One Drop

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Other  |  House: Booksie Classic


One Drop

 

One single,

tiny,

solitary

drop of rain

meanders

down my

window pane.

Slowly

trailing

it’s descent;

to join

a puddle

it is meant.

At the bottom

there’s a drop,

down it goes,

it doesn’t stop.

A bit like

the single,

solitary

tear

that falls from

my eye.

Slowly

travelling,

cheek to

jaw

before it

splatters

to the floor.


Submitted: February 13, 2018

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JE Falcon aka JEF

Nice twist at the end. ...

Tue, February 13th, 2018 6:32pm

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Thank you, JE.

Tue, February 13th, 2018 10:41am

Sue Harris

This said so much in so few words, Hully. Very poignant and a great piece.

Tue, February 13th, 2018 7:13pm

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Thanks, Sue!

Tue, February 13th, 2018 11:31am

Frank N. Field

This is really good! The somewhat choppiness makes the rhyming scheme much more noticeable. The imagery was great, and I really liked the simile at the end.

Tue, February 13th, 2018 7:22pm

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Thanks so much for that, Frank!

Tue, February 13th, 2018 11:32am

Jeff Bezaire

I must say, this poem started off so lovely. I do enjoy watching the rain streak down a window or watch the shower water trail down the curtain; it's interesting watching the path of a drop of water, as well as see hundreds of them falling in tandem. Water creates lovely spectacles, but it can also create sad ones, as well. I suppose, depending on what the reader sees, your poem illustrates that.
Beautifully written, Hully.

Tue, February 13th, 2018 7:24pm

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Thanks for reading, Jeff. I'm finding it quite interesting how people interpret it!

Tue, February 13th, 2018 11:33am

jaylisbeth

Such a fine piece, Hully. Excellently expressed and very well structured.

Wed, February 14th, 2018 2:11pm

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Thanks, jaylisbeth, glad you enjoyed it.

Wed, February 14th, 2018 9:36am

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