Featured Review on this writing by Boris J. Sorokov
"Nice one! I've said it before but I'll say it again: I love how you write the dialogue between these two! As someone who struggles with giving my characters unique voices, you're crushing it!! Also, as a music fan, I love the songs in the author's notes! Love the one you picked for this chapter! ;)"
Lance has no choice but to shrug off the event as something of his own imagination, but upon falling unconscious, he is kidnapped and injected with deadly cells from a race kept hidden from humans, a race kept secret.
Zidane is a crossbreed of Razalek and Spiro, a breathing hybrid that shouldn't exist. There's too much hatred between the races; there's too much bad blood in his veins. But he needs to save Lance's life.
He has too much death on his hands already.
However, Lance isn't so easy to trust him. So, with a question, he's teleported into Zidane's mind and introduced to a world of magic, racism, and everlasting love. Memory by memory plays, giving Lance answers to his question. Giving him every reason to trust.
He has no choice, after all.
[THIS NOVEL CONTAINS SWEARING, VIOLENCE, & ABUSE]
BOOK 1 COMPLETE
[Written from 2010 - 2017]
140,000 words, split into 100 parts.
Table of Contents
"Trust me, I know,
When you look at me
You see nobody at all.
For the first time I can say that I'm Prou... Read Chapter
____________
Over the past week, he'd drowned himself in music.
He had booked more gigs than usual for them... Read Chapter
Lance returned to his seat, giving a sigh of relief. He waited, and when Cal didn't move, Lance turned to see his fri... Read Chapter
Lance opened his eyes. White. He focused, seeing the details in the ceiling.
Where had he been last? Where was he now?
... Read Chapter
The flames dissipated, and Zidane no longer found himself standing on the concrete surface of the plaza. The energy of th... Read Chapter
Cal glanced to him again. "Can I help you with something or are you just gonna keep standing there?"
Lance tried to speak, tried t... Read Chapter
Lance spun around, taking in the view of the cabin's main room. Everything was exactly as he remembered it, forcing a massive ... Read Chapter
"I'm not sure," Zidane said, his voice hushed. He looked away again, his eyes remaining the same deep blue as before. "I have some ideas ... Read Chapter
Zidane nodded. "I'm pretty sure I mentioned it before. It deals with emotions; the more positive the feeling, the brighter the eyes get."... Read Chapter
Lance nodded, thinking again. "Said something about him lasting for four minutes." He tried to push back the tightness in his ... Read Chapter
Zidane nodded, and Lance felt the tension in his gut lift away. "Yeah," he said. "We just need to find it."
"And it starts with the b... Read Chapter
Zidane smiled. "I heard that. Thanks for the sarcasm."
You're welcome. But this one was much quieter; something the crossbreed didn't... Read Chapter
A fear was pressing against his chest, somewhere deep inside. He was nearly tempted to back out, but the thought only became half of an i... Read Chapter
Color pulsed out from under Zidane's feet, spreading across the white, and curving upward as if a dome was being painted. The green grass... Read Chapter
Lance shook his head. "No," he replied. "I'm good."
"Let's keep going then," Zidane said, turning around and holding his m... Read Chapter
He looked the other way, noticing the shops for the first time. They were simple blankets, each holding a display of unique objects. Smal... Read Chapter
"Well hello there!" he called, and there was something in his words that made Kyrene laugh, the sound suppressed by tightening her lips t... Read Chapter
Lance looked away from the chime, stare going to his left, where a door was opening. It moved down instead of to the side, rotating into ... Read Chapter
Zidane nodded, the motion easy as if he had seen the question coming. "That's a good question. It's a little complicated; after the war e... Read Chapter
Zidane froze. His hands stayed in the river, sleeves floating high enough to reveal his hands. Lance could sense his thoughts; he could s... Read Chapter
Lance found himself back in his own body, watching Zidane rise to his feet. Despite the shaking of his legs and the frail hand... Read Chapter
"There's something I don't get."
Zidane looked up from unwrapping a packaged cupcake, waiting for Lance to continue. With his attenti... Read Chapter
Hitching the duffel bag across his chest, Zidane slid one foot back, watching the man carefully. But the man's slow movements stopped in ... Read Chapter
A moment after Zidane had turned and disappeared behind the nearest building's corner, Lance sensed the man fade out of the memory as wel... Read Chapter
It was a question Lance was disgusted to think, but what repulsed him more was the fact that he couldn't bring himself to imagine what Zi... Read Chapter
Some Kind of Comfort, Part III
His stomach dropped as Arzo stepped forward. Zidane immediately slowed to a stop. He was still a good distance away—far enough where th... Read Chapter
From his position against the wall, Lance looked around the small room in front of him. The coloring was strange; he didn't expect the wa... Read Chapter
____________________
For all the times Lance had seen the orphanage's outside, he never expected it to have s... Read Chapter
The electricity registered for Zooka at the exact same time. Her hand stayed holding the doll for an extra moment and then she... Read Chapter
"I've been looking for a way
To bring you back to life
And if I could find a way,
I would bring y... Read Chapter
"Come work for me."
The shorter Razalek turned towards her, eyes wide. "Miz Ezyta—"
The woman held her hand out to him in silen... Read Chapter
"Why?"
Zidane seemed a little surprised. "Because I need to go," he said without thinking.
"Why?" she asked again, a little more ... Read Chapter
The smaller Razalek moved his hands, bringing them near his torso. He took a deep breath, inhaling the air of the ballroom-like room.
... Read Chapter
No one paid any notice as Zidane stood across the room, and within moments Lance could feel his impatience burning. Ezyta hummed a sigh. ... Read Chapter
"Clear something up for me."
Zidane looked up at Lance's statement, calmly meeting his eyes with a reverse-nod; a motion to continue ... Read Chapter
Lance looked up at the expansion of black. It was calming, seeing all those stars decorating the sky. They reminded him of cit... Read Chapter
"You belong here
You belong here with me
You were meant to be with me"
- You Belong Here, Anberlin
_________
The... Read Chapter
The room faded into an expansion of white. Zidane stepped in front of Lance, the brightness of his eyes quickly fading.
"You okay?" t... Read Chapter
Behind the Lion's Eyes, Part I
"The pride of a lion is your disguise
But the fear of a coward's in your eyes"
- Chasi... Read Chapter
Behind the Lion's Eyes, Part II
"Why... You're helping me?" Lance repeated. "This..." A disbelieving smile hitched onto his face. "This is the reason why?"
... Read Chapter
"So lay down,
the threat is real
when his sight goes red again."
- The Red, Chevelle
___________
... Read Chapter
"They're more advanced than anything humans have come in contact with. If we're not careful, this can definitely go bad. This ... Read Chapter
Consciousness floated back to Lance. He sensed firmness, as if he were lying down. He'd been here before...
Am I back? His eyes opene... Read Chapter
Lance scratched below his eye, the muscles in his fingers aching at the movements. Like most of the pain he'd been feeling tod... Read Chapter
"Yeah," Zidane said, answering Lance's question, "This is the forest on the outskirts of Tollo. Small village of about two hun... Read Chapter
Lance turned the garment over in his hand, feeling the incredibly soft texture with his thumb. He found ... Read Chapter
When the crossbreed slowed to a stop, Lance did as well, casting his eyes towards the town in front of them. A short wall l... Read Chapter
_______________
Of all the towns Adelah had to be in, it had to be this one. It had to be the one Yittek stayed in...
... Read Chapter
Lance had dozens of questions bouncing off his brain, but he kept them quiet enough for Zidane not to hear. Only for him to se... Read Chapter
"Boshik le." It is my honor, or the human equivalent of you're welcome.
Zidane watched Lance's stare dart from his mouth t... Read Chapter
Zidane had never wanted to speak with his father. Ever. Even when Adelah came back, tracing the energy that had been released because of ... Read Chapter
That concrete emotion lessened, the pressure falling away. Orah didn't move, standing tall and completely still. He turned bac... Read Chapter
Lance sat down, feeling the bed below him instantly mold to his form. Whatever this mattress was, it was incredibly soft. Fati... Read Chapter
Zidane breathed out, slowly exhaling through his nose. His eyes remained closed, but he could see the sky's morning light shin... Read Chapter
______________________
Yittek was silent for a long moment. He stayed standing in front of the counters, leaning a... Read Chapter
Lance sat with his shirt beside him, feet lightly kicking out into the open air. This was weird, but not any weirder than going to a norm... Read Chapter
"It may. However, too much can trigger a cleansing."
"That's why Zidane has so many then..."
Yittek met his eyes for a moment bef... Read Chapter
"I'm afraid to report that the medications were unsuccessful," Yittek began, hands behind himself as he walked to where Lance sat at the ... Read Chapter
"Tell me about Cal."
Lance looked up from the floor, watching the small strand float in between Yittek's fingers. The MDNA sample, cl... Read Chapter
These words were the easiest to say. He was falling into a comfort. A passion that woke something up inside him, a type of lig... Read Chapter
Lance stepped out of the examination room and into the wide hallway, heading towards the library when Yittek's voice stopped him.
"Pe... Read Chapter
Lance started down the hall, hair a little damp from the shower he had just taken. The bathroom was the most recently-made room in Yittek... Read Chapter
"A weapon of war?" Zidane asked.
"Yes," Yittek replied. "One of my patients brought it up. He comes from Yowlitch's territory."
"... Read Chapter
Lisa's smile reached her eyes, that warmth never wavering from Lance's chest. His mother spoke, voice ringing out through the darkness su... Read Chapter
The Razalek with the Moon Eyes, Part I
Zidane sat on the edge of the double-bed, letting the anxiety pile up with each thought. Would this actually work, stretching his body un... Read Chapter
The Razalek with the Moon Eyes, Part II
Even after standing up, his legs continued to shake albeit subtly. No part of him was used to the height of seven-and-a-half feet. But it... Read Chapter
The Razalek with the Moon Eyes, Part III
Zidane looked ahead, his footsteps placing him slightly ahead of Yittek as a large carriage caught his focus. The citizens walking along ... Read Chapter
The Razalek with the Moon Eyes, Part IV
A soft hum of fascination sounded from Yowlitch, the paper fluttering towards the floor before an invisible force pulled it towards Yitte... Read Chapter
"So, what happened?" he asked quietly, as if he already knew the answer himself. Maybe it was the fact that Zidane's disheveled hair expo... Read Chapter
___________________
Lance strode into the kitchen, shivering as the barrier rippled away from him. He'd probably never get used to Ra... Read Chapter
Almost immediately after walking into the kitchen, Lance stopped.
He stared at Zidane, who was still slumped over the table, arm acti... Read Chapter
The heat fell away from Lance, and he fought the urge to brush himself off. He still wasn't used to that teleportation, or any teleportat... Read Chapter
______________
It was when they had settled down for the night, Lance in a special, rectangular hole that acted as a makes... Read Chapter
Whispers of the Fallen, Part I
Zidane was in the middle of telling a story when he suddenly disappeared. Lance's eyes grew wide, footsteps halting as he stood alone in ... Read Chapter
Whispers of the Fallen, Part II
Zidane pressed himself against the wall, beginning to sidestep the narrow path.
Lance followed slowly, hearing his feet knock over sm... Read Chapter
Zooka met his eyes with a smile. There was an ethereal glow around her, a heavenly vibe. She grinned, but the words she said never reache... Read Chapter
Zidane waited for a long time. He continued to lean back against a tree, the shade immersing him. He closed his eyes, head bowing. Honori... Read Chapter
Zidane looked up, eyes trailing over the pale-gold carpet, the pyramid staircase, before movement caught his eye. Gurenok's freakishly sh... Read Chapter
Zidane hung upside-down, watching the sky's colors bleed into a vibrant orange. He waited for a long moment, a light breeze coming to him... Read Chapter
When Zidane spoke, his voice was quiet. Barely a whisper against the dusk surrounding them.
"We're here."
Lance swallo... Read Chapter
_________________
Lance scanned the balcony again, seeing nothing but faint light glowing from the windows, the wide, entrance-less d... Read Chapter
Time had no meaning. It passed by them like a blur, days fading to nights, with nothing changing. Lance stayed down, almost fe... Read Chapter
"There's preparations we need to make." Arzo's smooth voice rang out between them.
"Preparations for what?"
A grin spr... Read Chapter
________________
Lance's eyes snapped open, a jolt twitching his body inwards. He stared, the earth and the ... Read Chapter
__________________
Zidane struggled to breathe. He could feel energy around him, sparking and snapping away like live wire... Read Chapter
__________
Lance stood in the doorway for what felt like centuries.
Zidane
He
He wasn'... Read Chapter
Zidane pulled in breaths as though he were breathing for the first time. Medics surrounded him, but the wound still wouldn't h... Read Chapter
___________
Lance woke up with a headache. He sat up quickly, hand against his forehead.
"It's best to move slow." Yittek's voice... Read Chapter
Recent Comments
I like these descriptions. A good introduction places the main points in the plot.
Wed, January 22nd, 2020 10:20pm
Author
Reply
Thank you! I'm glad you like it
Wed, January 22nd, 2020 2:22pm
Fantastic first chapter. I loved how the dream started off so calmly with the blue, before those colors changed and it became nightmarish. Good descriptions of the physical pains, and I liked the warnings, especially when there was a mystery about where they were coming from.
Fri, February 7th, 2020 9:04pm
Author
Reply
Thank you!!
Fri, February 7th, 2020 1:05pmFacebook Comments
More Fantasy Books
Book /
Fantasy
Book /
Fantasy
Book /
Fantasy
Book /
Fantasy
Boosted Content from Other Authors
Short Story / Literary Fiction
Book / Humor
Short Story / Romance
Book / Fantasy
Boosted Content from Premium Members
Poem / Romance
Book / Horror
Book / Science Fiction
Other Content by Meaghan Kalena
Book / Fantasy
Book / Fan Fiction
Book / Fantasy
Boris J. Sorokov
Sorry if any of my in-text comments sounded nitpicky! I'm just trying to help out by giving a reader's perspective. I know that sometimes you can miss stuff when you wrote it and have read it like ten times, haha! Feel free to ignore any of what I said though, they were just some thoughts I had. I was really impressed by this :) Really interesting, and I'm already invested in your protagonist! I'm really excited to read more, I plan on it! Awesome work :D
Sat, November 16th, 2019 7:53pmAuthor
Reply
Hi hi hi!
Sat, November 16th, 2019 11:57amThank you for the comments! One little thing I wanna mention is this writing is REALLY OLD. Maybe around 4 years old? So um yeah. Totally agree with your suggestions though haha.Thanks again and I look forward to more of your thoughts.