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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Romance  |  House: Booksie Classic

Featured Review on this writing by Sharief Hendricks

An unfit man has a bizarre encounter in the local gym...

'No, like this. Come to Me!' by David Mark at Pixabay

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Beaumont arrived at the Fitness Centre a broken man, mourning the death of his young wife. He scanned his membership card and went straight into the gym, dressed for cardio in black track suit bottoms, thin, cool t-shirt, running shoes.

At least, he wouldn’t have to change in the locker room. He found the sight of fitter, young men, half his age, towelling their well-endowed bodies dry, embarrassing.

The gym was heaving with sweaty bodies at that time of the morning. Fanatics, dripping, dropping in, to oxygenate their beefed-up muscles on their way to work.

One treadmill, fitted with a tv screen, was free. Beaumont swooped, hung his turquoise hand towel round his neck and selected manual. The belt started to run. He pressed quick start, selected a speed of 4.0, incline of 6.0, and jogged.

The tv was tuned in to a lively breakfast debate on healthy eating. Finding it distracting, he switched it off and got into his stride. The shadowy carbon screen matched his sombre mood.

After 32.17 minutes, Beaumont had run 2.1km and burnt off 329.3 calories.

At that exact moment Elspeth’s ghostly apparition appeared on the screen and mouthed:

‘Come to me, my love!’

The gym disappeared. The screen grew larger, larger and larger until it swallowed him up.

Time elapsed: 32.18 minutes.

Distance: 2.11km.

Calories burned: 1329.3.

Heart rate: 123, 129, 134, 137, 142, 146, 155, 158, 164, 167, 176, 178, 185, 197, 208, 211.

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Submitted: March 11, 2019

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hullabaloo22

Oooh, I like this, HJ. Really well written piece of flash fiction.

Fri, June 21st, 2019 8:55pm

Author
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Ah, thank you very much Hully,
I wanted to show that men can be as vulnerable as women, particularly in grief... and in the gym.
HJ

Fri, June 21st, 2019 3:02pm

Gdokim


Kind of a spoiler question sorry
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Um, so did he have a heart attack?

Sat, June 22nd, 2019 12:22am

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Not necessarily!
HJ

Fri, June 21st, 2019 11:06pm

Gdokim

Oh, the spoiler alert doesn't work on here anyway loved your story very detailed.

Sat, June 22nd, 2019 12:23am

Author
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Ah, thank you very much Gdokim,
I responded to your spoiler alert, ambiguously, so no spoilage has occurred!
HJ

Fri, June 21st, 2019 11:08pm

Gdokim

Thank you and excellent story.

Tue, June 25th, 2019 8:08am

Author
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Thank You Very Much Gdokim,

HJ

Tue, June 25th, 2019 2:47am

Gdokim

You're welcome.

Fri, June 28th, 2019 6:42pm

Author
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Ah, thank you Gdokim,
Check out my 2 brand new SF stories - 'Sparkle' and 'Vest'
HJ

Fri, June 28th, 2019 2:59pm

C.A.A.

Once again, you've captured the reader from word one

Sat, November 30th, 2019 4:39pm

Author
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Thank you so much for your kind words, C.A.A.

Sat, November 30th, 2019 2:24pm

Robert Helliger

An enjoyable, well written piece of writing, HJ.

Tue, March 3rd, 2020 9:56pm

Author
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Thank you so much, Robert,
Glad you enjoyed it! HJx

Tue, March 3rd, 2020 11:09pm

Sharief Hendricks

Nice one HJ !

looks like Beaumont got swallowed up by his grief...
I want to believe Elspeth is his deceased wife and not the mythical games character...

Death tends to remind us just how powerless we really are...and sometimes that is the hardest thing to accept...and it weighs even heavier when we are alone with our thoughts ,even in a gym...

Well done !

Mon, August 3rd, 2020 11:30am

Author
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Thank you very much Sharief,
Elspeth, sadly, is Beaumont's deceased wife...
THEN SHE COMES BACK!
HJ

Tue, August 4th, 2020 12:15pm

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