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"An excellent poem. That last verse is so effectively composed!"
Silencing waves
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Poem by: NorthernSiren
This water pulls me under
This current holds me down.
How can I find the surface?
When my body, is so far gone.
These waves they hold me hostage
These rocks they bar me in.
How can the sun not care?
When it’s up there, glaring down.
This air, it can’t escape me
These lungs will not burn out.
How can I not feel hopeless?
When the silence, drowns me out.
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An excellent poem. That last verse is so effectively composed!
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Thanks for your input, I'm glad you like it :)
This one really hits close to home for me, almost all of my really close friends have struggled with mental illness and suicidal thoughts, including myself. And I think you described that feeling perfectly. Excellent work
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Thank you, that is also something that I have struggled with my entire life as well. I wrote this poem the day after a family friend had committed suicide. I felt this was a way to portray the feelings many people have before they get to that point.
masterfully crafted in a way that brings awareness to a form of mental health we're all familiar with. hauntingly beautiful.
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