The Little Blonde Boy

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Review Chain

This is my entry for the Review Chain competition, I hope you enjoy it! I've written a poem based off of prompt 3.

He perched upon the stool,

 

Eyes filled with joy,

 

Clutching his book,

 

Sat the little blonde boy,

 

His fingers traced the spine,

 

Broken and cracked,

 

The pages fell loose,

 

Barely intact,

 

Our little Blonde boy,

 

Opened page twenty-one,

 

And became absorbed,

 

In a world of fun,

 

He chased pirates,

 

Rode dragons,

 

Became mayor of the town,

 

Battled creatures,

 

Helped people,

 

Who's faces bore frowns,

 

And when the clouds overhead,

 

Became dark and grey,

 

He simply took a pen,

 

And washed them away,

 

He rewrote chapters,

 

Created new words,

 

Wrote away with his pen,

 

Until the clouds were pearly white,

 

And he was happy again,

 

So the little blonde boy,

 

Left page twenty-one,

 

And decided that,

 

For the day he was done,

 

He walked out of the room,

 

Thinking of games he could play,

 

And waiting till he could return,

 

 

Till he could write another day.


Submitted: January 03, 2021

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M.C.R.

This is amazing!!!
I think you really stand a chance to win the contest :)
This poem is rhymie and pretty relatable.

Sun, January 3rd, 2021 4:50pm

Author
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Thank you! I've really been trying to improve my poetry, so it means a lot to me that you like it!

Lily :)

Mon, January 4th, 2021 7:37am

XCulletto

As a mother of two little blonde boys, I love this! It's written so simply, yet beautifully. Nice job!

Tue, January 5th, 2021 1:12am

Author
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Thank you! I loved your entry for the competition! You should start a series of twisted fairy tales, I'd definitely read those!
Lily :)

Tue, January 5th, 2021 1:19am

M.C.R.

Of course!
You honestly should try posting some more poetry, you have a real talent for it :)

Tue, January 5th, 2021 1:43am

Author
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Thank you! I've read through som3e of your poetry and I think it's really good too!
Lily :)

Tue, January 5th, 2021 1:18am

M.C.R.

Thank you!
It's always nice to hear an encouraging word or two :)

Tue, January 5th, 2021 10:36pm

Arcturus

This was a really enjoyable read! Well done and good luck with the contest!

Sat, January 16th, 2021 9:32pm

Author
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Thank you! It means a lot that you like my poetry! I've been trying to improve it through lockdown and work on rhymes.

Thanks again,
Lily

Mon, January 18th, 2021 12:37am

shika

I loved this simple yet intriguing poem that brings back the inspiration to write more. Good Job!

Sun, January 17th, 2021 9:10pm

Author
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Thank you!

Mon, January 18th, 2021 2:29am

Harris Proctor

Hi there!

Excellent work. You paint a beautiful picture of an imaginative soul. It reminds me of the boy from "The Giving Tree." Before he got old and jaded and crummy :) I'm torn between the formatting. On the one hand, scrolling through it created an intriguing white space which helped me visualize your imagery. On the other hand, I felt aware of the scrolling. I am easily distracted tho :)

Thank you and great job!

H.P.

Fri, January 22nd, 2021 2:08am

Author
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Hi!

Thank you for all of your feedback, I find it so helpful when people are kind about my writing but also give some constructive comments. As for the formatting, the way that I lay out my poems (a new line for each line of poetry) Booksie tends to format it differently, leaving large gaps between each of the lines that I'm not sure how to get rid of. If you knew anything about how to format poems on Booksie, I'd appreciate any information or tips you could give me.

Thanks again for reading it through,
Lily :)

Fri, January 22nd, 2021 12:07am

Archia

I really loved your poem. I felt like it captured that joy and excitement of writing and being swept away into new worlds. It had that sense of creative fun to it.

Fri, January 29th, 2021 1:16am

Author
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Thank you! It's great to hear that you enjoyed it and that it did exactly what it was meant to do - describing the feeling when you're transported into a new world whilst reading or writing.

Fri, January 29th, 2021 12:02am

Sharief Hendricks

This was so awesome !

I so enjoyed the feeling of being a creator of something that doesn't exist but that the world will come to know and enjoy...

Loved it !

Wed, February 17th, 2021 9:15am

Author
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Thank you so much, I've been trying to improve my poetry recently so that means a lot to me!

Wed, February 17th, 2021 2:05am

Burgerhicks80

This was a beautiful poem. Great work!

Tue, July 27th, 2021 2:55am

Author
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Thank you!

Sat, August 7th, 2021 4:40am

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