Feather-light

 

No real substance,

no real weight,

just a feather

by the gate.

Maybe white

with a slight glow

or darkly black

like from a crow.

Just resting there

if you please,

until there comes

a gentle breeze.

It picks me up,

gathers strength,

I’m wondering where

the ground just went.

It whistles now

sends me west

so come on wind,

do your best.

Take me far across the sea,

don’t let me fall and drown,

carry me on your breath

until we hit that town.


Submitted: January 29, 2018

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ChristopherErick

Wonderful hully . I like how tangible this feels. Gives the reader a free feeling. Fantastic write !:)

Mon, January 29th, 2018 5:51pm

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Well, thanks so much for that, CE. Glad you enjoyed it.

Mon, January 29th, 2018 10:13am

JE Falcon aka JEF

A fine poem to read on a blustery day --- and then let the mind wander. ... Thanks!

Mon, January 29th, 2018 6:28pm

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Thanks, JE. Glad you enjoyed it.

Mon, January 29th, 2018 11:03am

Mike S.

Thanks, Hull!

Mon, January 29th, 2018 7:12pm

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You're welcome, Mike. And thanks for giving it a read.

Mon, January 29th, 2018 11:21am

jaylisbeth

Amazingly written, Hully. I love the flow of the structure. Well done.

Mon, January 29th, 2018 7:56pm

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Thanks for reading, jaylisbeth. It was a relief to write something more positive.

Mon, January 29th, 2018 12:35pm

Sue Harris

A lovely light, breezy poem, Hully - up, up and away. Fabulous!

Mon, January 29th, 2018 9:38pm

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Thanks, Sue. Trying for something a bit more positive!

Mon, January 29th, 2018 1:40pm

Dr. Acula

Ah, to be a feather upon the wing, to fall away and float in flight, with out the bird to sing.
You a quite a unique feather Hully, with ink filled words that I am always so happy to read; no matter the reason for their inscription !

Mon, January 29th, 2018 9:42pm

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A quill! I never thought of myself in that way before, Doc! Thanks so much for reading!

Mon, January 29th, 2018 1:43pm

Jeff Bezaire

A lovely piece, Hully. A touch of romanticism to it at the end.

Tue, January 30th, 2018 2:18am

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Looking for something just that bit lighter. Thanks for reading, Jeff.

Tue, January 30th, 2018 3:56am

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