Can I just fall?
Reads: 13419 | Likes: 23 | Shelves: 7 | Comments: 14
Poem by: jaylisbeth
Can I let go and fall into you?
And in your arms breathe you in too?
Can I collapse right on your chest?
Am I overstepping with my request?
Can I just love you obsessively?
Can I just need you this desperately?
I want you for me; I want you for life,
I’ll love you forever even in strife.
I just want to fall in your embrace,
Call you all day and leave you no space.
To trace with my finger around your lips,
And kiss your hand and fingertips.
Crazy about you, (crazy, I know),
Maybe I’m crazy; I can’t let you go.
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Well Done Jaylisbeth, like your trying to get as close as you can to the one you love...Tom...
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Why, thank you, Tom :) I have been going through a Romance genre thing lately lol. Thank you for commenting, my good friend.
All engulfing passion here, jaylisbeth. Excellent rhyming.
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Why, thank you most kindly, Hully :)
We love too hard, Lis. I like the honesty and intensity of your feelings in this poem. The fact that at least through writing we can say what we really want is complete satisfaction. Nice work, sweetheart.
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I couldn't have said it better, amigo, thank you for your continuous and endless support :)
Such passion... crazy in love! Great writing, JB.
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Thank you so much, Sue :) Very inspired lately. Taking advantage of that.
Beautiful love.
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Thank you, Joy
Well done, I relate to this one. I love really hard and have periods of borderline obsession with someone, trying to get as close as possible to them and intensify the relationship as fast as possible. Wonderful job Lis
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We have plenty in common, my dear friend :) thank you!
I don't know, J. B. I'm kind of a wuss--excellent!
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I bet you aren't, Mike :) thank you very much.
Even though this is romance, I just had to shelf this because this is absolute perfection in passion and lust. You are honest with your words, and the intensity is to the extreme because why wouldn't you say these words? It's a love letter to the works of Shakespeare, because it takes love to another place of poetry, and it's immortalised forever. You should never leave your aura in romance, and don't let anyone tell you that it's repetitive, because it's not; it's fucking beautiful. I'm going to surpass you, and I'm going to write a romantic piece soon. Are you shocked? I have no words left to say, but just beautiful :)
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Well, I am indeed both stunned and glad that I have perhaps inspired you to write a romantic piece, dear Dexter :) thank you very much!
The sentiments in this piece are so beautiful, Lis. So many sweet lines and lovely words.
I love it! Spectacular, my friend!
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Aww, thank you, Jeff :)
Love can make us crazy at times, and can seem to become an obsession. You captured that very well here. Another wonderful and passionate poem. Loved it.
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Thank you very much, Criss :) You are very kind.
The rhyming is great! Romantic, romantic, romantic.
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Thank you very much, John :)
Pero loquisima, dique call you all day and leave no space—MIRA, STALKER, lol, tss! Tranquila!
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Lmaoo
Love the anguish that comes through in this love. I think we have all felt like this at one point!
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Thank you so much for the read and comment :) I appreciate it greatly
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