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Status: In Progress  |  Genre: Romance  |  House: Booksie Classic

"starcrossed" lovers

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  Romantic “No over exposure. None…at...all.” Charlie caressed a picture of his “wife”. He paced around the... Read Chapter

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The descriptions that you used were really nice. I also liked how you write about what he's feeling. It helps the reader to be able to understand where the narrator is coming from if they can understand what they're thinking.

Tue, February 13th, 2018 9:07pm

Blake Kirfman

I wish there was a more! I want to know what her next response is and how crazy this guy really is. I like the twist on the romance. It's romance, in the guys eyes, but for us and the girl it's really creepy.

Tue, February 13th, 2018 9:42pm


It's interesting how willing Nancy is to listen to him. She says she likes him, and it makes me wonder if she had previously had a crush on him and was just too nervous to say anything about it, as he was. Obviously she wasn't as obsessed with him as he was her, but it's still an interesting notion. I really want to know how he explains the red room to her and how she responds to it. The descriptions were nice. I like how the descriptions of what Charlie is feeling and thinking are realistic enough that he could be a real person. They also help the reader to understand a bit more of why he's doing the things he's doing. He seems very socially awkward, so it stands to reason that he would put things in place to get her to start a conversation with him rather than start one himself.

Wed, February 14th, 2018 8:08pm

Cali 0617

wow he a fr33k ! I love where this is going. I thought it was a little wild that she went and agreed to sleep at his hotel room. One thing you could build on is establishing the time period. your use of figurative language and imagery was great.

Wed, February 14th, 2018 9:21pm


I wonder why Nancy likes Charlie. Well, love is generally unclear, so there can't be a good answer for that. On the flip side, I wonder why Charlie is obsessed with Nancy. I especially like the irony of the title in relation to the work as a whole, for the entire situation may not be seen as romantic for the characters involved. This is what I call "Subtle Romance," and seems satisfactory to me.

Wed, February 14th, 2018 9:44pm

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