Dying Star

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

Women have it rough. Stay strong.

Perfect body, stunning eyes.
Looks alive, but dead inside.
Abused, bemused, used and broken.
Silenced, troubles stay unspoken.

Once bright eyes that since have darkened.
Devils, demons, bad boys harken.
Innocence that has been stolen,
Troubles, pain, the list keeps rolling.

Hidden from the world of love,
Cursed by your gift from above.
Good men too shy to speak to you,
Bad guys the only ones you knew.

They lust, they lie, don't empathise,
They hurt you, don't apologize.
They don't love you for who you are.
Once bright, but now a dying star.

Submitted: February 08, 2020

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A great piece of poetry, Bruvton, that many a girl will no doubt be able to relate to.

Sat, February 8th, 2020 7:58pm


THank you so much!

Sun, February 9th, 2020 12:23am

Jezzy Jay

Another good one, sad but true in all aspects

Fri, February 21st, 2020 7:36am


Thank you so much!

Fri, February 21st, 2020 4:41am


I read in some criminal psychology researches: once abused is always abused. Hope that it's not true in every case, but I don't think that girls who live a long time in criminal could be changed easily (hookers, pimps, for example).

Tue, March 17th, 2020 10:54pm


That's very true. Abusers have a psychological strategy where they make the victim believe they deserve the abuse and that they can't survive without the abuser, even though it isn't true. Although, I have heard of victims escaping the abuser.

Wed, March 18th, 2020 2:55am


I like the poem a lot. Great metaphor and I could feel the emotions pouring from the poem. I like the flow, word play and you really capture the pain of a dying star. Great poem.

Sun, March 29th, 2020 5:15am


Thank you so much!

Sun, March 29th, 2020 12:07am

Grace 96-M

I can resonate

Mon, September 7th, 2020 4:09pm


Thanks! I'm glad you think so!

Tue, September 8th, 2020 3:56pm

Artic Wolf 1984

This poem is a good example of how a few words can tell a whole story. Although not every poem needs to rhyme to be powerful , the way you chose your words here ( and the metaphor) show the skill you have as a writer. Great job!

Wed, December 30th, 2020 7:51am


Thank you so much for the amazing feedback! I'm really glad you enjoyed it!

Wed, December 30th, 2020 8:56am

Al Ashcott

Hello Bruvton. Never expected for 'Dying Star' to be about the hardships of being a woman when I clicked on it :D But honestly, this was beautiful ... Especially the last line.

Mon, May 31st, 2021 9:16am


Thank you so much, I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Fri, June 4th, 2021 11:52am

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