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Through Mist And Veil

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Status: Finished | Genre: Fantasy | House: Booksie Classic

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My attempt at NaNoWriMo 2019

Cover image: pixabay.com

NaNoWriMo Winner 11/28/2019.

Fantasy disappearance mist veil otherworld nanowrimo-2019

Prolog (ver.1)

Title page

Submitted: November 01, 2019

More of a title page than a prologue.
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Chapter 1 (ver.1)

Chapter 1

Submitted: November 01, 2019

Chapter 1. Caitlin turned and stared out of the classroom window. The greyness and the drizzle complemented how she felt... Read Chapter

Chapter 2 (ver.1)

Chapter 2

Submitted: November 02, 2019

Chapter 2. Caitlin found a quiet corner in the cafeteria. She long since given up on joining the queues for the subsidised... Read Chapter

Chapter 3 (ver.1)

Chapter 3.

Submitted: November 02, 2019

Chapter 3. The bus is too small. Or rather, it is just the right size for the number of pupils that take it. One seat for ... Read Chapter

Chapter 4 (ver.1)

Chapter 4.

Submitted: November 03, 2019

Chapter 4. Caitlin caught a whiff of smoke as she stepped in to the hallway, pulling the door closed behind her. Her mother must have... Read Chapter

Chapter 5 (ver.1)

Chapter 5.

Submitted: November 03, 2019

Chapter 5. They both froze for a minute, shocked at how swiftly things had gone so out of control. Caitlin was still ree... Read Chapter

Chapter 6 (ver.1)

Chapter 6.

Submitted: November 04, 2019

Chapter 6. It was hard to keep track of the fox’s movements, if indeed, that was what it was. Caitlin began to doubt that she had r... Read Chapter

Chapter 7 (ver.1)

Chapter 7.

Submitted: November 05, 2019

Chapter 7. Caitlin did not notice her at first, for she seemed to blend and merge with the foliage. It was not until she... Read Chapter

Chapter 8 (ver.1)

Chapter 8

Submitted: November 06, 2019

Chapter 8. Caitlin’s mind reeled. What was she seeing? Two foxes and no woman; it made no sense to her. As crazy as wh... Read Chapter

Chapter 9 (ver.1)

Chapter 9.

Submitted: November 07, 2019

This is a bit shorter than the others so far. A kind of interlude.
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Chapter 10 (ver.1)

Chapter 10.

Submitted: November 08, 2019

Chapter 10. “Wake up!” The voice boomed out. It seemed to echo all around the woods with some kind of ancient authority. Cait... Read Chapter

Chapter 11 (ver.1)

Chapter 11.

Submitted: November 08, 2019

Chapter 11. “Remember the words of my sister. I cannot add more, for already she has pushed the boundaries. Of that I’m really ... Read Chapter

Chapter 12 (ver.1)

Chapter 12

Submitted: November 09, 2019

Chapter 12. The terror of what she had believed to be an attack had left Caitlin exhausted. She lay on her back, her eyes closed, and... Read Chapter

Chapter 13 (ver.1)

Chapter 13

Submitted: November 09, 2019

Chapter 13. After sitting for a while, Caitlin decided that she should at least put the freedom of her hands to good use. The vines t... Read Chapter

Chapter 14 (ver.1)

Chapter 14

Submitted: November 09, 2019

Chapter 14. Caitlin had no idea how long it had been since she had wandered into the Otherworld. Of the mist there was now no sign,... Read Chapter

Chapter 15 (ver.1)

Chapter 15

Submitted: November 10, 2019

Chapter 15. Caitlin froze. It was impossible for her to tell if their intentions were hostile. She had no doubt that those talons cou... Read Chapter

Chapter 16 (ver.1)

Chapter 16

Submitted: November 10, 2019

Chapter 16. It was only when they began to turn and head off that Caitlin worried about how she was going to be able to accompany the... Read Chapter

Chapter 17 (ver.1)

Chapter 17.

Submitted: November 11, 2019

Chapter 17. “No!” Caitlin cried in horror, trying to pull her arm away. Ferdiga and Frawg held her still, not giving an inch.... Read Chapter

Chapter 18 (ver.1)

Chapter 18.

Submitted: November 12, 2019

Chapter 18. Caitlin learned to trust the owl-people. She grew to understand a lot of their gestures and behaviour, but in spite of ... Read Chapter

Chapter 19 (ver.1)

Chapter 19

Submitted: November 12, 2019

Chapter 19. The assault on the nest when it came, caught the three of them by surprise. A single arrow embedded itself into the nest ... Read Chapter

Chapter 20 (ver.1)

Chapter 20.

Submitted: November 13, 2019

Chapter 20. When she was thrown out of the nest, Caitlin expected to find herself plummeting rapidly towards the ground. Instead she ... Read Chapter

Chapter 21 (ver.1)

Chapther 21.

Submitted: November 14, 2019

Chapter 21. So deep in thought was she, that Caitlin did not notice the houses at first. They were very well concealed, being built... Read Chapter

Chapter 22 (ver.1)

Chapter 22

Submitted: November 15, 2019

Chapter 22. Unsurprisingly, the room Caitlin found herself in had a strong woody scent. There was elements of earth to it as well, an... Read Chapter

Chapter 23 (ver.1)

Chapter 23

Submitted: November 15, 2019

Chapter 23. The woman looked up angrily. Caitlin felt her mind start to clear, but her body remained heavy and sluggish. She tried,... Read Chapter

Chapter 24 (ver.1)

Chapter 24

Submitted: November 16, 2019

Chapter 24. “That’s right, dear, don’t struggle.” Velica held the small blade so that it was just touching Caitlin’s skin. ... Read Chapter

Chapter 25 (ver.1)

Chapter 25.

Submitted: November 16, 2019

Chapter 25. Caitlin had not intended to run straight towards the hedgerows. She had not really noticed that she was doing so until sh... Read Chapter

Chapter 26 (ver.1)

Chapter 26

Submitted: November 16, 2019

Chapter 26. The woman had spoken in a soft voice, but she no longer whispered. “Is it safe to talk aloud now,” Caitlin asked, a... Read Chapter

Chapter 27 (ver.1)

Chapter 27

Submitted: November 17, 2019

Chapter 27. For a while Caitlin walked in silence beside the hedgewitch. The earthy aroma had increased, so much so that she felt tha... Read Chapter

Chapter 28 (ver.1)

Chapter 28

Submitted: November 17, 2019

Chapter 28. “But I don’t have anything,” Caitlin finally said. “Are you sure? Please, for your sake, look and ... Read Chapter

Chapter 29 (ver.1)

Chapter 29

Submitted: November 18, 2019

Chapter 29. Caitlin missed the woman’s company. Although they had spent a lot of their time together presence of the hed... Read Chapter

Chapter 30 (ver.1)

Chapter 30

Submitted: November 18, 2019

Chapter 30. “What? Kapona!” Caitlin was shocked, dropped down to the ground and gripped the cage-like structure. It must have h... Read Chapter

Chapter 31 (ver.1)

Chapter 31

Submitted: November 19, 2019

Chapter 31 Caitlin took one step back, then another. The snake followed her, twisting its head to keep her in view, but apart from a ... Read Chapter

Chapter 32 (ver.1)

Chapter 32

Submitted: November 19, 2019

Chapter 32 It was not hard for Caitlin to see why she had thought that it was a piece of bark moving. The woman’s dress was ragged,... Read Chapter

Chapter 33 (ver.1)

Chapter 33

Submitted: November 19, 2019

Chapter 33. For a while only one thought went round and round inside Caitlin’s head. What if that woman brought the snakes and le... Read Chapter

Chapter 34 (ver.1)

Chapter 34

Submitted: November 20, 2019

Chapter 34. It did not take much detective work for Caitlin to work out that those surrounding the hole were some kind of soldiers. T... Read Chapter

Chapter 35 (ver.1)

Chapter 35

Submitted: November 20, 2019

Chapter 35. It hardly seemed possible, but the darkest part of the forest certainly seemed to be living up to the description. There ... Read Chapter

Chapter 36 (ver.1)

Chapter 36

Submitted: November 21, 2019

Chapter 36 Caitlin struggled to make out anything about the figure that the guard had addressed. Two of the guards had moved to sta... Read Chapter

Chapter 37 (ver.1)

Chapter 37

Submitted: November 21, 2019

Chapter 37. “No, wait!” Caitlin begged the king. She found this underground chamber to be bad enough. She dreaded to think what a... Read Chapter

Chapter 38 (ver.1)

Chapter 38

Submitted: November 22, 2019

Chapter 38 Although relieved to be outside of the cell, Caitlin remained apprehensive. The king had been a formidable enough figure; ... Read Chapter

Chapter 39 (ver.1)

Chapter 39

Submitted: November 22, 2019

Chapter 39 Caitlin had not noticed the other door. It was set back in the far wall, where the room was less well lit and full of sh... Read Chapter

Chapter 40 (ver.1)

Chapter 40

Submitted: November 23, 2019

Chapter 40. Caitlin looked down at the food that was piled on her plate. She thought of the rat-like creature that she had come acros... Read Chapter

Chapter 41 (ver.1)

Chapter 41

Submitted: November 23, 2019

Chapter 41. All kinds of creatures flew at her, crawled their way towards her, over her. Caitlin thrashed her arms wildly, trying t... Read Chapter

Chapter 42 (ver.1)

Chapter 42

Submitted: November 24, 2019

Chapter 42. Caitlin fell back into a monster-filled sleep. The insects returned to bite and to sting, to crawl their way up her arms ... Read Chapter

Chapter 43 (ver.1)

Chapter 43.

Submitted: November 24, 2019

Chapter 43. “We must make haste. There is no telling how soon the king might call for your attendance once more. Any further food o... Read Chapter

Chapter 44 (ver.1)

Chapter 44.

Submitted: November 24, 2019

Chapter 44. Stair followed stair, each one taking Caitlin further beneath the ground. The surfaces became increasingly slippery and t... Read Chapter

Chapter 45 (ver.1)

Chapter 45

Submitted: November 26, 2019

Chapter 45. Disorientated by the sudden extinguishment to the glow, Caitlin stumbled. Instinctively she flung out her hands, letting ... Read Chapter

Chapter 46 (ver.1)

Chapter 46

Submitted: November 26, 2019

Chapter 46. From the safety of the owl-man’s arms, Caitlin looked down on the guards. There were ten of them, all clearly confused ... Read Chapter

Chapter 47 (ver.1)

Chapter 47

Submitted: November 26, 2019

Chapter 47. Caitlin felt the loss badly. Not only had Frawg gone but so had Kapona. Even the king’s sister, as ghostlike as her pre... Read Chapter

Chapter 48 (ver.1)

Chapter 48

Submitted: November 26, 2019

Chapter 48. Caitlin stooped down to pick one of the flowers. She had just plucked it from its stem when she found herself looking at ... Read Chapter

Chapter 49 (ver.1)

Chapter 49

Submitted: November 26, 2019

Chapter 49. Quite how such an old woman could walk at such a brisk pace was beyond Caitlin’s understanding. She was finding herse... Read Chapter

Chapter 50 (ver.1)

Chapter 50

Submitted: November 27, 2019

Chapter 50. The cat streaked past Caitlin and jumped easily up onto the table where it began to nonchalantly lick at its paws. It mig... Read Chapter

Chapter 51 (ver.1)

Chapter 51

Submitted: November 27, 2019

Chapter 51. While the white-haired woman was gone from the room, Thrace busied herself at the table. She did not talk, but worked ste... Read Chapter

Chapter 52 (ver.1)

Chapter 52

Submitted: November 28, 2019

Chapter 52. Thalia re-entered the room in time to catch the last of Thrace’s words. She scowled, her disapproval evident. “... Read Chapter

Chapter 53 (ver.1)

Chapter 53

Submitted: November 28, 2019

Chapter 53. “Thank you. Both of you... no, all of you,” Caitlin said, looking from the two sisters to the cat and the owl. ... Read Chapter

Chapter 54 (ver.1)

Chapter 54

Submitted: November 28, 2019

Chapter 54. Even though her mind had known what would happen, Caitlin was still not prepared for the reality. As soon as her father... Read Chapter