DEMO: Should I continue writing this?

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Status: In Progress  |  Genre: Flash Fiction  |  House: Booksie Classic

I have written a bunch of this story already, and would like to know if you would like me to continue it (comment).

The glint of the moonlight shined upon a letter placed on my mahogany desk without my knowledge. The wind from the open window chilled me to the bone as I pulled my robe tighter around my chest, a leaf from my outside magnolia appearing at my feet. I did not open this window, as the temperature during the night might have plunged to the lows of frostbitten cold. The letter had a crest set in violet wax that I did not recognize. I, as Lady of Camembert, was not expected to know these things. That was my husband, the Lord of Camembert’s, job. Knowing everything about his land. Caring for the people. My eyes drift once more to the letter on my stand. I am not certain on whether to wake my Lord up, and my curiosity overtakes my movements. I pull the envelope open and reveal the crinkled sheet of paper with only three words written upon it.

Come to me.

I become frightened, frightened like a child, and run away from the cursed letter. Those three words taught me nothing of the writer or the message. Perhaps if I were a commoner; perhaps then I could pursue the origins of the mysterious letter, on which the handwriting resembles that of a child, shaking and large as a hand which has not been trained in the finer details of writing might be. The handwriting concerns me, as a distinguished person such as myself near always has been taught the intricacies of writing. A commoner, then, has sent me this letter. I continue to dwell until the early hours of the morning— as I had previously risen later than customary. 


Submitted: November 12, 2020

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A. Rhetters

So far this seems like a really interesting work. It does provoke questions such as: Why is she frightened of a letter? I suppose it could be answered with “She is in a high position, which makes her vulnerable to assassination attempts.” However, that is never truly confirmed. And what are these “intricacies of writing” she speaks of? Can she read a killer’s handwriting from a mile away (not literal)? Does it recall a bad memory? I know she says a commoner sent her this, and it could invite an interesting plot. Killer or lover? Who knows?

Overall, you do have the beginnings of something. This snippet does invite intrigue, and the description is great. I have no idea if your aim is historical fiction or fantasy, but either way I’m sure it would be a strong work.

My general philosophy is this: If it sounds like a good idea, start writing. I usually write at least ten chapters of a work before I decide if it’s worth publishing or not. Another good route is to write it like a short story, then see if you’re still interested in pursuing it.

Tue, November 24th, 2020 2:39pm

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