A Thief's Inheritance
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Book by: A. G. Smith
Now, four men, tied through mutual interest and criminal intent, have been forced to seek sanctuary as they evade the local law enforcement after a nearly botched robbery. As they wait for the storm to pass, a new cloud begins to darken the horizon, one that contains a horror that will lay bare each of their troubled pasts and fears. Soon, they will all but forget the threat of incarceration, as their minds and bodies are thrust into what can only be described as hell.
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Recent Comments
Pretty brutal opening; the stage is set. If it's horror you are going for, I'd put the reader in the eyes on Malachi, so that he's not just some badguy, but so that we can see that he has motives and logic for what he does.
Brutal. I like brutal.
The writing is incredible, but of course you know that.
The dark gothic tones really speak to me. I enjoy darker stories and darker realms. I am a huge fan of horror, so this chapter had me from the start.
Did I expect the baby to die? Yes. Do I mind I called it? No. Does there always need to be a twist? No.
Spence does bring up a good point about Ezra. Why would she give up her baby knowing what would happen?
I think Malachi killing a child as mercy has potiental. If we could connect more through his Pov it might even chill us. Why is it mercy, what is he saving the baby from. Offer the reader an argument a glimpse of what makes death better then life.
Now if you do not want the reader to connect to Malachi, or if you want him to be a pure monster, then let us see the horror through Ezra's eyes. Let us feel the hopelessness of losing her child.
With all that being said, I think the story is intense. I am awed at your writing, It is top notch and always joy to read. I am really look forward to diving into this book. Now that I know how black, and bleak your writing can be, I am psyched.
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I need to label this intro. It was my intention to not use a specific POV for this. It serves as a prelude, nothing more. It's almost a throw-away chapter. You will see what I mean as soon as you begin the next chapter. That is the real Chapter one :)
As always, thanks for reading and being so generous! I am super stoked to see what you think of this, since you are an avid horror fan. Spence says he's not very fluent with horror stories, so I can't tell if he's really digging it or not lmao
You know, I know I've read this before- was it on another account or reposted? Also, is it published somewhere else complete?
You do a really good job with your descriptions and atmosphere. I love how its implied the baby is drowned (how cruel), and not said directly. Definitely more sinister as when Macbeth comes with the bloody dangers and says the deed is done.
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I've changed my profile pic a couple of times, perhaps you read it then? I've posted Blade and the Bearer on Next Big Writer, but I haven't posted Thief on anything else, I don't think.
I'm glad the subtlety came through! I'm a huge horror fan, so I like to think I know what works and what doesn't. Apparently, in this case, it did! I'm so glad you you appreciate the atmosphere. I do hope you continue to read this story, but be forewarned: it's very dark and gruesome at times.
I personally believe truth is always worse than fiction. Happy writing to you!
A strong first chapter.
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Thank you!
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