Longing in secret

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: True Confessions  |  House: Vintage Publishing


Loving you in secret;

Causing me this pain,

I am bitter and so jealous;

Somehow, I can’t explain.

 

I have to hush these feelings;

A cure is out of range,

Because no matter what I say;

Frankly, it won’t change.

 

This is a risk I took;

Yes, I am aware,

But sometimes it’s just too much;

And it seems unfair.

 

I know the feeling’s mutual;

For you want to be with me,

I am scared of being candid

Because perhaps you won’t agree.

 

And now I feel so helpless;

Vulnerable it seems,

The only life I share with you;

Is only in my dreams.


Submitted: August 30, 2018

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Adam L.

A job well done, Lis. Love those last lines my heart is aching. Nice work, sweetheart.

Thu, August 30th, 2018 2:33pm

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Thank you, amigo :)

Thu, August 30th, 2018 7:37am

Kemy2U

I've always found to share an intimate secret/liason with a man is fulfilling and rewarding on so many levels, and that's only because, the passion, the hidden desires, the longing as you stated, is something that is so personal to experience for that moment in time, but it's special between you too, therefore, blocking the world out when you are together.This is such a nice worded poem.

Love and Hugs,
Kemy

Thu, August 30th, 2018 3:22pm

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Oh, thank you so much, Kemy. I couldn't agree more with you! I appreciate you taking the time to comment.
XoXo!

Thu, August 30th, 2018 12:49pm

Mike S.

Ah yes, the agony of secret, impossible longing--excellent, J. B!

Thu, August 30th, 2018 4:13pm

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Thank you, Mike!

Thu, August 30th, 2018 12:48pm

hullabaloo22

Ouch, that last verse is so relatable it's painful. Excellent work, jaylisbeth!

Thu, August 30th, 2018 6:18pm

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Awww, why thank you, Hully

Thu, August 30th, 2018 12:47pm

Jeff Bezaire

It's the risk you have to choose to take or not take. Opening yourself up to someone is never easy, especially when it's for love. You never know how the other person's going to react; even if you're on the same page, making that leap can sideline everything. There's many factors to consider when deciding whether to confess your love for someone, but the most important factor is knowing how strong your bond is. A strong bond can withstand anything.
A well written piece, my friend. A complex issue with no easy answers.

Thu, August 30th, 2018 7:18pm

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Thank you so much, my friend, I appreciate the thoughtful response :)

Thu, August 30th, 2018 12:47pm

Joy Shaw

Gives the man of your dreams a new spin. Love this, Lis!
Blessings,
Joy

Thu, August 30th, 2018 7:59pm

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Thank you so much, Joy!

Thu, August 30th, 2018 1:40pm

TheSinningCrow

This is an interesting poem. The last line reflects the whole truth of this. Dreams always feel so far away, because physically you cannot touch them. Longing is a word I hear alot lately. A doom metal band I love has a song called I Long, but it's about longing for sweet nightmares to end. Different topic to this, but longing for something is always the same meaning. As others have mentioned, this longing is a passion but also a temptation. It's either risk or reward. Don't damage your heart too much, but a special bond is better than any dream. That last line is one of the best lines you have ever written. Such a beautiful story in your words. Your rhymes are a dream, possibly the best I have ever seen. Stunning poem. I'm longing for Slasher season three, are you? :) I need to ask you a favour anyways :)

Thu, August 30th, 2018 8:51pm

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Thank you so much, Dexter :)

Fri, August 31st, 2018 6:21am

Tom Allen714

Very sweet Jaylisbeth...Tom...

Thu, August 30th, 2018 11:00pm

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Thank you, Tom :)

Fri, August 31st, 2018 6:20am

Melancholic Wisdom

Funnily enough you wrote a poem that relates to a situation I'm currently in, a case of being in love with someone in complete secret, with a huge question mark over whether or not they'd feel the same way about me. I can certainly relate to the line "the only life I share with you, is only in my dreams". Not only is it really relatable to my current situation, but everyone has been there at one time or another. Certainly I think this is one of your best works, it's one of my favorites from you. Your talent is limitless, and you get better with each posting. Fantastic work, Lis, you're one of the best on the site.

Fri, August 31st, 2018 4:39am

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I am humbled by your kind words, my friend, why thank you truly :)

Fri, August 31st, 2018 6:20am

johngumbs

Quite a lot happens in our lives. Secret love or open love, if it is strong and true, grab it.

Fri, August 31st, 2018 4:56am

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Thank you very much, John :)

Fri, August 31st, 2018 6:19am

Sue Harris

Sweet dreams, JB. Great poem!

Tue, September 4th, 2018 7:06pm

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Thank you very much, Sue :)

Wed, September 5th, 2018 7:06am

Criss Sole

I loved the last line! Very heartbreaking. I'm sure many of us can relate. Great poem!.

Sat, September 29th, 2018 8:53am

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Thank you, dearest

Tue, October 2nd, 2018 6:34am

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