Lost In Deep Space

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A space cadet wakes up alone on a space craft that is drifting aimlessly in deep space. The entire crew is gone with out a trace. He is now the soul survivor on a military space craft. With no
clues as to where the entire crew has gone to and with the entire ship malfunctioning, the space cadet must arm himself with nerves of steal to figure out on his own on how to get himself back
home. One wrong decision could mean his impending doom.

Science Fiction lost science-fiction space action artificial-intelligence

Chapter 1

Red lights flashed into my eyes. I right away was awakened from what seemed to be for me the longest sleep of my life. My body was a bit ... Read Chapter

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Liberator2033

I must admit I was hooked reading this. Somehow you were able to drive the story with minimal details. Maybe that's where I fall short? Ah that's besides the point. I was impressed how much I could picture just knowing that the ship was dark and abandoned. You could almost feel how panicked the main character was. I also must admit Debbie reminds me of Mother from the original Alien.

You showed the obvious problem pretty quick and threw out your protagonist's options by the end of the chapter. I'll be honest, I'm horrible at starting stories. My own is rather boring at the start compared to yours. Your story starts out with the character already in peril, something that truly gets a reader interested in what you're writing. Personally, when I read old novels in school I never wondered what would happen next, but when I finished your first chapter I had to ask myself, "Will this guy make it out of the ship, or will the escape pod mulfunction and doom him, forcing him to find some other way to escape or survive?". This was a good read.

Fri, April 13th, 2018 5:09pm

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I'm glad you enjoyed it. I had a lot of fun writing it. I think placing details in the right areas of a story is key while others are best left to the imagination of the reader. Take care!

Fri, April 13th, 2018 2:28pm