Gave you five lines but …

You stole so much more.

Gave you love.. Gave you time.

Got beautiful lying rhymes in return.

Beautiful lies sound so sweet.

Oh those pretty half truths.

Gave you insight into this raw emotion.

You consumed it and promised raw devotion.

Beautiful deception

What a pretty play on words… A spin.. A finesse.

You were going to tell the truth.. The unflattering details..the actuality..the fact of the matter..

The matter is…that now it’s too late.

Your words are flat and lack form…void of color..bland and lackluster…

The ugly truth is late but your lies were always early…first to arrive

But I still gave you 5 lines.

Submitted: October 08, 2020

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Kwesi Oginga

A Poem for Mr. X

I love it. The very opening caught my attention:
"I gave you five lines
But you took much more"

Even though it is a familiar story, it seemed fresh, and compelling. You were writing your emotions, but you were writing mine, also.
You passed us through a sequence of emotional reminiscences that were private, and yet public; strange yet familiar. There was a suspenseful pain that keep me hooked just to see the outcome. Thanks; this poem is not only a balm for the brokenhearted, but an admonishment for the honest, purposeful and expectant love adventurer.
###Kwesi Oginga

Thu, October 8th, 2020 7:58pm


Thank you so much for your insightful review! I will be checking your work out as well.

Thu, October 8th, 2020 2:55pm

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