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Trident's Call
Reads: 477 | Likes: 7 | Shelves: 6 | Comments: 15
Book by: J. R. Merrick
Isdako, a small island village in the South Sudic Ocean. This is the only world that Kai has ever known, has ever wanted to know. When given the chance to travel to distant lands, he chose to stay
and watched his brother sail away. That was two years ago. He has not returned. But when an odd scientist arrives in Isdako, Kai is again given the chance to travel to unknown lands to find his
brother.
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Submitted: December 27, 2017
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Recent Comments
What a great introduction to a new culture, a new world and a new story. It was very well written and the description was cleverly shown. Not a great deal of dialogue which makes it harder to carry the story, but the stones were a brilliant way to to fill in the blanks. I also love the way they pray to the soul of the fish and thank it for its provison before releasing it into the afterlife. All up a well written introduction that captures the reader. Nice work . . .
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Thank you! My favorite part of writing fantasy is the culture creation. This first chapter and much of the second chapter is pretty description heavy to introduce the world, but character development and dialogue comes much more into play in the following chapters. Thanks for your input!
Well, I'm not a fan of hunting of any kind, but your descriptions of the ocean, of the culture and the environment were spot on. I'll definitely be reading more, J. R.
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Glad you liked it. And Kai is not the biggest fan of killing either. In fact, that's a pretty crucial plot point in this story. Thank you for your input!
This is seriously the best writing I've read on this site in a while lol. Excellent job with your pacing and adding in all the little details about the culture and such is quite enticing and rewarding in world building. Excellent job!
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Thanks a lot, I'm glad you liked it. My favorite part about writing these types of stories is the world building and creating cultures, so I'm glad you liked those elements. I really develop the culture in the following chapters and expand the world to encompass different lands. Thanks for your input!
Wow...just wow! This is an amazing piece of work. Such detail and devotion makes me jealous lol this is really impressive and I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. You've got a new fan for sure!
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Thanks a lot, I'm glad you like it! I'm really excited about this story, there's a whole world that I get to create and explore. I hope you'll read more!
Tribes, the sea and everything. I've never read anything like this before, and it's good. Thanks for the hard work!
This was a great read. I could clearly tell you did your research for this chapter. There were a few spots that it just read off for me...I couldn't really point out what it was, but it just seemed off. But overall it was a fantastic read.
Wow okay I'm just wowed by your writing. You have great descriptions for everything that's happening. I can tell that you've put a lot of hardwork into this and that’s awesome. Good job!
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Thanks, I appreciate it!
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