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"This is a great opening! Right off the bat, you introduce a cocky, flawed character that shows a lot of potential. Despite him being a bit of an asshole, I could tell that he isn't callous or mean-spirited. That intuition was validated at the end when he wrestled with his conscience about selling drugs to a child. Great moral conflict!
Your world is both believable and alive. I felt like I was walking down a street in a futuristic utopia. Your weird names are very creative, but it does take a few reads to memorize them. Fortunately, you identify who is speaking and who is doing the action well enough that I never felt lost.
The potential for this story is huge. I love that you take someone who isn't inherently bad and then force them to do immoral things under the threat of pain or death. I'm sensing lots of character development here. I look forward to reading more!"
The Betrayal of Ka (The Transprophetics: Book One)
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Book by: Shea Oliver
A girl in a temple in Thailand. A boy kidnapped in Mexico. Both can do the impossible. Both can move objects with their minds. These two Transprophetics pose grave risks to the Donovackia Corporation as it plans its invasion of Earth.
With a blade in his hand, Ka's decision to kill, or not, will reverberate across the galaxy.
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This is a great opening! Right off the bat, you introduce a cocky, flawed character that shows a lot of potential. Despite him being a bit of an asshole, I could tell that he isn't callous or mean-spirited. That intuition was validated at the end when he wrestled with his conscience about selling drugs to a child. Great moral conflict!
Your world is both believable and alive. I felt like I was walking down a street in a futuristic utopia. Your weird names are very creative, but it does take a few reads to memorize them. Fortunately, you identify who is speaking and who is doing the action well enough that I never felt lost.
The potential for this story is huge. I love that you take someone who isn't inherently bad and then force them to do immoral things under the threat of pain or death. I'm sensing lots of character development here. I look forward to reading more!
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A.G,
Wow! Thank you so much for such kind and insightful commentary. Your timing is really interesting too. I've been playing with some video marketing ideas, and decided to feature your comments in one of my quick videos for social media.
You can check it out here: https://www.facebook.com/shea.oliver.author/posts/2059232224187409
Thank you again for such awesome insights!
Cheers!
Shea
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