I Want You So Much

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Status: In Progress  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

taken from my book, "Our Founded Feelings"

I Want You So Much

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Into your heart, I will go

You'll lose me in time

__just so you know

I know you'll love me

If I get my teeth fixed

I just know you will

It'll be a thrill

Just swallow these pills

__and thizz with me

You'll love it, I swear

They're Blue Dolphins

Literally, "the best"

Like you are

__to the heart in my head

Or the head in my heart

How ever you wanna look at it

But, seriously, you're mine

In just a matter of time

Now gimme a kiss

I want your love

And I mean "all of it"

-

02-26-'21 #1

D. L. Cannon


Submitted: March 15, 2021

© Copyright 2021 DLCannon. All rights reserved.

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Ezra Enzo

Fantastic job! Love poems are an easy task, but a difficult objective to make unique. You sound so natural, ambitious and just "straight-off-the-top-of-your-head"-like in this poem, unlike many other poems I've seen. It's creative and original in a certain sense. I recommend my poem "Her", which also involves my take on love but in a different way. Great work DL - E.E

Mon, March 15th, 2021 7:19pm

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Wow! Nobody's ever gave such an extensive compliment on my writing about something I rarely ever right about(positive love poems, I mean). Thank you! From the bottom of my heart.....

Mon, March 15th, 2021 2:20pm

Roxanne Byrne

Wow, this really took me back to my days in high school when I would do ecstasy at clubs with friends. I don't do it anymore, but it is quite a unique experience. You did a fantastic job of communicating that kind of euphoria and the "teeth fix" that comes with the need to chew on everything on X. I loved loved loved the part where you said "just swallow these pills... _and thizz with me". Correct me if this was not your intent, but the z's in "thizz" reminded me of the intense vibration of the bass at rave clubs. You could feel it and see it overtake everything. Lol, damn those were weird and fun days. Great poem!

Tue, March 16th, 2021 12:50am

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I do miss going to raves! Wish i could get the gang back together even of just to go to a rave clean.....memories! Thanks! [=

Thu, March 18th, 2021 6:22pm

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