The weight of your words; too heavy for me,
You always win that’s unarguably.
I’m tired of this and of hurting, too,
Tired of crying; tired of you.
The weight is too much; I just can’t bear,
I’m silenced; I’m trapped and nobody’s there.
Why are you like this? I just need to know,
This “love” is the kind that you always show.
This pain is too heavy for my moribund soul,
This isn’t love; this is control.
Submitted: September 05, 2018
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It's so deep, mezmerizing, and full of actual emotion. You have done more GREAT work, Jaylisabeth.
Wed, September 5th, 2018 2:35pmThe last line speaks volumes, JB. Control is dangerous... free yourself! As always, a remarkable poem!
Shorter than your usual work, but it was packed full of emotions and powerful words. The last line in particular is incredibly striking, as that will resonate with anyone who has been in that type of relationship. Well done Lis, you put your heart on your sleeve.
Wed, September 5th, 2018 4:50pmSounds like it--excellent, J. B!
Wed, September 5th, 2018 5:32pmThat last line says it all. A heavy piece, my friend. I hope the sun finds its way into your heart and brightens your day! Look out towards the possibilities, there are so many of them.
Wed, September 5th, 2018 6:54pmIt is shorter than your usual poems, jaylisbeth, but it is just as well written. Excellent!
Wed, September 5th, 2018 7:10pmIt's difficult when you are in a very dark place, and trying to keep your heart beating. You have so much anger to vent at these chains of control, and they are not breaking. Love is never love when it is control instead. Your last line portraits that quite hauntingly. Lisbeth you are not a ghost, because your emotions are the haunting aspect the you. You need to go to a darker place because that is where your fight is; it's where your ally is. It will give your the words and the strength to break this control. You stand up for yourself through your emotions, and I admire you for this. The weight may be heavy, but you are strong enough to lift it, and throw it to the sirens of the ocean. Gun down this romance, and I believe one day the sun will rise for you. Emotionally charged coming from dark places, and again I say this is real life. It is not fiction, it is your life. Your poetry is always beautiful, and tragically bittersweet. Your heart is your shield, and it is your immunity. I hope it finds a better world. Excellent poem my friend.
Wed, September 5th, 2018 9:28pmI understand this very much. It's almost laughable in a terrible way the things we will accept in the name of love. An excellent write and powerful last words.
Wed, September 5th, 2018 11:02pmThis poem says it all. How much can one take. Remember, you're still young.
Thu, September 6th, 2018 5:33amAs always, great closing line! When you begin to control someone in a relationship, it is no longer a relationship. Great poem Jay!
Sun, September 30th, 2018 4:35amAn honest poem. I feel bad saying great job because of the meaning. No disrespect. Stay strong.
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Short but with so much being told, Lis. Emotional and deep.
Wed, September 5th, 2018 2:24pmAuthor
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Thank you, Adam, very personal.
Wed, September 5th, 2018 7:29am