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"I like that you kept this story nice and action-packed, and launched right into the action right away. Leaving it on a cliffhanger was also nice because it gives the reader something to look forward to for the next chapter. Other than a few grammar mistakes, this was well done and very descriptive :)"
An Ailing Shadow
Reads: 6968 | Likes: 6 | Shelves: 1 | Comments: 3
Book by: A.L. Martin
This is the sequel to the story Izle
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Submitted: June 26, 2018
Submitted: June 26, 2018
Submitted: June 26, 2018
Submitted: June 26, 2018
Submitted: June 26, 2018
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Really descriptive.
Too many commas! The opening was getting my attention only for that commas to ruin it! It's like having to break a car after only just hitting the gas!
Scourge is a scary character.
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Thank you!
I like that you kept this story nice and action-packed, and launched right into the action right away. Leaving it on a cliffhanger was also nice because it gives the reader something to look forward to for the next chapter. Other than a few grammar mistakes, this was well done and very descriptive :)
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Thank you so much!
You are really good with action sequences, and the descriptions give just the necessary amount of details. I haven't read the prequel so I don't know much about the main characters. What I got was that they're heroes of some kind?
The story just needs a bit of polishing to stand out. It needs to be punctuated better, and perhaps make the text left to right rather than center?
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Thank you so much for your feedback!
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