I Am Xade: MidDay

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Fantasy  |  House: Booksie Classic

I'll admit there are some moments here that are adequately written. The bathroom labor scene is played out well, the wedding isn't too shabby and the foreshadowing is alright. That said though, this is still a sloppy messy with terrible pacing and severely underdeveloped characters. Seriously, why didn't I take the time to developing Tracy as a character? Also, that guy Xade meets at the hotel is supposed to be Hermes in disguise but that is such bad world building as I made it way too vague. I also hate this constant need to talk about things that don't matter. Who cares about the father's restaurant or one of Xade's friend's that lost their life? Unless it's vital to the story, don't put it in the story! ARGH!! This doesn't get much better folks, trust me -.-

Table of Contents

Back in Miami

 After defeating Jason Platte, used my orb to teleport me back to Tracy's and caught up on my sleep. I woke up at noon, and when I... Read Chapter

Bachorlette Party and A Baby

After a few months passed, December finally came; and everyone was excited for the wedding on the 21st. The day before the big day, I w... Read Chapter

The Wedding Before Christmas

I woke up at 11:00 am, and when I did, Tracy left me a note right next to me; it read: "To Xade, the ceremony is at 5:00 pm. I hope you... Read Chapter

Reception With Werewolves

After the ceremony, we went to this fancy restaurant called Elegant and Adequate for the reception; the restaurant was very large and v... Read Chapter

Loch Ness Battle

I arrived at the edge of Drumnadrochit, just in time to see the rise of a long, thick neck coming out of the water, and attached to tha... Read Chapter

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