Koi No Yokan

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Status: In Progress  |  Genre: Other  |  No Houses


All this resistance was in vain;

 my fatigue, my hunger, my bodily suffering,

my voice like a lonely bark faltering amid the darkened tempest of your shadow,

 

I lay fallen beneath your beautiful disaster,

 

a flame possessed with rebellion,

 

transformed hesitant,

yet deliberate.

 

Calm and console me,

inside your smarting feline Pegasus feathers,

 

then teach me of your wisdom,

 

as I am beguiled by your plague;

 

worth a thousand untamed pleasures of the touch in our world,

 

as we part,

yet again.


Submitted: February 03, 2018

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ChristopherErick

You are a brilliant person Dr acula. This is a very intriguing piece. You have a way to describe things metaphorically yet easy to understand. A rare gift .

Sat, February 3rd, 2018 3:52am

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Man, your too kind, so nice of you to say, thank you very much !
I wish I was brilliant.
I have hope though ))) Maybe, someday !!
Thanks CE !





Fri, February 2nd, 2018 9:04pm

Mike S.

You've written a poem like I could never--clever word play--this is an exotic bouquet of flavors from around the world, floral arrangement, while I write in meat and potato's, if that makes any fricking sense!

Sat, February 3rd, 2018 5:14am

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Trust me, you could slur your speech in another ;language , and somehow for some reason I'd prob still understand you ! ok 97 %. ..still...
Thank you, Mike. Really, ...Thank-you !


Fri, February 2nd, 2018 9:35pm

Kathrina Csernis

Another poem from you that I really enjoyed cx I love the way you describe things with metaphors; where some might have taken me a little longer to get than others, it was still easily understandable and I loved it! (well, I guess my slowness is due to the fact I haven't slept in two days and have been living off caffeine, but hey, that's just me) but yeah, I really enjoyed it :) My favourite part was probably ''feline pegasus feathers'', but this whole thing was, for the lack of a better word (or blame my tiredness again), beautiful. I loved it. Amazing work as always Acula cx

Sat, February 3rd, 2018 4:46pm

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Its about falling in love at first and naughty metaphors. I'm dirty )))
Thank you Kat !

Sat, February 3rd, 2018 4:17pm

hullabaloo22

Oh, this is just mixed up crazy beautiful, Doc! Too many great lines to list.

Sat, February 3rd, 2018 5:47pm

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Thank you Hully !

Sat, February 3rd, 2018 4:21pm

Keke Serene

I must be dumb as rocks but I got Greek hints throughout reading this besides the whole Pegasus bit- I'm reminded of Pandora and Promethesus (the god who stole the fire yknow?). But otherwise, I got nothing hahaha, I'm exhausted. XD

Sun, February 4th, 2018 3:55am

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Koi no yokan...the premonition of love..
It's that feeling that, upon meeting someone for the first time, you know love is inevitable..
also, its a naughty metaphor for... :D .....just because )))
Thanks stars !

Sun, February 4th, 2018 12:04pm

Kemy2U

I really adore this poem; it is beautifully written through-and-through. Nice piece.

Love and Hugs,
Kemy

Mon, March 12th, 2018 7:43pm

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Thank you , Kemy ! Hugs.

Mon, March 12th, 2018 1:03pm

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