Archaic Tracks

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Old train tracks in a forest. Sounds enticing right?

The ground crackled underneath his worn-out soles, he looked around, panting, breathless. Where was he going to hide? Running faster than the boy had ever run in his life, the earth vanishing beneath his feet with each quickened step, rocks bouncing around underneath him, he got closer and closer to the old railway. A voice called out in the distance just as he was approaching the train tracks “I’m going to get you really quickly this time!” Then an ear splitting silence followed he looked around quickly, swirling around on the spot “Oliver! I know all of your hiding spots! You can’t hide this time!” Oliver leapt for the train tracks to begin sprinting again. Suddenly, before Oliver could even process about what had just happened, he was eagle-spread in mid-air but it was as if he was in slow-motion, WHAM! He landed with a thud on a surface, his head was hurting a little bit and Oliver felt very disorientated. Once Oliver had come to, he realised that he was sitting on the floor of what appeared to be a deserted old train carriage. An ominous air flooded the carriage and Oliver gulped.

*3 Hours Earlier*

A boy with light brown hair and dark blue eyes scanned the room, he wore skinny black jeans, white sneakers and a slightly baggy t-shirt that had the words on it In my defence, I was left unsupervised. His eyes darted for the corner of the bedroom, which was covered in sheets, pillow cases and a quilt cover with its quilt in a heap. “I’ve found you Max!” And within an instance Oliver plunged onto the pile of linen. Max screamed out with partial laughter.
“Looks like I found you! This time it’s your turn to find me.” Said Oliver as he started to get up from the mass of fabric. “But this time it’s going to be harder as we can hide outside now and not just inside.” Oliver knew that he was going to hide in the forest next to where they lived.


Oliver had absolutely no idea as to what had just happened, but he was certain he was no longer in the forest as, he could not hear Max calling out for him. He had hoped that Max would keep searching and eventually, somehow, find him. He moved slowly and started observing his surroundings, the train felt like it was something out of the early 19th century. It was beautiful, but at the same time, it had this eerie presence about it, the floor was covered in a nice thin red carpet and apart from the carriage being a bit dusty, dark and a cobweb here and there it was relatively clean. Oliver had so many questions, so he continued through the carriage. He knew he should probably get out but the curiosity was eating away at him. What could this place possibly be?

Submitted: January 20, 2018

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Leih Winona-Wood

I like how in the beginning it appears that oliver is running from danger but later reveals it's a simple game of hide and seek.

Sat, January 20th, 2018 12:56am


Thank you, that was the effect I was hoping to achieve.

Fri, January 19th, 2018 4:57pm


Your descriptions are well-done. I like this! Keep up the good work

Sat, January 20th, 2018 1:16am


Thank you very much!

Fri, January 19th, 2018 5:17pm

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