The Breaking Of The Fast

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Horror  |  House: Booksie Classic

horror. animal cruelty.

The Breaking Of The Fast


The savage sacrifice

Has followed god's rules,

The animals suffered

In the morning cruel.


Now in the evening cool

They gather, hell's ghouls,

Blood dripping from their lips

Like red satanic jewels.

Submitted: December 24, 2017

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tom mcmullen

Thanks Maria, humans do terrible things to animals!

Fri, September 14th, 2018 11:43pm

Jezzy Jay

Interesting concept and it flowed nicely. Short and a little dark, I like it

Wed, February 27th, 2019 7:42am

tom mcmullen

Thanks for your comments Jezzy, the sacrifice of animals is certainly dark!

Wed, February 27th, 2019 11:14pm

Derina Peng

I didn't laugh on this one. But I frowned...

Mon, May 20th, 2019 3:44pm

tom mcmullen

Thanks for your comment Derina, this is certainly not a funny poem, food for thought I hope!

Mon, May 20th, 2019 9:52pm

sprinkly biscuit

Certainly food for though, nicely done though


Fri, March 13th, 2020 8:37am


Thanks you sprinkly, see you on the ark!

Fri, March 13th, 2020 4:49am


It never ceases to amaze me why a supposed God that creates all living things would actually find some stupid human sacrificing its creations to venerate him as something good. He's gone to all of that effort, just to have its throat slit by moronic man.
I loved the last two lines, very visceral.

Thu, April 9th, 2020 6:01pm


Thanks very much for your comments Celtic, you certainly raise some good points!

Thu, April 9th, 2020 4:16pm

Sharief Hendricks

Cool quick poem with a powerful theme Tom

Yes sometimes I wonder who are the real animals ?

Tue, June 23rd, 2020 2:13pm


Thanks Sharief, yes animals seem to better behaved then a lot humans, they don't kill for pleasure like we do, and I think they are treated very badly by us at times!

Tue, June 23rd, 2020 4:05pm

Joyce H

Wed, March 31st, 2021 9:41pm


Thanks for reading Joyce...

Wed, March 31st, 2021 4:28pm

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