Heavy weight

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: True Confessions  |  House: Vintage Publishing


The weight


The weight of your words; too heavy for me,

You always win that’s unarguably.

I’m tired of this and of hurting, too,

Tired of crying; tired of you.

 

The weight is too much; I just can’t bear,

I’m silenced; I’m trapped and nobody’s there.

Why are you like this? I just need to know,

This “love” is the kind that you always show.

 

This pain is too heavy for my moribund soul,

This isn’t love; this is control.


Submitted: September 05, 2018

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Adam L.

Short but with so much being told, Lis. Emotional and deep.

Wed, September 5th, 2018 2:24pm

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Thank you, Adam, very personal.

Wed, September 5th, 2018 7:29am

KJGG1230

It's so deep, mezmerizing, and full of actual emotion. You have done more GREAT work, Jaylisabeth.

Wed, September 5th, 2018 2:35pm

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Thank you very kindly, I appreciate your words.

Wed, September 5th, 2018 7:35am

Sue Harris

The last line speaks volumes, JB. Control is dangerous... free yourself! As always, a remarkable poem!

Wed, September 5th, 2018 4:38pm

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Thank you, dearest Sue

Wed, September 5th, 2018 6:33pm

Melancholic Wisdom

Shorter than your usual work, but it was packed full of emotions and powerful words. The last line in particular is incredibly striking, as that will resonate with anyone who has been in that type of relationship. Well done Lis, you put your heart on your sleeve.

Wed, September 5th, 2018 4:50pm

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Thank you so much, my good friend.

Wed, September 5th, 2018 6:33pm

Mike S.

Sounds like it--excellent, J. B!

Wed, September 5th, 2018 5:32pm

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Thank you, Mike

Wed, September 5th, 2018 6:33pm

Jeff Bezaire

That last line says it all. A heavy piece, my friend. I hope the sun finds its way into your heart and brightens your day! Look out towards the possibilities, there are so many of them.

Wed, September 5th, 2018 6:54pm

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Thank you so much, Jeff. Friday night was a little tough for me.

Wed, September 5th, 2018 6:32pm

hullabaloo22

It is shorter than your usual poems, jaylisbeth, but it is just as well written. Excellent!

Wed, September 5th, 2018 7:10pm

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I actually hand wrote this on Friday night and it was more like free writing because it was the only thing that helped me stopped crying, since I had to concentrate on writing the poem. Thank you so much for reading, Hully.

Wed, September 5th, 2018 6:32pm

TheSinningCrow

It's difficult when you are in a very dark place, and trying to keep your heart beating. You have so much anger to vent at these chains of control, and they are not breaking. Love is never love when it is control instead. Your last line portraits that quite hauntingly. Lisbeth you are not a ghost, because your emotions are the haunting aspect the you. You need to go to a darker place because that is where your fight is; it's where your ally is. It will give your the words and the strength to break this control. You stand up for yourself through your emotions, and I admire you for this. The weight may be heavy, but you are strong enough to lift it, and throw it to the sirens of the ocean. Gun down this romance, and I believe one day the sun will rise for you. Emotionally charged coming from dark places, and again I say this is real life. It is not fiction, it is your life. Your poetry is always beautiful, and tragically bittersweet. Your heart is your shield, and it is your immunity. I hope it finds a better world. Excellent poem my friend.

Wed, September 5th, 2018 9:28pm

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Thank you, deeply my friend.

Wed, September 5th, 2018 6:29pm

Keke Serene

I understand this very much. It's almost laughable in a terrible way the things we will accept in the name of love. An excellent write and powerful last words.

Wed, September 5th, 2018 11:02pm

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Thank you so very much :)

Wed, September 5th, 2018 6:28pm

johngumbs

This poem says it all. How much can one take. Remember, you're still young.

Thu, September 6th, 2018 5:33am

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Thank you, John

Thu, September 6th, 2018 5:20am

Criss Sole

As always, great closing line! When you begin to control someone in a relationship, it is no longer a relationship. Great poem Jay!

Sun, September 30th, 2018 4:35am

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Thank you for understanding, my dear

Tue, October 2nd, 2018 6:34am

jmm424

An honest poem. I feel bad saying great job because of the meaning. No disrespect. Stay strong.

Fri, October 19th, 2018 10:53pm

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This was very difficult to write. But I have been feeling much better, my dear friend. I decided to work on my novel and it took my mind off of things. Thank you for caring.

Mon, October 22nd, 2018 6:10am

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