Biggest Lie

hullabaloo22

Yep, we all try to deny the pain. Nicely done.

Jake J. Harrison

Some great lines. I like the change in direction, the trying to stuff everything back in the box.

james farr

A well written poem with very good couplets and cadence.Could be converted to music!

Derina Peng

good poem. 'I am fine' certainly become the biggest lie right now.

abyskaria

This is my opinion. You have honestly presented what just made me think as the making of a resolution. People lie about facts before them but do they fall to be judged within. Who will answer a mind divided among mindsets of true distress and I feel these lines wound a journey unseen in your untold scripts? There is a feeling the heat never wounds us unless we feel the burns left untouched. Please do get our decisions so made correctly that the talk can proceed. Dont just wake up today and say I am fine when you are already lost. But there is a message I like to quote.

May be someone who shout this message must know what is coming out of a work so kept changing. I feel the artist must camp around the top of the voice to say and call back where this is missing.

Anyway good expressions. :)

Damp Kitten

I like your rhyme, the short bursts, the vague reference to ‘them’ and what they’ve done. Your tags reveal that this is about bullying, which makes sense as I read it. Everyone focuses on the change of direction (I’m fine), which is,of course, the theme as suggested by the title, but I like to focus on the first stanzas where you emphasize the pain, the sense of helplessness, the indignity. There is a process of recognition here that you unveil as the poem proceeds and a series of complimentary emotions at each stage; anger, fear, apathy, denial.

Rehmat Tanzila

It has left me teary-eyed! Why! I feel it!

charlamaye

Beautifully written