The Trident

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Status: In Progress  |  Genre: Mystery and Crime  |  House: Booksie Classic

The year is 1947 in Brooklyn, and PI Ray Allison is on the case when he is hired by Gwen Sanford to look into the death of a high profile millionaire and weapon manufacturer with shady connections, her father, Stephen Sanford, who suddenly died in a bizarre car crash which is quickly written off as a suicide. The case will prove to be anything but straightforward however. A dearth of direct evidence and a parade of suspects with possible reasons to kill promises to complicate Allison’s investigation. Furthermore, his involvement with Gwen and the alluring stranger, Vera Walters, may just prove his undoing…

Note on Noir style:, This story should be read as a frame narrative. The plain text is the flashback. The italicised text is in the "present", and is meant to reflect the narrator telling the story to somebody else. It can also be thought of as a voiceover.

P.S: Please do leave thoughts, comments or reviews on this. I would love to hear what you guys think of it

Table of Contents

Saturday, August 9th, 1947

  Location unknown Date unknown I suppose it would have begun on this day. I know it will seem odd to those in... Read Chapter

Sunday, August 10th, 1947 (The Chief)

By the next day, the rare sunshine that had blessed our town had regrettably reverted to the usual grey overcast and the steady... Read Chapter

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Recent Comments

K.Essler

This was an excellent first chapter. It was well written and I love the old gumshoe detective stuff. The description and explanations were long, and I know some people don't like stuff like that, but I do. It added even more depth and perspective to the story. You did very well with this.

Thu, November 12th, 2020 8:41pm

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Thank you so much, I'm really glad you liked the writing style. I put a lot of thought into it, so it means a lot tk :)

Thu, November 12th, 2020 1:22pm

Kathrynmp

A wonderfully woven beginning to a story I look forward to reading. The tone and pace are consistent and sets the mood of a great Noir Mystery. Your attention to detail and set up makes me feel like I already know the protagonist and am invested in seeing how he will approach the case. Keep writing!

Sun, November 15th, 2020 7:23pm

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Thank you for your comment! I have to admit, I only recently got into this genre a few months ago, so it really means a lot to know that it captures the flow and tone well, and that the descriptions added to the atmosphere. I hope you'll enjoy the future chapters :)

Sun, November 15th, 2020 11:50am

A. Rhetters

Very nicely done! Definitely drew me in, and this did read like a movie. What I mean by that is I got a very clear image of a black-and-white mystery movie in my head as I read this. The noir style also helped me understand a flashback and the present.

Your characterizations are strong, the scene and story is clear, and short of a few potential typos, I couldn’t see much need for improvement. Other than the title led me to believe that this wasn’t quite a mystery work, rather one of mythology.

Of course, as I read this, I think I understand that a trident will come into play as either evidence or the name a gang, secret society, or a killer would use. Maybe the trident will be a symbol of sorts.

Your prose is strong, the pacing was good, and overall, nice work!

Tue, November 24th, 2020 3:32pm

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