Read Please! I really need help!

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Other  |  House: Booksie Classic


Please comment on my work if you enjoy thanks! :)

Submitted: January 13, 2021

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PLEASE help me! I'm stuck!

Wed, January 13th, 2021 5:47pm

moa rider

If you're happy enough with your writing to post it, then it's good. As for what to write about... if you can't make it up, write from expreience or passion. Usianguke

Wed, January 13th, 2021 8:04pm


Visit one of the review Houses and ask if someone will be a beta reader for you.

Wed, January 13th, 2021 8:24pm

88 fingers

Just write....and the readers will read.

Wed, January 13th, 2021 10:55pm


Hey Dreamcatcher -

I had a look at "Yau's Discovery" and the first thing I noticed is, your writing lacks the structure that's required when dialogue is used.

A lot of writing rules can be bent, even broken - but the rules of punctuation - particularly those surrounding dialogue - are rules that can turn a reader off, because it A) interrupts the flow of your story as you go from descriptions and action to dialogue and back again, and B) it can make it confusing to the reader, and leave them wondering: which character is speaking which dialogue?

I do not have these rules memorized myself - but I make sure my writing is solid before I put it out there for others by reviewing and editing, and using references.

This reference will help you structure your dialogue correctly:

You don't have to learn each lesson: Look at the examples (you have to scroll down a bit) and simply make your dialogue's punctuation match the examples you see. It just takes time and care - and you'll learn some of these rules as you go.

Another trick is, keep a favorite published book on your desk as you write - you can mark pages full of dialogue with multiple speakers with a post-it, then go back and copy the structure when you have multiple speakers on a page. Grab a "Harry Potter" book - they're filled with multiple-speaker dialogue.

If you can clean up all your dialogue with proper punctuation, it allows the reader to enjoy your story without having to stop and find their place. I see your Chapter 4 is written more like a script than a book: You're stating the name MAY and then a block of dialogue beneath with no quotation marks, etc.; take a look at how character dialogue is written in a real book and you'll see how much more naturally it flows when it's not written in a script format.

Good luck!

Thu, January 14th, 2021 12:08am


Thanks guys! This was helpful! :)

Thu, January 14th, 2021 2:37am

Craig Davison

Dear Dreamcatcher 10,
never worry about what anyone thinks about your writing. I never do and occasionally someone likes whatever I do. It's not important. Write what you feel at that special moment when you put pen to paper and express yourself. It is a mere process and we hopefully get better at it as we learn to express ourselves. Honestly! I write about my cats and my miserable life in a one-horse town, and about the women who'll never love me. It's terribly funny. Don't worry, just write what you feel. At the end of the day you are the only critic who counts. If you like it and are proud of it, that's all that matters. If anyone criticises your work tell them to fuck off and write something better. I always do. Cheers, Craig.

Thu, January 14th, 2021 8:17am

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