The Captain returns! Probably to properly introduce himself, provide her with a more filling supper and a change of clothes, and offer her the cabin to herself for the rest of her time on his ship.
Right?
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Chapter 5 (ver.1)

Deceptions

Submitted: November 22, 2019

Oh what will the morning bring?
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Chapter 6 (ver.1)

Answers

Submitted: November 24, 2019

Ah, we finally learn wtf Jeran's up to.
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Chapter 7 (ver.1)

Seven

Submitted: January 12, 2020

Now that the holidays are over, a brief two weeks of respite allowed me to complete this next chapter. Tomorrow, we enter inventory mode... but once that's complete, I should be able to finish this
entire novella in short order!
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Chapter 8 (ver.1)

Tea, Khan Iman, Hot.

Submitted: January 15, 2020

Sorry, short chapter, but full of information!
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Chapter 9 (ver.1)

Scars

Submitted: February 11, 2020

The days passed, turning into weeks. Saorsie continued to remind the Captain daily about watching for a ship to transport her back to sho... Read Chapter

Chapter 10 (ver.1)

Ataaaaaack!

Submitted: February 17, 2020

She could not spend too long in the mess hall without being seen through the doorway by more passing sailors, who occasionally paused for... Read Chapter

Chapter 11 (ver.1)

The Long Wait

Submitted: March 08, 2020

The volleys came periodically, usually just after Raker came about. Berran explained that upon first realization of the other ship’s ho... Read Chapter

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Celtic-Scribe63

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Mon, November 11th, 2019 2:43am

This was a really good opening chapter.
full of intense gripping moments as Saorsie struggled not to drown, and then some little splashes of humour as well.
Looking forward to the next chapter.

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Tue, November 12th, 2019 8:04pm

Thanks :) The Pirate Monkey inspired me a lot on this story. Hopefully I can get it all written and uploaded in short order.

star-jas

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Mon, December 9th, 2019 5:01pm

Ah, rescued by the people who fed her to the sharks it seems like. And pirates- that can't be any good lol. Though Jeran- we meet again. I'm intrigued that he's able to breathe underwater, and that for some reason he sought her out to save. I also wonder whether other people from her ship were saved. Very nice thoughts here- pacing and excellent description of the struggle to get her up into the ship.

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Wed, December 11th, 2019 3:39pm

Thanks! I really enjoyed writing the drowning scene.

Obscure

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Mon, February 3rd, 2020 5:29am

Again, fantastic. Great writing and the conflict was consistent throughout. I love the way you introduced your mythical creatures such as elves and mermans(?) so subtly without for one second interrupting the flow of the action. I also like the link to the prologue there at the end.

I don't really have any criticism for this chapter, some awkward phrasing perhaps?

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Mon, February 3rd, 2020 6:49am

The awkward phrasing isn't surprising. This is my aborted attempt at nanowrimo, so I didnt spend much time editing.

Thanks-I've had this story in my head for awhile now, so throwing it into my fantasy world with elves and magic wasn't a stretch :)

Thanks for the comments!

C. S. Spence

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Mon, February 24th, 2020 1:30pm

great prose; the action is clear but not indulgent, the story is quickly but fluidly revealed. And a fantastic reveal at the end that keeps the reader interested to see what will come next. Will be reading more, for sure!