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Status: In Progress  |  Genre: Mystery and Crime  |  House: Booksie Classic

Lana Landers is a ordinary 16 year old girl. Date night with her boyfriend Logan Johnson doesn't go as planned. Both Lana and her boyfriend get kidnapped along with many other teenagers. Will Lana and the other teens escape and find their way home? Will their differences tear them apart?

Table of Contents

Chapter 1: Captured

I hear the bell, signaling class is over. I walk back to my locker and my boyfriend Logan is already there like usual. "Hey Lana." "Hey... Read Chapter

Chapter 2: Prison

I awoke in a room. Whatever prison feels like, this must be it. There were two windows. One on each side of the room. They both had bars ... Read Chapter

Chapter 3: Reality

I know this is a short chapter, but I will be writing longer ones. Please keep reading Captured if you enjoy.
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Chapter 4: Snow

After a few hours of sitting against the cold, brick, wall, the Sun started to rise. I peered out the barred window and saw Snow falling ... Read Chapter

Chapter 5: "Slop"

“Do we get any food?” I ask while holding my stomach.  I haven’t eaten the whole time I’ve been here.  “You d... Read Chapter

Chapter 6: Trying to Solve Problems

Nobody talked for the rest of the day. We were all mad at Anne, and she was mad at us. There was no way we would be able to escape with e... Read Chapter

Chapter 7: Mourning

How do you think Jake's death affects the group? Will they be able to escape as a team, or will some be left behind?
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Recent Comments

Bethaney Ortman

I like it!! First shatter left a cliff hanger can not wait till chapter 2.

Wed, May 13th, 2020 8:56pm

zeda a

Thanks Bethaney! I should be publishing chapter 2 tomorrow. I am glad you like it!

Wed, May 13th, 2020 11:19pm


The first chapter is really good! It's fun that it ends in a cliffhanger.
Just a piece of friendly advice, try using simple past tense. Not that there's any issue with simple present, it's just that most of the stories and also the traditional way of writing stories is in the past tense. Hunger games is written in the present tense (and it's a good book) but give it some thought. Also, whenever you've added dailouges of the characters, use separate lines to show them. When you read it now, it doesn't exactly make sense. You can check that out in my story.

Fri, May 15th, 2020 4:16am

zeda a

Thanks for the advice! I will consider past tense for future books. I have read the Hunger Games as well and they are really good as well as the movies. I'll spread out dialouge in the future chapters. I commented on your book, but don't know if you saw it. Your book is really good and I'll keep reading! I am also a young author so my writing skills aren't fully developed either.
Thanks again for the advice and have an amazing day.

Fri, May 15th, 2020 9:29pm


I love the first chapter full of excitement and movement I love the way you portrayed your characters and the cliffhanger was really good.

Wed, May 20th, 2020 1:18pm

zeda a

I am glad you liked it! Thank you for your kind words. I love writing with cliffhangers- it makes the writing more interesting. Make sure you keep reading. :)

Wed, May 20th, 2020 8:33pm

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