Your force

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Vintage Publishing

Stay another hour...

With your kiss and your hug,

We cannot sweep under the rug.

What troubles us and instills fear,

But please don’t leave; just stay right here.

And kiss me slowly and I’ll try,

To believe you when you lie.

That all is well; that all is right,

That you will join me in this fight.

Love me here; love me now,

We will make it; don’t ask me how.

I’m semi-broken; still in pieces,

Falling through cracks and through the creases.

But you’re still here; don’t let me cower,

Stay with me for one more hour.

I am so weak and too unsure,

With your smile come and lure.

Only your kiss has that force,

So kiss away all the remorse.

And very gently stay as I sleep,

And be the dream-catcher I want to keep.

Submitted: February 07, 2018

© Copyright 2021 jaylisbeth. All rights reserved.

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Adam L.

Divinely beautiful, Lis. Your rhyme is impressive. Nicely done.

Wed, February 7th, 2018 2:07pm


Thank you so much, Adam :)

Wed, February 7th, 2018 6:12am

Jeff Bezaire

That ending is absolutely lovely, Lisbeth. I love the tenderness in this piece, and the assurance that all will turn out well in the end. As you say: 'We will make it; don't ask me how' - you don't have to have everything figured out, just know that things will work out in the end, because they will.
A beautiful poem.

Wed, February 7th, 2018 7:07pm


Thank you, Jeff :)

Wed, February 7th, 2018 11:17am

Sue Harris

Wow, beautifully written, JB, haunting, pleading and so poignant. Excellent job!

Wed, February 7th, 2018 9:17pm


Thank you vwry much, Sue :)

Wed, February 7th, 2018 4:03pm


Comfort sought and comfort brought.....excellent rhyming, jaylisbeth!

Wed, February 7th, 2018 9:33pm


Thank you so much, Hully :)

Wed, February 7th, 2018 4:02pm


I love the truth in this. Because you are still not honestly OK, but I love the honesty of willing to let things slide that used to bother you, just for that one hour of being honestly OK in comfort. I think you are at a stage now where you have to let certain things go, so that it can bring you some happiness. I love that there is a yearning for closure here, especially in the final few lines of the poems. The think I find in life is that you have to give something up for that bit of closure, and you are in that forest now. This is a wonderful poem, you are writing deeper and it is showcasing your brilliance as a poet. Your rhyming is just some of the best I have ever seen, and I hope my comments give you temporary happiness when you read them. I always believe in you Lisbeth :)

Thu, February 8th, 2018 3:07am


Thank you so much, dear friend :)

Wed, February 7th, 2018 7:33pm


The poem is like one crossing a bridge with broken boards, and has to be very careful not to fall through below. Your arrangement of words fantastic. One day, you'll be writing love poems; it is within you to do so. Love the rhyming. Nicely done.

Thu, February 8th, 2018 7:06am


Thank you so much, John :)

Thu, February 8th, 2018 5:43am


Close your eyes & remind you, of Fall, how I find you... You blaze in my heart with your gleam!
Even when you are thinking, or if you’ve been drinking; I know you’re just perfect in my dream!
In your day, come when may, you will say, if you may, that I’ve always been lingering for you here!

Thu, February 8th, 2018 7:19am


Thank you, sweet Spy :)

Thu, February 8th, 2018 5:43am

Angela Villaverde

This was romantically comforting ^.^

Thu, March 15th, 2018 4:24pm


Thank you, my love :*

Thu, March 15th, 2018 12:07pm

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