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"There was so much in that last line, it brought the whole story together, it was so good. I like how before that it captured his life and situation, especially his expectations, because it made the end that much more hopeful and alluring. "
She's standing there in the almost-deserted car park, waiting for me. A chill wind is blowing down from the east, down from the snows of the High Alps. She looks cold and bored in her thick green parka, her fur-lined hood. She's standing next to my new car.
It's a long way from Chamonix to Grenoble, where the dealers are big enough to give you a choice. It was good that Citroën had delivered the pick-up right to my doorstep. It had been just a bus ride to get here.
The Haute-Savoie is beautiful and frigid, great for tourists, walkers and skiers. But it's a lonely life if you're a single mechanic, driving the long kilometres between isolated farms. This new pick-up will make all the difference.
She gives me the key and I unlock it. She takes off her coat, places it in the back then eases into the passenger seat. What a contrast we make: me, the burly worker in my blue overalls and heavy boots; her, petite .. and of course I can't help noticing her enticing shoulder-length curls, her short peasant-style dress, and silky black tights.
I concentrate as she runs me through the complex controls. She has the soft local accent, it's cute.
Will she be my point of contact going forwards? I consider the matter but on balance I doubt it. Chamonix is such a small place, there are no good servicing facilities here. I resign myself to a yearly trek across the mountains back to the dealers.
“I suppose I won't be seeing you again,” I say, as she finishes up.
She looks at me appraisingly.
“You could.”
Submitted: January 25, 2019
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So many transient encounters - when you connect with someone - life's full of 'em. Then the practicality in us wags its finger and tells us it's just a fairy tale. Although I hope magic moments like these really do flourish in to something beautiful. We certainly need it in these rocky times.
Wed, February 5th, 2020 6:56pmaha you took the chance to ask...and you were rewarded...
fortune favours the brave Mr. Carlton..
There was so much in that last line, it brought the whole story together, it was so good. I like how before that it captured his life and situation, especially his expectations, because it made the end that much more hopeful and alluring.
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Derina Peng
That is a cute romance. You didn't say much but that was enough for readers to think.
Mon, May 27th, 2019 3:21pmAuthor
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Thanks! I wanted to capture just this little moment, full of meaning and potential!
Mon, May 27th, 2019 9:24am