Dream Demon

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Flash Fiction  |  House: Review Chain


What next? An adventure? Desire? Nostalgia? Or something real weird?

Ignore the beeping, it doesn’t matter.

Look, it’s your second grade teacher. Wouldn’t you like to tell him a thing or two, eh?

Yes, that’s your brother outside. He’ll pick you up later, don’t worry.

Oh, wow! That pterodactyl sure made quick work of Mister Kinsey. Did you know pterodactyls aren’t really dinosaurs? As always, Jurassic Park lied to you. 

Quick, let's follow it in your race car. Yes, your race car. Vroom vroom we go!

Dodge those banana peels! Careful, almost hit that astronaut. Look out!

...That was a scare, huh? But don’t worry, a crash can’t hurt you! You’re a superhero!

Hmm? What feels familiar? Being able to fly like this? Now we can catch that pterodactyl!

Zig, zag, pow. We’ve got ‘em on the ropes, now-

Ignore it. No, that’s not your mother’s voice. Do not follow it.

Oh no, a distraction! A meteor is about to hit earth! You’d better stop it!

Hurray! The world is saved! NASA is giving you a medal for being so cool.

Later. Your brother will pick you up later. No, he didn’t already pick you up from school, you’re misremembering.

Hey! What’s your favorite food? Ice cream AND pizza? Never would’ve guessed. Dig in, that unicorn didn’t deliver it for nothing.

I said dig in. Don’t listen to that. No, it's not them. I don’t care if they’re crying!

...I’m sorry. Don’t leave. I didn’t mean to yell. Come on, there’s so much fun to be had. Just a little longer. Just until the beeping stops, okay?

It’s just an alarm clock. Sleep in just a little longer, it's Saturday. Your brother is fine, there was no accident.

No, that wasn’t a doctor. Wait, don’t open your eyes-

 
 

 

 


Submitted: July 05, 2021

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Burgerhicks80

Interesting story. I liked the whimsical feel of it. I made one correction for you.

Mon, July 5th, 2021 5:17pm

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That's what I get it for not double checking it. Thanks for the save, and thanks for the compliment! Was definitely going for a whimsical story with a slightly eerie feel.

Mon, July 5th, 2021 11:27am

XCulletto

This is so creative! What an intriguing idea, and very well executed. Although I am worried about the brother now.

Wed, July 14th, 2021 4:43am

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Thank you!

Wed, July 14th, 2021 1:34pm

Archia

It definitely had that whimsy of a dream and how it kind of flits from one random thing to the next. I liked that sense of randomness and the uncontrollable nature of where a dream will take you. I was a little confused about whether something had happened to their brother or not. There were things that suggested something had, but I wasn't sure if those are things in the dream or if it's reality mixing in with a dream. But maybe it's meant to be ambigious, dreams are quite ambiguous anyway. It was very enjoyable to read this snippet of a dream.

Sun, July 18th, 2021 10:47pm

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Thank you! And yeah, it was left to be ambiguous. My goal was to hint at the car accident that the brother and the kid crashed in, and that the kid was in a coma in a hospital bed. The "Dream Demon" was this eerie happy face trying to convince the child to never wake up and slowly die (ergo that line about the "beeping". It tried to convince the kid it was just an alarm clock, but it was actually the beeping of a heart monitor. That's also why the kid saw a doctor right before waking up, because his eyes were beginning to open and he could see some vague details of the hospital). I feel like I did leave it a bit too ambiguous, but I hope I was able to get that eerie/whimsical vibe across that I was aiming for.

Sun, July 18th, 2021 6:30pm

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