My last words

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I was already broken...

I know that I am different; I can see it too,

That I may seem careless by not minding you.

I know that I am different; and I have to say,

I really am not trying to behave this way.

 

I’m starting to see you in another light,

Slowly but surely; I see you’re not right.

Maybe I’m tired and there’s really no use,

I’ve simply had it with all your abuse.

 

I can’t stand your fingers caressing my skin,

I am not yours; I never have been.

You’ve hurt me too much; don’t worry it’s done,

It’s all been forgiven; I’m ready to run.

 

Don’t flatter yourself by being outspoken,

You didn’t break me; I was already broken.


Submitted: March 18, 2019

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jmm424

Oh this is an excellent poem, Jaylisbeth. I love the last line.

Mon, March 18th, 2019 2:58pm

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Thank you, jmm :)

Mon, March 18th, 2019 8:08am

Adam L.

Powerful stuff, Lis. Especially that last line. Nicely done

Mon, March 18th, 2019 5:25pm

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Thank you, amigo!

Tue, March 19th, 2019 6:18am

Mike S.

I'm sorry, I'll keep my hand to myself--not about me, is it? Well, excellent also, J. B!

Mon, March 18th, 2019 6:00pm

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Ha! Thank you so much, Mike!

Tue, March 19th, 2019 6:17am

Jeff Bezaire

A powerful poem, my friend. It's both strong and sad at once - having the courage to look inside and see the truth, but also seeing that the truth is not a happy one. It's a brave poem.
As sad as it is, there's so much hope, so much promise. It's not just a poem about accepting the truth within herself, it's also about accepting the truth about someone who hurts her. It adds an underlying sense of encouragement that she doesn't care for him anymore and is ready to break away.
Frankly, there's nothing wrong with being different. We all are. It's why we're individuals. But someone who's selfish and abusive isn't going to care about that. The heartless tear down those with big hearts, but they can never truly destroy someone with so much compassion. They can damage them, but such a strong person always rises again. Like you. :)
A well written piece, my friend. Full of many wonderful lines.

Mon, March 18th, 2019 6:25pm

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Thank you so much, dearest Jeff :) I really appreciate the kind words.

Tue, March 19th, 2019 6:16am

moa rider

No don't tolerate abuse Jay and I can see you cringe at the touch. Yes and that last line... Usianguke

Mon, March 18th, 2019 7:54pm

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Thank you so much, dear Moa!

Tue, March 19th, 2019 6:15am

Sue Harris

Wow, what a fabulous poem, Lis, brilliantly expressed. Love it!

Mon, March 18th, 2019 8:12pm

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Thank you so much, Sue!

Tue, March 19th, 2019 6:15am

hullabaloo22

This says total exhaustion, resignation, but not guilt for the blame is being passed to wear it should be. A brilliant poem that struck some chords, jaylisbeth.

Mon, March 18th, 2019 8:54pm

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Than you very much, Hully!

Tue, March 19th, 2019 6:14am

Spyguy

With God nothing is so broken that it can’t be fixed! That having been said, I feel that you are not broken, but rather you have lovely facets, diamond-like in both value & appearance, & the light of your existence just shines & reflects off of those facets in varying ways, depending upon the factors that affect those rays of light at any given moment in time! I personally am proud of the light you reflect!

Tue, March 19th, 2019 7:28am

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Thank you, my Spy. No worries; just fiction :)

Tue, March 19th, 2019 6:14am

TheSinningCrow

This is fiction, I can see that, so I think it's easier for you writing pieces like this that is fiction. I always find it amazing that life imitates art, and art imitates life. It's amazing how real life a fiction piece of art can feel. I always get that feeling with your pieces. I have to say this is some of your best rhyming yet. The words are so powerful and powerful; art imitating life. This is beautiful. This is excellent.

Wed, March 20th, 2019 12:31am

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Thank you, dearest friend :)

Fri, March 29th, 2019 8:58pm

johngumbs

Another good rhyming poem. Keep it up!

Wed, March 20th, 2019 1:02pm

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Thank you, John!

Fri, March 29th, 2019 8:56pm

Amy Furzane

So much depth and emotions in this poem. I really like the last line :)

Wed, March 20th, 2019 2:22pm

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Thank you so much, dearest Amy

Fri, March 29th, 2019 8:56pm

Melancholic Wisdom

This a wonderful poem, sometimes you've already been broken long before someone else breaks you. Well done Lis

Fri, March 22nd, 2019 1:47am

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Thank you, love!

Fri, March 29th, 2019 8:56pm

Criss Sole

I agree with the other comments, the last line was really powerful. Wonderful poem Jay!

Mon, July 8th, 2019 7:06pm

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Thank you, my love! :)

Tue, July 16th, 2019 5:38am

RomanBoukreev

I had the same thoughts about the last line, but I prefer to express them in another way.
"You think that you'll punish me, but it's not about a punish,
You don't understand, but, in reality, of course, that's vanished.
You are not the first person who makes the crimes,
Because I am punished before you many times."
I had a Russian version, of course, but I didn't include it in any poem yet. There are different rhymes and words but the same solid rhythm. Looks like, we think about the same. Have you any Spanish versions of your poems or you write only in English?

Wed, July 10th, 2019 12:46am

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Thank you so much for reading my work! Yes, I also write in Spanish :)

Tue, July 16th, 2019 5:37am

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