For why this sudden rush of green?

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Status: In Progress  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

Thanks for all your comments and for asking me to write more. This poem is about growing grass and has spiritual overtones.

For Why this sudden rush of green ?

 

For Why this sudden rush of green ?

Lush grasses thrust a single beam

to greet earth’s warming, dawning gleam.

 

Close-flanked blades guard this foray.

This right to light this jousting sashay

pay present need with future assay.

 

Sucessful now each reach is crowned

around with tiny flowers abound -

ing, interlinked and interwound.

 

Each reticent, tiny bud unfurls,

and composite parts increase, uncurl

the flowering grass matures and hurls

 

A golden cloud, a consternation,

a dit-dit streamed communication

a fertile ooze, a new elation,

 

A lightened plea, an appalation,

a cry for self-continuation

a hope for future germination.

 

Sated and seeded the stem now bends

The rush of green its season ends

And life again to earth descends.

 

 


Submitted: June 10, 2021

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LE. Berry

So circular in the meaning...I loved this piece panteleon!

Thu, June 10th, 2021 5:35pm

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Thank you, LE.

Fri, June 11th, 2021 12:29am

Nikita Ahujh

A true and inspirational poem. Everything that has been set in motion will end. This way it will pave the path for something new.
Touché and keep writing!

Thu, June 10th, 2021 9:02pm

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Thank you for your kind words, Nikita. Yes, I'm writing whenever I can and wish you well also.

Fri, June 11th, 2021 12:30am

Alizzia Ward

That was a nice poem! I just love reading it for over an hour because of the way it just rhymes with each stanzas, But still, stay safe and keep writing!
-Alizzia

Fri, June 11th, 2021 3:29am

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I'm really glad you enjoyed my poem, Alizzia. Thank you for your good wishes and you stay well and happy also.

Fri, June 11th, 2021 12:28am

ShadyBrady

Here you have crafted a beautiful poem with a classical sophistication. Elegant in execution as it is simple of subject. You definitely have “the gift”.

Sat, June 12th, 2021 6:23pm

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Thank you. I am overwhelmed by your compliments.

Mon, June 14th, 2021 4:44am

Aleyson

Hi, panteleon! Just read your piece, and I am just enthralled with the flow of the poem. It was just seamless and fluid! The rhythm was just right in each stanza. Each stanza's rhyming was just perfect, and they really brought out the essence of what grass is. I love how it ended as well! You captured not only the vivid vision of green when readers read this, but also the calming sensation of being amongst luscious greenery. This is by far the most beautiful, elegant piece I've read this year. I mean really, you deserve the compliments. It is truly a work of art. Sorry omg but I really appreciate a good read and go way overboard with feelings XD I'll stop but you... keep writing! Saw that you are a new member to booksie! Welcome welcome! XD

Wed, June 16th, 2021 4:52pm

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Dear Aleyson,
Thank you so much for your amazing feedback and for taking the time to look at the rhythm and rhyme. I really appreciate your comment and I am really glad that my poem struck a chord with your own love of nature.

Thu, June 17th, 2021 12:42am

anand bose

Very eloquent use of imagery.

Sat, June 19th, 2021 2:51am

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That's very kind of you, anand bose.

Sat, June 19th, 2021 12:31am

Juicyberry

Wow... you really have a great ah-mazing talent in writing...
For me the vocabulary was a little difficult har har
I will study more and learn from your poems!
ps great use of sensory words and discription! and expression!

Sat, June 19th, 2021 6:36pm

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Thank you so much for your comment and the detailed review of my work. That is very kind.

Sun, June 20th, 2021 12:56am

john patrick brunty

Hello, Panteleon. Your prose is interesting to me. I tend to write poetry in the style myself. I liked your poem because it is unique and refreshing . The description are clear. Good job!

Sun, July 11th, 2021 9:36pm

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Thank you John for your kind comment.

Mon, July 12th, 2021 12:16am

Kevin Snow

Very elegant poem. So descriptive for a simple lifeform. I like it. This poem grows on me.

Sun, July 11th, 2021 10:34pm

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Thank you Kevin for your kind comment.

Mon, July 12th, 2021 12:15am

anand bose

The use of imagery is so beautiful, vivid and poignant

Mon, July 12th, 2021 9:14am

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Thank you anand bose for taking the time to read my poem.

Mon, July 12th, 2021 6:12am

Rick Starbridge

Thanks for directing me to this lovely poem. It reminds me of my gardening time in the spring and ends with a nod to the cycle of life.

Mon, July 12th, 2021 6:46pm

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Thank you Rick for your feedback.

Tue, July 13th, 2021 9:36am

ThatGreenWriter

Wow. That was amazing! I loved the rhyme scheme you decided to use, and I think the themes you chose to include in this poem fit really well with the structure. Do you use the rhyme scheme and structure in all of your poems, or do you prefer to switch it up?

Tue, July 13th, 2021 4:00pm

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Dear ThatGreenWriter,

Thank you for commenting on my poem with such enthusiasm. As for meter I usually write lines of four feet in length, sometimes iambic sometimes trochaic. An iambic foot has a rising rhythm so the two syllable foot rises to a stress.

For WHY/ this SUD/ den RUSH/ of GREEN,

is a line of four iambic feet.

This is the first time that I have written a poem with three lines per stanza. I found it very exciting to break away from a four/six or eight line stanza.
Thank you for your feedback and your interesting questions.

Tue, July 13th, 2021 9:44am

xavier jarrell

I really loved the pacing. This is truly a life metaphor!

Wed, July 14th, 2021 3:27pm

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Thanks xavier, for your enthusiasm!

Wed, July 14th, 2021 9:21am

S.K Nguyen

The rhythm of this poem created a stable and peaceful flow. It felt as you began with an innocence that matured to an enlightened culmination. Thank you for directing me to your poem.

Thu, July 15th, 2021 6:18pm

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Thank you for reading my poem and for your kind comments.

Sat, July 17th, 2021 10:40am

xRs

Greatly represents the point cornered with beautiful construction. Themes and rhymes scheme are beautifully flowing. The whole poem presents itself on wonderful manner.
Human life is quite unique, Panteleon
And this poem itself is a wonder of it. Loved it.

Sat, July 17th, 2021 5:08am

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Thank you for reading my poem xRs and for your considered review.

Sat, July 17th, 2021 10:41am

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