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Sometimes going back is the best worst thing you can do.

The violin speaks long, sweet:
then pivots on a whim,
nails my spine to a long
empty hall inhabited by
echoes of wooden benches.

Youth cannot stay
but its sounds
still invade
every empty place.

The past glistens on
a powdered cheek
drips into
cracks in floors
and lies there
softly until it resounds
like the thunder of something
happening in another room.

Speak in whispers
or the past will thunder.

Submitted: June 16, 2019

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Stormbird Throneshaker

Hauntingly well penned.

Sun, June 16th, 2019 2:08am

Bobi Leutschaft Poitras

Amazing and beautiful! Wow!!!

Sun, June 16th, 2019 3:29am


Hauntingly atmospheric and beautifully written.

Sun, June 16th, 2019 4:53pm


Thank you for sharing this! I loved it and read it multiple times.

Tue, July 23rd, 2019 4:53pm

L.E. Belle

Very beautiful. The words are chilling.

Wed, August 21st, 2019 3:55pm



Sun, May 8th, 2022 12:20am


Great job Douglas!

Sun, June 26th, 2022 11:51pm


Well Done Doug (-: I have a couple poems that u may enjoy one is called Peter and Paul and the other is called I think you're beautiful and if you like scary stuff you might like my short story it's called the mountain woman

Sat, July 23rd, 2022 11:59pm


Enjoyed reading your poem. Great descriptions, worked well together. Whispers in thunder. I like it

Sun, September 25th, 2022 5:48pm


Great job Mr. hill (-: may I recommend that you read my two poems I think you're beautiful and Peter and Paul I warn you now they're not traditionally structured

Sun, February 5th, 2023 7:58pm


Great poem, I love it

Thu, May 4th, 2023 1:43am


Great poem, I love it

Thu, May 4th, 2023 1:43am


Great poem, I love it

Thu, May 4th, 2023 1:43am


Beautiful poetry
Really liked your writing
I would appreciate if you comment on mine too....

Sat, June 3rd, 2023 1:24pm

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