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"masterfully crafted in a way that brings awareness to a form of mental health we're all familiar with. hauntingly beautiful."
This water pulls me under
This current holds me down.
How can I find the surface?
When my body, is so far gone.
These waves they hold me hostage
These rocks they bar me in.
How can the sun not care?
When it’s up there, glaring down.
This air, it can’t escape me
These lungs will not burn out.
How can I not feel hopeless?
When the silence, drowns me out.
Submitted: September 17, 2018
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This one really hits close to home for me, almost all of my really close friends have struggled with mental illness and suicidal thoughts, including myself. And I think you described that feeling perfectly. Excellent work
Thu, August 22nd, 2019 6:22ammasterfully crafted in a way that brings awareness to a form of mental health we're all familiar with. hauntingly beautiful.
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An excellent poem. That last verse is so effectively composed!
Mon, September 17th, 2018 6:35pmAuthor
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Thanks for your input, I'm glad you like it :)
Tue, September 18th, 2018 3:21pm