Running On Empty

Jay Hill

Honestly, this is a great first chapter to your story. The descriptions are on point and the backstory to "Easy" is very vivid and does not shy away from details. Hell, the title looked interesting and the first paragraph had me hooked. The only criticism I could give, however, is how the story goes into recent events that quickly. The beginning is more like an epilouge than a first chapter, and the part introducing the male could've been the beginning of the first chapter. Just my opinion, but besides that, great work ^-^ Keep it up!