Heavy weight

Short but with so much being told, Lis. Emotional and deep.

It's so deep, mezmerizing, and full of actual emotion. You have done more GREAT work, Jaylisabeth.

This isn't love, this is control - damn, what a line, what a way to end it! I can tell this came from a very dark place! Well written Lis!

Sohail

The last line speaks volumes, JB. Control is dangerous... free yourself! As always, a remarkable poem!

Shorter than your usual work, but it was packed full of emotions and powerful words. The last line in particular is incredibly striking, as that will resonate with anyone who has been in that type of relationship. Well done Lis, you put your heart on your sleeve.

Sounds like it--excellent, J. B!

That last line says it all. A heavy piece, my friend. I hope the sun finds its way into your heart and brightens your day! Look out towards the possibilities, there are so many of them.

It is shorter than your usual poems, jaylisbeth, but it is just as well written. Excellent!

Time to hit the gym. I'll spot ya, so you can benchpress this weight off like a bodybuilder. As always, wonderful rhymes. Hope all is well, mi friend.

It's difficult when you are in a very dark place, and trying to keep your heart beating. You have so much anger to vent at these chains of control, and they are not breaking. Love is never love when it is control instead. Your last line portraits that quite hauntingly. Lisbeth you are not a ghost, because your emotions are the haunting aspect the you. You need to go to a darker place because that is where your fight is; it's where your ally is. It will give your the words and the strength to break this control. You stand up for yourself through your emotions, and I admire you for this. The weight may be heavy, but you are strong enough to lift it, and throw it to the sirens of the ocean. Gun down this romance, and I believe one day the sun will rise for you. Emotionally charged coming from dark places, and again I say this is real life. It is not fiction, it is your life. Your poetry is always beautiful, and tragically bittersweet. Your heart is your shield, and it is your immunity. I hope it finds a better world. Excellent poem my friend.

I understand this very much. It's almost laughable in a terrible way the things we will accept in the name of love. An excellent write and powerful last words.

This poem says it all. How much can one take. Remember, you're still young.

As always, great closing line! When you begin to control someone in a relationship, it is no longer a relationship. Great poem Jay!

An honest poem. I feel bad saying great job because of the meaning. No disrespect. Stay strong.