusing too much on Kyle Cecile and Rex on the past chapters next one won't, I hope hahahah
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The Club Meeting


A club meeting, that can give them something else more than just a place to be after classes. Not all friendships or relationships start on a positive note (especially in anime:))


Took long huh? Probably not worth the wait, sorry haha, but I hope you still enjoy it. Don't leave me please :(. Hahaha


....pretty damn long too haha, sorry...
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Forming Bonds...


Beginning of the first group bonding of the Leisure club! Lols


I don't know what happened here. Did the plot progress or did any character development or dynamic happened? Don't know. I know I promised faster pacing but...I don't know hahaha. Old habits die
hard!
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Intensifying Bonds...


Th e trip is going well for everyone. Until come lunch and a nuisance appeared. Nathan starts to doubt himself.


I don't know...Send help, LOL hahaha
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The Affection: Encounter


As they try to take Sandra away from Bill. Nathan's self consciousness takes the best of him...


Don't know. I really don't know. Hope it gives off what it's supposed too hahaha. :)
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Doubt, Hurt, And Affection


After the little trouble at the restaurant, the group is back at the park to continue to try and keep enjoying the weekend.


:3
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Is This, Home?


Rina, Rica, Cecile and Rex are walking home. When the sisters walked a different way the two are left in to squabble. They came to a contract and learned something about each other...


2 months later and here I am again spreading...to this site...
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Absence


Naomi's sick and the others are coming for a visit however something happened in school


Sounds exciting? No? I know hahaha. Well, i hate myself :3
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Under The Rain


Well, it rained.


I-I-I...I don't know.


hlp...
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The Affection: Change


The others started noticing the shift in Nathan's personality...


I-I don't know... Hate maself


kill me
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In Doubt


Nathan's struggles with self-doubt


Ololololol...gawd I hate myself hahaha
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Recent Comments

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TravellerZo

I really like how you went into character when you wrote the girl’s diary entry, I was absorbed reading it. I enjoyed it

However, after the diary entry ended, I noticed a few flaws. First off, the girl doesn’t have a name, neither does her sibling. I felt this story should sound more personal, perhaps give the girl a couple lines from her mom that seemed really significant to her. People do that a lot tbh, but it makes more real, ya know?

Speaking of personal, I throughly enjoyed the stories about the things her family would do together; I could tell they were special to her, and that’s my favorite part.

You kinda killed it at the end, though. The adverbs you used, ‘slowly’ and ‘forcefully’ is weak, you should compare her actions to something else, like sleep comforting her like a mother would to her baby, or a tense cat disturbed from its nap! Adverbs are usually not helpful in writing, try metaphors and similes. They help you more in giving vivid descriptions. Not just descriptions, vivid ones. You’re painting pictures with words, not word vomiting. Try not to use weak words too, like ‘went’, in this context, you could use ‘drifted’

You called the end of a pen ‘weird’, but that tells me nothing about anything, so I suggest you delete that single word from there or replace with something more descriptive; it doesn’t belong, really. Its star shape is a detail that can stand alone.

I hope this helps, I tend to ramble when giving reviews on Booksie

Cheers, Zo

Sat, November 11th, 2017 2:51am

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Blankly-Dreaming

Hey thank you for reviewing it.

It's been my problem. I always tend to think so hard but end up using a word that sounds forced.
Also thanks for the advice to use metaphors and simile, really helps and gives me more ideas.

Don't worry about the name. I'll mention it on later chapters. If it doesn't work out, I'll probably end up editing the entire end scene.

Don't worry. In future chapters or story I put up. I'm sure you're gonna ramble harder.

Thanks again!

Sat, November 11th, 2017 3:00am

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scatteredsquirrel

I enjoyed this:) The diary entry was a good idea, it revealed your MC's backstory and personality. A few things I would watch out for though: 1) Keep an eye on your tenses. You tended to switch from past to present. 2) There were a few grammatical errors here and there, nothing hard to fix;)
All in all, I cannot wait to see where you take this story. Happy writing!!

Sat, November 11th, 2017 5:08am

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rickybelmont

Hello! I enjoyed this chapter. Introducing the main character and her backstory with a diary entry is.... Unique. To be honest, I got engaged and wanting more. I'm probably going to enjoy this book so I'll try and keep up with it. :). Also, I don’t know why, but your last paragraph kinda ryhmed in my head. Just wanted to say that. Also, while I don't like being negative while writing reviews on Booksie, may I suggest making other chapters longer? Cause it kinda makes the readers wanting more haha. Overall, I enjoyed this story. :)

Mabuhay haha

Sun, November 12th, 2017 3:26am

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Thank you so much. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

The next chapter will be much longer the only reason this one is short because it's kind of like a prologue. The real story will start in the next chapter.

Sat, November 11th, 2017 9:48pm

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Kathrina Csernis

So, I like this first chapter a lot, I was really into it right away when you were writing the girls diary. I kinda wanna know what her name is, though, so I can get slightly more attached to this character. I enjoyed finding out about her back story and personality, I'm a big fan of backstories lol they help give a better understanding of characters.

I'll be reading more as I'm interested to find out more about this haha keep up the good work, this first chapter is a great start cx

Fri, November 17th, 2017 12:49pm

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Hey! I'm really glad you liked it and will keep on reading it. Thanks!

Fri, November 17th, 2017 8:16am

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BruceMink

Hi! I saw your book and I really liked it! The diary entry is a brilliant way to introduce you protagonist, its not something I've really seen yet.
The way you also introduced her is very heartfelt, it makes me know what she feels and it shows what's important to her, her mother.

To be honest, I'm not really a fan of this kinds of book, but I think there is a lot of possibilities here to be at least unique in more ways than one. There are only a few grammar changes but that's about it in this chapter.

I'll keep reading the book to see where it goes. Happy writing!

Sat, November 18th, 2017 11:31pm

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Hey! Thank you for reading my book! I'm glad you liked it.

Me either I'm not the biggest fan of this kinds of books but when if I feel it is somewhat different than most I'll probably read and like them. So yeah that's what I'll try to do with this, make it somewhat unique hahaha.

Sat, November 18th, 2017 3:46pm

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Amanda.Sims

I like it. Its awight.

Mon, November 20th, 2017 3:23pm

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SugaFire

For some strange reason, when she yelled about what story is worth reading, I suddenly thought this would become THE STORY. there were a few typos but the chapter engrossed me from beggining to end. I felt personally attached, almost as though I was her.

I think you did a really great job at carrying the emotions out to the readers and I liked the family feelings. It's rare to find any decent fiction literature with family values.

I'm a huge fan of that particular aspect.

I will read one chapter a day, because of my busy schedule and I can't wait to see what the story unfolds

Tue, November 21st, 2017 12:03pm

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Hey! Thanks for reading. I'm really glad that you enjoyed this chapter. I also hope the next one's don't disappoint haha, it kinda went in a different direction. Sorry haha.

Tue, November 21st, 2017 4:38am

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A. K.Taylor

Hi Blankly-dreaming, i saw your post in the forums and decided to take a peek at this one. I'm going to be a little honest here and say you have the makings of a terrific story started here; however you will note that I marked up your story quite a bit with notations and errors that really need to be addressed. I'm no professional mind you, but if I can see all these then so can everybody else that has any true intention of helping you with your work.

The story is good. There's plenty of emotion being brought to the surface, but as with many stories I've seen with beginners you haven't introduced your character here. Not a huge issue, but hopefully you've addressed this in your next chapter. I'm assuming the asterisks were there to indicate this is a diary as well as to inflict emphasis on the fact she wrote this with a star-tipped pen. Very cute and creative.

You have a good plot going it seems even though this is a mere prologue of sorts. Not sure, If I'll continue to check through your work, but watch your tenses. You flipped back and forth a bit here and a few places you used words that you didn't need to. Don't forget to use commas. They usually appeared before but, and, yet, although, and a few other words that combine two separate sentences or ideas.

I offered a few re-phrasings of a few of your lines and sentences. I hoped they come in handy for you. Other than those things, you write pretty well contextually speaking of course. If you have a hard time thinking of different words to use for things, use an online thesaurus. It has helped me tremendously. I also use an online dictionary to make sure I use words in there proper context/meaning, especially foreign language words. If there's anything else you are more than welcome to message me, I'll be happy to help as I have time. I pretty much response to messages as soon as I see them. Good luck with your writing. See Ya around, Blankly.

Tue, December 19th, 2017 2:38am

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Hey! Thanks a lot! I really appreciate this. Must be hard marking so many mistakes, sorry for that, I apologize for that hehe.

I'm gonna take everything you said, gonna keep em in mind to help me in writing more efficiently. Also happy you liked the chapter...

Thanks again! Not really proficient in English grammar and English isn't my first language so this really helps!

Tue, December 19th, 2017 5:20am

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StormSurge

First off, this was great. I like your style of writing. One "problem" I have is that you start every paragraph with a "*". That was sort of weird. Like you said to me, I am an amateur writer. I like how you portray the girl, it definitely seems that Life is a story worth reading! Nothing was wrong from my point of view, I really liked it! I hope you werent looking for stuff to change, I'm not that best at finding those :)

Thu, December 21st, 2017 10:35pm

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Hey! Thanks you for reading. I out "*" to indicate it's written on a diary hehe. Hard just working on a phone, I can't italicize. That's okay, someone just helped me changed my mistakes, just want to know what people think. I'm glad you liked it :)

Thu, December 21st, 2017 3:14pm

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れっくる

This is my first time to read a romance type of novel, so I don't know what to say. Still, I find this interesting.
Thanks for the hard work.

Fri, December 22nd, 2017 10:34pm

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Hahaha, I understand...I hope you like it though and well..keep reading :)

Fri, December 22nd, 2017 2:58pm

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AmateurWriter01

This was an excellent first chapter. It was quite heartbreaking having the children losing their mother at such a young age. Also in the same accident. You really made us fall for the mother in the beginning having her sit outside and work on their story together.

It's also sad the child blames them self for her death saying they over worked her as a mom.

I don't understand why you were saying your writing wasn't that great. You are an excellent writer, far better than I am. I am glad you let me read this. I plan on reading more.

Sat, December 23rd, 2017 12:00am

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Someone actually helped me correct the grammar errors here hehe, so, you know, next chapter could not be this good hahaha.

Anyways, yeah, I tried to make the readers appreciate the mother in this one chapter, you know, try to make them remember her. She won't be mentioned in the future chapters to come hahaha.

Hey, I'm glad you think that haha. And thanks for reading and enjoying my work :)

Fri, December 22nd, 2017 5:28pm

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S. Rasmussen

What a great start! It was so inspiring. Your text is easy to read.

Left a couple of icomments from grammatical errors.

Sun, December 24th, 2017 9:44pm

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Hey! Thanks for reading hahaha.. Glad you liked it :)

Sun, December 24th, 2017 1:55pm

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WhiteGirl

Awwww...This sounds like a touching story! I'm gonna shelf this for later!

Sat, January 6th, 2018 1:52am

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Hey! Thanks for checking this out! Hope it meet your expectations!

Fri, January 5th, 2018 7:19pm

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InsyLeo22

That's sweet!

Tue, January 30th, 2018 11:03am

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Raven Akuma

Hey, I decided to try reading your other book. I must admit that I don't usually read this genre, but the way you begin it is actually very intriguing.

I like the point of view you used. That diary entry really gives insight into this girl's mind. You also refuse to say the girl's name, which is a good element to have. It makes me very curious as to who she is, and how she works in the real world. There's also plenty of room for her to develop along the way, so you created a good character.

Anyways, excited to keep reading. This one looks good! :)

Sun, February 4th, 2018 5:29am

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I appreciate that you took your time to check this out haha. I just hope you won't be disappointed because, man. Hahaha, it became somewhat cliche, don't know why. I just hope you at least like it? Don't know hahaha, thanks for reading!

Sat, February 3rd, 2018 9:54pm

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MARIA KURENAI SHINOHARA

I really like the first entry of the dairy. I agree with the fact that stories really are pleasurable. And it really hurts when it ends. Specially if the ending is very sad. It's very hard to bear it . I also agree that a writer puts all his emotions and creativity to write it.

I also like the girl's mom. Her story is very heart touching. I like the name of this book.

It was nice reading it. Thanks for a nice story.

Wed, February 7th, 2018 8:50pm

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Yeah they are, they makes us feel free of this world but yeah its is sad cause, well, we'll miss it and we can also get so attatched to it or just overall wonder what else happened and could happen to them :(.

Thanks! Really aiming for it to be like that. Honestly, I just thought of the story title when I'm about to hit the publish button since I forgot thinking about it beforehand hahaha. SO yeah, just a title out of a whim.

Makes me feel good knowing you liked it! Thanks for reading!

Thu, February 8th, 2018 3:30am

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