The Greeter

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Romance  |  House: Booksie Classic

Featured Review on this writing by Archia

The Haute-Savoie is beautiful and frigid, la France profonde. but even in the desolated High Alps, fortune can still turn .. .

She's standing there in the almost-deserted car park, waiting for me. A chill wind is blowing down from the east, down from the snows of the High Alps. She looks cold and bored in her thick green parka, her fur-lined hood. She's standing next to my new car.

It's a long way from Chamonix to Grenoble, where the dealers are big enough to give you a choice. It was good that Citroën had delivered the pick-up right to my doorstep. It had been just a bus ride to get here.

The Haute-Savoie is beautiful and frigid, great for tourists, walkers and skiers. But it's a lonely life if you're a single mechanic, driving the long kilometres between isolated farms. This new pick-up will make all the difference.

She gives me the key and I unlock it. She takes off her coat, places it in the back then eases into the passenger seat. What a contrast we make: me, the burly worker in my blue overalls and heavy boots; her, petite .. and of course I can't help noticing her enticing shoulder-length curls, her short peasant-style dress, and silky black tights.

I concentrate as she runs me through the complex controls. She has the soft local accent, it's cute.

Will she be my point of contact going forwards? I consider the matter but on balance I doubt it. Chamonix is such a small place, there are no good servicing facilities here. I resign myself to a yearly trek across the mountains back to the dealers.

“I suppose I won't be seeing you again,” I say, as she finishes up.

She looks at me appraisingly.

“You could.”

Submitted: January 25, 2019

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Derina Peng

That is a cute romance. You didn't say much but that was enough for readers to think.

Mon, May 27th, 2019 3:21pm


Thanks! I wanted to capture just this little moment, full of meaning and potential!

Mon, May 27th, 2019 9:24am

Jobe Rubens

So many transient encounters - when you connect with someone - life's full of 'em. Then the practicality in us wags its finger and tells us it's just a fairy tale. Although I hope magic moments like these really do flourish in to something beautiful. We certainly need it in these rocky times.

Wed, February 5th, 2020 6:56pm


Yeah. It's rare but it happens. More if you get out a bit, do the mission.

Wed, February 5th, 2020 11:22am

Sharief Hendricks

aha you took the chance to ask...and you were rewarded...

fortune favours the brave Mr. Carlton..

Wed, June 24th, 2020 8:07am


For sure. It's a great little fantasy for a young working-class man...

Mon, June 29th, 2020 8:43am


There was so much in that last line, it brought the whole story together, it was so good. I like how before that it captured his life and situation, especially his expectations, because it made the end that much more hopeful and alluring.

Thu, January 7th, 2021 11:45pm


Thank you. I felt this came together quite well, not even sure how. The wistful expectations buried by quotidien routines.

Fri, January 8th, 2021 1:20am

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