Universe of Simulations

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Status: In Progress  |  Genre: Science Fiction  |  House: Science Fiction


After graduating from college, the main character, Austin, celebrates his graduation and is sent to Venus to work for the army with his dad. Along the way, he runs into his childhood friend, Tom,
which is in the army for a strange reason, battles alien space crafts, and has vivid dreams that predict the future of his life.

Table of Contents

Prologue

Pant… pant… pant…. Pant…. Austin ran and ran from the intelligent species, but to only appear back where he s... Read Chapter

Army Welcoming and Strange Occurrences

The spacecraft, from entering, had a resting area that had target practice for the guns they could use during the fights and couches to s... Read Chapter

Ilene Questions And Dream Theory

They all sat in the kitchen, eating the breakfast they have been given. Austin was telling Tom about his dream he had. “The dream s... Read Chapter

First Alien Attack

Austin slept all night, but in the morning, he could hear explosions and yelling. He woke up to people being wounded and people with thei... Read Chapter

The Others And Ilene Are More Than They Appear


Finally got back to writing after a few months!
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Coma and Alien Torture

Austin laid in his bed, looking at the ceiling. “What will Venus be like?” he thought out loud. He began to read some Roman Mytho... Read Chapter

Aliens Have Become a Real Threat


Finally, quit being lazy and made the next chapter.
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Recent Comments

T. E. Jackson

This has potential, but as it sits, it feels a bit rushed. There's very little world building, it skips around a lot, the dialogue feels very robotic and forced, and there's no character descriptions. The prologue should be jam packed full of descriptions to build the world and the basis of our protagonist, in fact, this is why a lot of writers skip writing a prologue. Nonetheless, this is a unique and interesting idea and definitely has potential. I'd definitely say go back and hammer out some issues :)

Wed, July 4th, 2018 7:30am

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Jackson, this is probably because I only wrote this in 7th grade (now going to 8th grade) and do not have enough thorough information about how to create a prologue as good as someone who has been writing for 5 years and are not in school anymore.

Thu, July 5th, 2018 9:33pm

ShadowLight120

This story does have potential, but I'd recommend taking a look at and fixing the errors T.E. Jackson pointed out, since they will help your story a lot.

Your descriptions seemed lacking, I cannot picture your story in my head, I can understand what's happening, I just can't feel into it since I can't picture the events. For all I know Austin could be getting into a Hot Air Balloon painted in army colours, labeled as a Spaceship.

Not to mention, a lot of what you have could have a major impact if worded a bit better, and with more descriptions. The human brain is a hungry thing, it's hungry for knowledge. What does each character look like? How do they speak? What are they doing while they speak? It's impossible to form an opinion on a character if they don't appear to have a defined character. Stating things are pointless, because you have to show us what you mean.

Wed, July 4th, 2018 8:01am

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I kinda created this at the time because of my strong fascination of science at the time, which could be why I didn't describe as much and wanted to go further into Ilene's and Austins character developments more, since the book (for now) follows them and the conflict created by the Aliens.

Thu, July 5th, 2018 9:38pm

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