This is...

This is... perfect, Lis. I'm taken aback by your poem. The visual is real. Nicely done, sweetheart.

Very heartbreaking and beautifully written. I could feel both the emotional and physical pain. Keep it up! And thank you for reading more of my autobiography. You are almost done! I can't tell you how much it means to me.

Incredible jaylisbeth. Amazing writing.

Excellent poem, J. B!

I'm wondering, is there anything of you left to be seen? Can You walk? Can you talk? I see that you can type. This poem is deep an d the ryming is just first class.

This is an exceptional poem about pain. I know that this is a fiction piece, but this is one of the most deepest poems that I have ever read. It's a beautiful tragedy, and your words create haunting imagery that will stay with you for days. Your rhyming is perhaps the best I have ever seen, because it is extraordinary here, and it makes the pain more lifelike than ever before. It's like when the person is hurt, another piece of the mirror they look into breaks, because the mirror will always show the reflection of pain on a broken face. This is in a way beautiful, showing that life is really a ghost, because we will still feel pain long after life ends. Lisbeth your poetry is just beautiful, and it is the treasure inside the treasure chest.

This is far more powerful than most of your other work. Crafting images of pain and suffering to accompany the emotions adds a new depth to your words that is stunning. The images are so potent, the piece is gut-wrenching. A spectacular job, my dear!

This is exceptional, JB. So tragic, but beautifully expressed... this has taken your poetry to another dimension, Incredible, you should be very proud.

On gentle wings, I'll fly to you
I'll send you song, to comfort you
So pale, so frail, all eyes, are you
A light is on its way
I send my love to you, today.

You forgot one, jaylisbeth, so I'll say it for you....This is wonderful!

Really well done Jaylisbeth...Tom...

'This is trauma; This is true. This is me because of you.' Dig it! Great line and great poem, mi amiga!

How my heart bleeds for you my friend!

So much weight! I loved it! Very profound. The imagery in my head was tragic, but worth it. You deep human, you :(.

You captured my feelings and put it into words so perfectly. I'm in awe.

Nicely written (again). You show us that pain is universal and it comes in so many forms.

Question: is the abuse by her own hands or by that of a lover?

Beautiful. Such great imagery.

Incredible work, it's got such strong imagery. Well done.

Great imagery and such emotion.

No heart should be beyond repair