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"I like that you kept this story nice and action-packed, and launched right into the action right away. Leaving it on a cliffhanger was also nice because it gives the reader something to look forward to for the next chapter. Other than a few grammar mistakes, this was well done and very descriptive :)"
This is the sequel to the story Izle
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I like that you kept this story nice and action-packed, and launched right into the action right away. Leaving it on a cliffhanger was also nice because it gives the reader something to look forward to for the next chapter. Other than a few grammar mistakes, this was well done and very descriptive :)
Fri, December 21st, 2018 2:21am
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Thank you so much!
Fri, December 21st, 2018 8:15am
You are really good with action sequences, and the descriptions give just the necessary amount of details. I haven't read the prequel so I don't know much about the main characters. What I got was that they're heroes of some kind?
The story just needs a bit of polishing to stand out. It needs to be punctuated better, and perhaps make the text left to right rather than center?
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Thank you so much for your feedback!
Sun, February 3rd, 2019 1:13pmFacebook Comments
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Really descriptive.
Fri, August 17th, 2018 6:27amToo many commas! The opening was getting my attention only for that commas to ruin it! It's like having to break a car after only just hitting the gas!
Scourge is a scary character.
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Thank you!
Fri, August 17th, 2018 9:11am